SCP-4119 / Discussion

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If Looks Could Kill

Weryllium 01 Feb 2019 20:26

First (of hopefully a bunch) skip of FEBRUARY. Been working on this for a while. Thanks to XilasCrowe, plaguebearer, aconfusedfish, Leveritas, and The Great Hippo for reading the draft.
Thanks to 9Volt for motivation.

Images:

• http://www.publicdomainfiles.com/show_file.php?id=13515830414094 public domain
• https://commons.m.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Titan_rocket_explosion.jpg public domain

 

She's not alone.

Last edited on 01 Feb 2019 20:52 by Weryllium Show more

heheeh

XilasCrowe 01 Feb 2019 21:00

M8-Crowe

Yes…YES…IT BEGINS!

I S P R E A D

Can we give 'splosion girl the 'splosion sunglasses

aconfusedfish 01 Feb 2019 21:15

I helped!

clubby789 01 Feb 2019 21:34

Just to make sure I'm getting this, the liquid constantly appears on anything it looks at, and if it's within 700m, it will explode?

Weryllium 01 Feb 2019 21:50

The liquid "automatically" appears on anything it looks at that's within 700m. If it's looking at something, say, 800m away, it has to consciously force the liquid to appear.

It's usually gonna explode on its own pretty quickly because it's nitroglycerin, no matter what range.

Drblackbox 01 Feb 2019 23:28

Should've been a movie IMO.

PeppersGhost 02 Feb 2019 19:16

Neat, I guess, but there's not much here to get invested in. It's kinda like reading two pages out of a comic book. Feels like a small segment of a larger whole, rather than a satisfying self-contained piece of fiction.

serpentrose 02 Feb 2019 19:48

Thank you for saying what I was trying to figure out how to say.

Steaming 03 Feb 2019 06:00

My thought was that this was written purely as background for a tale. Can we get a link to the tale?

If not, I feel like a post-containment interview is in order.

Weryllium 03 Feb 2019 07:10

small segment of a larger whole

That's more a feature than a bug. Sorry that what's here wasn't enough for you.

morgenthegrey 05 Feb 2019 15:54

Yeah, the "destroys anything it looks at" thing is too close to Cyclops from the X-Men for my taste. But if there's more, I look forward to reading it.

augmentedspartan 04 Feb 2019 02:41

The premise itself isn't enough to carry the article, which leaves little else. I feel that in order for an anime-style super human, with named moves to boot, to work the article should just go balls to the wall and have several logs about the Foundation attempting to capture the skip a la Hollywood action. Right now there isn't much to it but a bit of vague world-building which didn't do anything for me.

Weryllium 04 Feb 2019 04:10

At least two people said it was "too action-movie-y" during crit and I revised accordingly. Maybe I should reverse that.

augmentedspartan 05 Feb 2019 00:40

It would be more interesting if you extended the capture scene to a couple logs and show foundation agents having to outsmart her, rather than a lucky tackle. It doesn't necessarily have to be a drawn out action sequence, but something that makes the anomaly stand out more than just exploding things a few times.

(account deleted) 05 Feb 2019 00:38

The Encounter Log is easily the best part of this article.

Khaim 08 Feb 2019 06:28

I'm confused by the containment procedures. They seem designed to instantly explode any generated liquid. Wouldn't it be better to avoid doing that? Maybe prevent any liquid from being generated in the first place?

Weryllium 08 Feb 2019 07:18

The idea here is that it's designed to get rid of the liquid as soon as it forms, without giving it a chance to possibly build up.

AgentWilson 05 Mar 2019 18:14

Small amounts won't cause too big of a problem. It's when it builds up that it gets tricky. And there's no indication that they have a means of preventing the liquid from forming.

AwareWeb 10 Oct 2020 08:41

Will there be anything to shed light on whatever the Hell she is talking about?

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