SCP-2271 / Discussion

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When payday is less than your interest-

djkaktus 05 Jan 2015 08:16

I haven't written a Keter in a while. Felt like this was a good one to go on.

If you're too young to appreciate it yet, consider yourself fortunate. Debt sucks.

Anyway, my thanks to Djoric for inspiring this, TwistedGears for taking a look at it, and Sally Mae Financial Services for keeping me up at night.

As always, your comments, critiques and criticisms are welcome!

Edit: Image is from https://www.af.mil/News/Photos/igphoto/2000335407/ and is in the public domain.

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Ocean Planet 05 Jan 2015 08:31

As a university student, this hit home.

The writing is really good, and the skip is pretty interesting and unique!

Good job!

TRIGGER WARNING WTF

(account deleted) 05 Jan 2015 08:54

Hesitant upvote for the concept and mechanism. I've chatted with you on what I disliked. The last image does nothing for me.

Logan Armstrong 05 Jan 2015 09:08

Well, it's good. The idea is well depicted, and even though there are a few excerpts that made me giggle a bit, it's not going to stop me from (neutrally) upvoting the thing. Also, a nitpick.

Any and all Foundation personnel who become affected by SCP-2271 are to be considered KIA

Why K.I.A? Because they will eventually die? Wouldn't "irrecoverable" or even "M.I.A" work better?

Tom Thumb 05 Jan 2015 17:12

I think we are supposed to assume the SCP-2271-2 entities killed them.

Tom Thumb 05 Jan 2015 17:11

I like how topical this is, I suspect that's why people like it. Overall I found it OK, not that creepy, but still kind of interesting. It is an idea I haven't seen here before so that's good.

I was momentarily confused between the -1 and -A designations, that kind of interrupted my read through, but maybe that was just me.

Also, I found several spelling mistakes in the letter. Was that intentional?

Decibelles 05 Jan 2015 17:22

I like it, but find the final image too silly and the whole incident log too uh… I guess unneeded to be able to vote. Those things just make the skip come to a screeching halt when I was liking it. I guess my main problem is that it's hard to imagine the leap you need to make from "Site collecting 2271 materials" to "Site is in distress and oh yeah it detonated its nukes and sent a letter to the O5s for some reason". Won't shunting everything to Site-09 make the same thing happen again soon anyway, if the logic here is to be believed?

Again it's too much of a jump in the article to make, and I feel like even one incident log in between the discovery and the final incident log would make this a lot more believable.

djkaktus 05 Jan 2015 17:58

Good questions. To clarify:

The letter they sent over was one that a member of staff at Site-91 had received, which was followed by a site wide outbreak afterwards (during those eight hours). Shit spread fast, yo.

As for the different between the sites, Site-91 was just a high security site, while Site-09 is a solitary confinement site. They're not sure if it'll help, but it's a step.

Decibelles 05 Jan 2015 19:17

Hmm… I can buy Site-09, and the letter thing makes sense, but it still feels like too quick of scaling in terms of craziness for me to fully buy into it, if that makes sense.

djkaktus 05 Jan 2015 19:29

Nah, I absolutely get that.

The escalation was intended to show what something like this can do to small populations very quickly, where everybody is scrambling over each other to get their "debt" paid, even at the expense of tearing everybody limb from limb.

The device was activated because one person had the foresight to consider what might happen if an active site suddenly was completely without personnel, or only with personnel desperate to sell off everything they could get their hands on, including skips.

Requitefahrenheit 05 Jan 2015 19:44

Author, I like the intentional misspellings in the first letter. Did you do that for the sake of earriness? Or am I missing something?

Metaphysician 05 Jan 2015 23:13

I enjoyed reading this. Is this related to *the* Factory? If so, that is the only thing I didn't care for but I've never been much of a fan of that GOI; just not enough meat.

TL333s 06 Jan 2015 00:26

Anomalous student loans. 'Bout time someone made a Keter that was actually scary.

The last addendum doesn't really work, I don't think. It's not lolFoundation, because there's no "lol" to it, but… I guess what it does is ramp up the danger and drama without adding anything to the overall narrative. Novoting for the time being.

Pythy 06 Jan 2015 08:30

Very effective. Very scary. Well done.

The end of the world: Loan Sharks.

pootis spencer here 13 Jan 2015 15:13

Loan Sharks. Hmm…

Now there's an idea.

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