My Head Is On Fire And I'm (Not) Ok / Discussion

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What? No We Don't Wave Water Here! Just Throw Some Pudding On It!

Captain Kirby 14 Mar 2019 15:48

Ok, so doing an oneiroi format in 24ish hours was a bad idea, but also a good idea.

Thanks to Roget, Othellothecat, JackalRelated, aismallard, Stallmantic and Mortos for critique!

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Jenga Tower - https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Jenga_tower_with_vertical_pieces.JPG
Jellyfish - https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Moon_jellyfish_at_Gota_Sagher.JPG

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aismallard 14 Mar 2019 15:58

Nice work, well-executed format that kept my interest all the way through, with lots of variety, economical character development, and a compelling story despite its simplicity. Well done, it was enjoyable reviewing this last night while I slept. +1

ch00bakka 14 Mar 2019 16:13

#TimAllen +1

GoopLovesYou 14 Mar 2019 17:41

My Head Is On Fire And I'm (Not) Ok

You give love a bad name

GuardianNWC 14 Mar 2019 18:04

Haven't seen an Oneiroi tale in a while, this gave me a good chuckle. +1

notgull 22 Mar 2019 01:05

Damn this deserves to be rated higher. This is a creative, criminally underused format. It reminds me of SCP-4991 in some ways, although I cannot argue that it's more certainly executed better here. Although in comparison to faminepulse's original #Xiupania it's less of a stream of thought and more concrete, it still manages to create a solid story in this sort of pseudo-internet of random things.

My primary complaint is that it uses the same few sub-formats quite a few times over. There are consistent characters, yes, but in some ways I feel that that is a weakness. It doesn't feel like a global(?) phenomenon when it focuses on the same handful of users. In addition, although the ending is definitely fresh and is a good way to end this work, I saw it coming from a mile away, and even then it's still a little vague.

The good here definitely outweighs the bad, though. +1

Captain Kirby 22 Mar 2019 15:22

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed the piece!

My primary complaint is that it uses the same few sub-formats quite a few times over.

So… this is primarily due to the fact that I am not a formatting guru + jamcon. I think if I had more time with this piece I probably would've tried to vary things more. Maybe throw some instagram in there. I considered using the wikipedia subformat but I felt like an expositionary piece wouldn't quite fit. Although I do feel like the repetition gives more of an illusion of structure, I agree it kind of detracts from the collective vibes you're supposed to get from oneiroi

I saw it coming from a mile away

I have plans after jamcon voting is over to reel in the foreshadowing a little bit. make the advertisements more vague at the beginning and then have them grow more explicit as the piece goes on. I would do it now but some nerd decided we have to wait until voting is over to make any content changes. :P

+1 for a great story and a for making my least favorite GoI format interesting

Tyumen 15 Jun 2020 12:12

It's not funny, my head is on fire!

A wonderful post with wonderful formatting

Papa_Jaygo 15 Jun 2020 19:35

I really enjoyed the stuff I’ve read from this GOI and this is no exception. The tale itself was very fun to read. The thing I appreciate most is the formatting of the chats and the running gag of the VPN. The chats remind me of GAW. I know not everyone appreciates the ironic and sometimes anomalous homies but I do. This work was truly something to admire!