SCP-3814 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page SCP-3814.

CubicNewt7 20 Jan 2019 02:08

This concept is great, but you explained it to much. Leave more about how it works out and try redacting a few more things.
That speech log was great btw, if a bit cheesy.

thewalkindude 20 Jan 2019 03:17

I like this a lot, but there are some typos and wonky grammar that need to be fixed.

Junior Crit Staff-Post - Info

Reverend Fox 20 Jan 2019 09:06

— Disregard this. I had too many windows open and posted this to the wrong thread.

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Last edited on 20 Jan 2019 09:08 by Reverend Fox Show more

Update: All fixed, +1

mouse_potato 20 Jan 2019 18:12

Now that you have not only fixed the issues but implemented all the optional suggestions as well,¹ I wish I could upvote this SCP twice.

Good luck with ratings!

Footnotes

1. Third party readers, see 22/1/2019 revision for details.

Last edited on 23 Jan 2019 16:25 by mouse_potato Show more

Re: Decent idea, will upvote when fixed.

Utylike 20 Jan 2019 18:53

Thank you for an honest critique and suggestions. I would be delighted if you could help me with the grammar and vocabulary issues, as for the rest, I will think about it and attempt to apply your ideas to the article.

Thanks for everything!

Re: Decent idea, will upvote when fixed.

mouse_potato 22 Jan 2019 10:26

No problem!

I fixed the object class spelling and started fixing the 1st Addendum.

I also added one more thing to my suggestions.

P.S. Can you review my SCP draft when you have time? (press here)

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Re: Decent idea, will upvote when fixed.

Utylike 23 Jan 2019 13:54

Great. Thank you! I can definitely use some of your ideas.

EDIT: I did make some changes to the original using your ideas, hope you like it more this way because I surely do.

As for your own draft, I liked it maybe a little too long for what it seems to be but really good.

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Thanks!

mouse_potato 23 Jan 2019 16:13

I'm not sure if I can shrink it (Maybe by removing the recovery log transcript, although I'd rather not do that - I already collapsed it), but I appreciate the feedback anyway.
As for the final review, I'll update my initial post.

(account deleted) 20 Jan 2019 22:37

The concept seems a bit wacky and like a joke SCP at the start, but as you read into it things become more clear.

The grammar in my opinion is alright, nothing special but what I would expect from usual SCP.

That’s a +1 from me

BenBlack 23 Jun 2020 22:45

Well, the turn this article took surprised me.

I am not experienced but in the interview, aren't the doctors supposed to act more professionally ?

Aside from that, I really enjoyed it. So that's a +1 from me.

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