Every time I think there's no more ways to do a good creepy doll, somebody goes and makes me upvote another one…
SCP-2116 / Discussion
Forum
» Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions
» SCP-2116
This is the discussion related to the wiki page SCP-2116.
A this point, I can safely say that this is terrific. Also, keep that thing faaaaar away from me.
Heheheheeheh… <slips doll under Fae's bed in the middle of the night…>
<Will whack MadCatUSA with an SCP as soon as I write one>
It feels like a lot of details about the doll that would normally be delegated to the description are scattered across the other sections of the article. When applied correctly, this kind of thing can work in favor of an article, but I don't think it works here. A bit of a confusing read initially, for me at least. Can't say I'm too crazy about the object itself either. Sorry, but this just isn't my thing.
Also,
The environment, decor, ambient temperature, and furnishings become altered to be more attractive to a pre-pubescent human female.
maybe instead say something like "altered to what is seen as typically attractive to pre-pubescent girls" because not all girls are going to enjoy the same things by default.
It feels like a lot of details about the doll that would normally be delegated to the description are scattered across the other sections of the article.
Could you provide some details please? Thanks!
Extra details on the nature and role of SCP-2116-1 and SCP-2116's effects on living things mainly. Seems to only be a problem to me, though.
I do like this, but the picture has some sort of filter, and I feel the Foundation would have a scientifical, clean, picture. But +1 anyway.
~🌸~Flower Power~🌸~
They might not, if you can't bring a modern camera into its field of effect without it becoming a daguerreotype camera. What you're seeing (the darkened corners and odd focus) is either the result of a fairly good photographer using an actual daguerreotype camera or pinhole camera projecting a round image onto a square plate, or a decent fake-up of that look.
furnishings become altered to be more attractive to a pre-pubescent human female
What kind of girl? How many girls like Victoriana? Which incidentally wouldn't feature pink things if we're being historically accurate. How many more would like to live in the undersea home of Spongebob Squarepants? Could the Foundation have experimented with girls from different backgrounds?
For every hour that SCP-2116 is not in the possession of SCP-2116-1, the region of altered reality expands by 1 meter
So if the item is unpossessed for a year…we're dealing with a Keter class object. Can it cause a reality-bending K-Class event over the whole world?
The subject, now designated SCP-2116-1
it might get confusing, having different -1s at different times. Use SCP-2116-1-1, SCP-2116-1-2 etc?
What kind of girl? How many girls like Victoriana?
Consider when the doll was manufactured.
So if the item is unpossessed for a year…we're dealing with a Keter class object. Can it cause a reality-bending K-Class event over the whole world?
Hehehehehehehehehehe….
The descriptions of the "failed" test subjects were terrible to read, and I enjoyed every part of it. A solid, creepy entry all around: +1!
My only real problem is with:
The environment, decor, ambient temperature, and furnishings become altered to be more attractive to a pre-pubescent human female. Tables will be set with a pink tea set with a teapot filled with a sweet red liquid, various sweet treats will manifest, and the table cover will become a lace tablecloth of a style popular during the mid-19th Century.
The first part is just way too over-reaching (and highly subjective) a statement. For example, I can't imagine that a young girl growing up in the poorest parts of Ethiopia, one living the high-life on 5th Avenue, and one from uh, darkest Peru would have that same ideal atheistic. I would kill the first sentence and just start it with "Tables will be set…"
This is really good! It's always nice to see things that have been done really well in the past be done again really well now.
The test subject sections were also really well done, there really aren't enough creepy transformations on the website, if the doll had just killed those people it wouldn't have been as interesting as you made it. Nice job again!
You know, as creepy as this is…it isn't that bad. What I mean is, it seems like it just wants a purpose. And a doll's purpose is to be played with. It apparently even asked the latest "victim" if she was okay with what was going to happen. Why else would she have said "yes"? +1 for being creepy and for having surprisingly sympathetic motivation. What it does is horrifying. But it's horrifying in the way a child who's killed someone is. They genuinely don't know they've done anything wrong.
Exactly what I was going for. Thank you for seeing that. :-)
I read a while back what Zyn had written about not basing a SCP off an object but rather finding an emotion and going from there. I thought about lonlieness and what a doll might feel if its owner abandoned it. The rest came surprisingly easily. It only took me about 20-30 minutes to write and didn't require all that much editing.
I love it when someone(in this case me) finds a strange sort of "thread" running through an SCP and it turns out that it was intentional. Don't get me wrong, SCPs that accidentally show you something deeper than what it seems to be are all well and good. But there's nothing quite like the joy in finding the real deal and the author confirming it. Good show, man.
This would've been a good article had you just stopped withe test just before the last one, but the last one is where all those pieces fell together juuuuust right and kicked it into "AWESOME" territory.
At first, I was dubious (creepy dolls being so so so common) but I enjoyed it +1
/forum/t-1085127/scp-2116#post-
page revision: 2, last edited: 15 Jan 2023 15:06
