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The light guides thee

Nanoro 29 Oct 2014 16:46

Well, here's my latest. Have fun.

((NOTE: This scip has no relation to the boss from Terraria. Do not question if it is that, I am sick of hearing of it.))

Note: I appreciate comments far more than votes, so please, speak your mind!

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Tagliafierro 29 Oct 2014 17:23

Yay, you posted it!

Nanoro 29 Oct 2014 17:32

Eeeyup.

canaryfarmer 29 Oct 2014 18:24

I thought that it sounded like the Yellow Devil boss from Mega Man, myself. :)

Anyway, I enjoyed it quite a bit, and the present student/teacher connection between the monk and the object was unexpected and a great additional layer. I would love to know how the Foundation found out about this thing, but it's not a big deal. I also bet it smells terrible!

+1!

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Nanoro 29 Oct 2014 19:59

Well, since it had clearly been in the ocean, I always figured some fishing vessel could've caught it in its net, and the Foundation finding out through the radio frequencies (if that would be the case, then prolly the crew is included in the mass).

Dr Hush 29 Oct 2014 19:45

An interesting take on the idea of a gestalt creature. A few oddities of phrasing seem jarring to me though.

+ Suggestions

normally it follows a usual composition

Could you say "normally it adopts a default configuration", or something similar?

a grid of bones

Is it actually a lattice, or is it more of a scaffold?

not require extraneous sustenance

What does 'extraneous' mean here? If you mean 'sustenence is extraneous to it's needs' then you don't need to use the word at all.

Any creature touching the mass will be absorbed and "skinned"

Maybe something like "Any living creature touching SCP-2059 will be absorbed into its mass, but keratinous material (skin, hair and nails) is discarded."

Nanoro 29 Oct 2014 20:01

Mmh, phrasing isn't one of my strengths. I'll give your suggestions a closer gander a bit later, but a few of them do sound better.

NomadMonad 29 Oct 2014 20:50

I'm a little confused by the containment procedures. Why is it so important that the chamber be glossy? I'm guessing it has something to do with this:

Spoiler

SCP-2059-1: Why is there so little light? He cannot see anything.

…but I'm not really seeing how they got from that to "give it a really shiny cell".

Nanoro 29 Oct 2014 21:14

Well, it needs to be pretty clean in order to remain slippery, otherwise it would eventually climb out.

TL333s 29 Oct 2014 23:00

I think what works about this is you've got a monster what incorporates people into itself, and a dude inside it who can talk to us, and he is just totally okay with this situation. And not even in a creepy "I am the chosen one and have become one with a higher power" way, he's just totally zen about everything.

LordSpy 30 Oct 2014 05:09

You pulled it off, yay. Even if in the back of my mind there's still a (superficial) resemblance to SCP-171, this one's considerably more interesting, even while staying concise.

Well earned +1.

E: You're due to personnel page (and have been for while), BTW.

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Nanoro 30 Oct 2014 06:10

Heh, thanks for the compliments.

And yes, I know. But right now I only have 2 tales and 2 scips; in my books, that's not enough yet. When I make an author page, I want it to be presentable. We'll see after my next scip.

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Fredegar1 30 Oct 2014 13:36

+1 for squick and the Addenda. Although, I think we are getting to the point of having too many flesh blobs/body horror skips.

Petrograd 01 Nov 2014 21:13

So, I thought the "Garblord" and "Farshor" lines were a bit narmy, although I don't want to complain too hard about that because I actually think it's really neat to have the researchers trying to write things down. Also, some of the word choice was a bit off, as Kapitano largely covered.

Still, those are minor points. I liked this one a lot, and I especially liked how the first things on the list were a blue whale and a giant squid. Kind of how I imagine the thing getting started. +1

Nanoro 04 Nov 2014 11:36

Added a picture, credit goes to Faminepulse. Ain't he a great fellow?

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Elenee FishTruck 09 Oct 2019 23:48

As there's no indication the image was made of cc-compliant components, the image has been removed.

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