Signal for the Crack of Dawn / Discussion

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Light the sun

Gekkoguy 10 Mar 2019 17:24

This is something i didn't expect to make, but it ended up being made so who cares what i think. I had the idea since just before REAGANWEAPON released, but jamcon gave me the impetus to make it reality. Thank you for that

Title is a lyric from Jethro Tull's Thick as a Brick, for those keeping score

Thanks to all who supported me, and special thanks to Uncle Nicolini Ellie3 Ayers Arbiter_Soul ODSTDRAGON and Rounderhouse For proofing and Crit. this would not be here without you

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Uncle Nicolini 10 Mar 2019 18:15

As mentioned before, I do have some gripes with presentation and structuring but this isnt at all bad for a first article. I look forward to seeing more from you.

A Random Day 10 Mar 2019 19:26

The punchline isn’t stifled enough to be a shaggy dog story, especially since you give it away just before the ending. The writing itself isn’t bad, actually — there’s a few places where you’ve been overly flowery, but overall it flows well and just needs a bit more polish.

Gekkoguy 10 Mar 2019 19:34

thank you for taking the time to read it!

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NatVoltaic 10 Mar 2019 22:31

Seconding ARD. The story did draw me in and it has its highlights, but all around this needs trimming to make sure it reads with a good pace (especially in the action scenes). With editing done I could see this doing really well.

Gekkoguy 10 Mar 2019 23:18

I'll definitely try and refine this once jamcon is over and i can come back to this. for something made in ~36 hours, as well as my first published scp work, im happy with this. thanks for reading!

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Napalmdoctor556 01 May 2020 08:37

Absolutely loved this. Was a huge inspiration for me to get into writing for the site, and is a big part of the reason I have an account on here at all.

Trar 31 Aug 2021 19:59

I liked this a lot.