SCP-500
I wonder what giving him SCP-500 would do. Someone put a request in there please.
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I think it's fairly obvious that Herr Chirurg would have a strong opinion about the works of Mary Shelley.
The question is, what kind of strong opinion. Would he find it offensive? Hilarious? Inspirational? Conceptually pathetic?
"He's doing it all wrong! You use LIVE bodies, nto dead ones! Frankenstein was an amateur!"
But in GERMAN.
(account deleted)…A German doctor with patchy skin who wears a long coat and carries his implements in an old-fashioned bag. Oh, and he has an affinity for performing invasive surgery on people without consent, just because he wants to.
That sounds more than a little like Faust VIII from the manga Shaman King.
It reminds me of The Thief from nWoD.
Upvoted. Good concept and polished well.
Nazis? World War I? Something seems off here…
He claims to have been 'dreadfully normal' before World War I started, and claims to have worked for the Nazi party, even if he found their goals 'boringly simple.'
That's two different claims. He was normal, then WWI started, then, somewhere between 1919 and 1945, he worked for Nazi party.
Just bad phrasing, I suspect. Being that there are only about 20 years between WWI and WWII I suspect he was a young man, possibly at University before the first war, and by the time that the second happened he had "found his calling."
I suggest this article be rewritten for tone and to remove crosslinks so I can stop hating it.
I'm willing to do the rewrite, but a bit apprehensive — this is awfully highly rated for a sudden rewrite.
Rights is around, so if she thinks it could use it then I guess it'll happen.
Do it. This thing is old and long overdue for a rewrite anyways.
It's currently fine as is. Yoric, as much as we despise them, crosslinks are what tend to draw people deeper into the site.
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I believe that what I would like, though, if anybody was interested in rewriting, is just an overall cleanup of the article. If I submitted this article today, it wouldn't be approved- it's kitschy, had the dreaded "list of approved items", and everybody is sick to death of nazis. I guess I'd like to see if somebody could make it fit the current theme of the site better.
Or maybe that's just me hatin' on all my old shit.
Basically: Crosslinks are fine, but I'd like it to sound more professional.
I'm going to go through and making a large number of minor changes for tone by converting all uses of '542' to 'SCP-542', swapping a few words for more professional alternatives (the 'nice pair of slacks' line comes to mind), and so on. Just thought I'd drop a line here in case one of the staff wants to stop me, seeing as my last 'correction' to an old article got reverted. If no one objects I'll get on it tomorrow.
Don't do that. Needless edits are needless.
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I do like this, but it has a couple of lines that someone needs to fix because they hurt me terribly.
SCP-542 identified that they have been, at one time, a typical human of Caucasian descent, identifying as German in nationality.
"They"? "He" is used throughout the rest of the article. "They have been" is really awkward to read when referring to a single individual in the past tense. "Identified" is also an odd choice of verb there. Confirmed or claimed or stated would fit better, in my opinion. Something like "SCP-542 has stated that it [or he] was, at one time…"
Seemingly safe items such as sewing supplies have led to him making more than a rather well-tailored jacket for him, but also resulted in him restraining a Class D Personnel by sewing him to the mattress of the bed, before removing his kidneys and a portion of the liver.
"More than a rather well-tailored jacket for him". Firstly, I think that's "for himself". Secondly, how is a jacket "more than rather well-tailored"? Why would you even describe it like that? Suggestion: "Seemingly safe items, such as sewing supplies, have led him to demonstrate considerable proficiency in the tailoring of clothing. However, this also resulted in SCP-542 restraining a Class D personnel by sewing him to the mattress, before removing his kidneys and a portion of the liver."
I don't think I'll stop getting the urge to downvote this until someone cleans it up. Trying to parse it is giving me a headache, and the tone is too prosaic.
Eh, not really a fan of this one. Just doesn't feel 'clinical' enough, plus I was under the impression that you're supposed to refer to SCPs as 'it' not 'he'.
Withholding vote because I like the idea, just not really the execution.
I think this has a few glaring flaws, but they're overwhelmed by the excellence of the execution and overall idea.
+1
As noted above, there are some really wonky sentences here that could use a small tune-up.
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