SCP-4471 / Discussion

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Author Note

Pedantique 26 Feb 2019 10:20

Apologies to the people I toss drafts at and then decide it's ready for posting anyway. I know that must be obnoxious. Thank you all.

Also, thanks LiterallyMechanical for responding to the draft thread.

Original image source is here.

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Re: Author Note

LiterallyMechanical 27 Feb 2019 03:59

o7

Mortos 26 Feb 2019 11:12

I like this, so I've upvoted, but that list in the addendum is completely lost on me. I feel like it must be referencing something, but I have no idea what.

Pedantique 26 Feb 2019 11:49

Without saying too much (and probably saying too much anyway):

The semi-spoilers:

What's associated with hoarding big piles of treasure, eating sheep (and occasionally people), and might get shot at with vertical rockets in modern times?

That said, I clearly haven't done enough to make the premise clear in the article. I thought I did enough to fix that, but evidently not. I'll consider how to resolve this.

Mortos 26 Feb 2019 12:04

Ah, yeah I get what you are going for. Not sure I would have ever gotten that from the article though.

ETA: You know, now that you've pointed out what this is, I actually love this idea. Raises a lot of questions that would lead to very interesting tales, I feel.

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Pedantique 26 Feb 2019 12:09

I made a change that I had been a bit hesitant about during the drafting process which should help somewhat. Thanks for the feedback on it!

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aismallard 26 Feb 2019 16:39

Ohhhh. Initially I thought it was a joke about lizard people running the world because of the shedded skin. I like this version better.

Crashington 26 Feb 2019 11:43

Im with Mortos here, although the start did not really grip me enough to excuse the (for how i understood it ) pretty disconnected second part.
Maybe I am just missing something but I do not feel like the POI is really chracterized and I do not get what use all those different objects have.

Because i like the idea of anomalous fees being used for (what I am guessing is) the moneymaking schmeme of some dude abd i feel like there is more to this I do not understand right now I will novote for now.

Genshed 26 Feb 2019 23:00

I was delighted by the weirdness and completely missed the inference. Thank you for the semispoiler!

Laonasa 26 Feb 2019 23:44

Honestly the start didn't really, uh, catch me from the start, but the static object list was the one that did me in. The bones entry, especially, just because it was so odd, I suppose.

Llinl 28 Feb 2019 17:25

It is a nice concept even though I did not get what it was referring to at first. It might need a little bit more proofreading, you have for example placed Copenhagen, the capital of Denmark, as a part of Sweden.
A bit of a novote from me so far but I will keep an eye on it incase it gets updated.

Pedantique 28 Feb 2019 17:42

Whoops. I think I was referring to Denmark in an earlier draft and moved it for some reason. Thanks for the catch.

OccultistMave 28 Feb 2019 17:44

The bit at the end is subtle, but a little too subtle. It's good, but that note at the end needs to be a bit more obvious.
No vote.

Pedantique 28 Feb 2019 17:49

I'm not going to write a note at the end where a researcher goes "Oh, it's a X," because that takes away the joy of realization and is generally a pretty tired point. That said, since the realization clearly isn't working for some people, I'm open to suggestions.

OccultistMave 28 Feb 2019 17:59

collapsible to stop spoilers.

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Maybe add a bit to the armor saying there is some damage caused by the metal being reheated. The missile part through me off because it looked more like someone messed up disarming it, not like a dragon stopping it

SnakepersonHOA 22 Oct 2019 03:57

Another collapsible

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So is the POI actually the dragon or is it just using her account? However I totally got that it was a dragon.

Pedantique 27 Nov 2019 23:40

I had written it with the intent of it being the former explanation since it's also using her legal property, but I can see where the ambiguity comes from.