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It is. There's bugs in our image blocks that prevent me from doing much more than I have.

The previous image wasn't cc compliant, and the new one isn't oriented horizontally.

Re: Author Post by DrMagnusDrMagnus, 27 Jul 2017 00:40

I added a link to Magnus's essay at the top of the essay as well. Crosslinking ahoy!

by ghostchibighostchibi, 27 Jul 2017 00:37

No punchline, and neither the "fake Italian accent" or "increasingly frustrated researcher" bits provide any amusement for me. I'm not sure this really adds anything to the -Js that wasn't already there.

by psulpsul, 27 Jul 2017 00:32
psulpsul 27 Jul 2017 00:10
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-3071

There's nothing really here. The effect is basic, there are no characters and the hints at story go nowhere.

by psulpsul, 27 Jul 2017 00:10

I've got a few:

  • "Whimsical" items, like toys and clowns. They're either played straight and boring, wacky and insufferable, or grimdark to the point of parody.
  • Anything that involves an enormous narrative with exploration logs and everything, and the payoff is basically "Oh, hey, zombies."
  • Anything in which researchers just off a ton of D-class without any sort of reasonable explanation other than the Foundation consisting entirely of sociopaths.
  • Almost anything where the first sentence of the description includes the Latin name for a bird, plant or insect.

After reading this, I was left rather confused and had more questions than answers.

dankaardankaar 26 Jul 2017 23:39
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-3284

If a human subject places this hat upon their head, SCP-3284-4 will affix itself to its position. The subject then becomes SCP-3284-1, and transformation 3284-a immediately begins.

At this point, your article is suffering from complexity issues, especially since there's no -b instance and thus, no real reason to seperate -1 into further subinstancing. In effect, -1 is both the affected person and the resulting behavior. It gets even worse, as said person is overriden by the personality of a captain, which is subsequently labelled as -3, so it's technically all three.

In short, you have placed three seperate instances onto one individual. KISS1 applies here; why does this single individual need three seperate instances to describe what happens? It'd be much simpler to designate it as -1, noting that it describes the personality if the csptain overriding the subject, and is capable of telepathic communication with the -2 instances.

by dankaardankaar, 26 Jul 2017 23:39

I read that first part… And instantly I just thought "Goddamnit Kain stop being adorable". Is it Kain? Because 'Sharply Dressed Talking Dog' sounds like Kain to me.

by SwitchieSwitchie, 26 Jul 2017 23:38

This is painfully tragic and I love it. The details on the Antimemetics Div and other Foundation working are cool, and this also a good lead in for what'll be happening in Five5 as well.

+1


I write stuff. Yipee.

by 9Volt9Volt, 26 Jul 2017 23:37

Just some spelling fixes needed.
Some really obvious, like high and low case after points and commas.

I finally get it.

You pulled a multi cliché with box, sphere, insanity, creation of abnormal items and only one must know, but you somehow made it work for me.

But this should properly be an area.
Still have no idea why the vault must be watched by persons and not via camera.
The whole point with only one must know still rubes me the wrong way thou.

Question why did the unknown doctor not die after 23 days?
He/she was defiantly infected and if his/her medicine and the other measures worked for years
than there should always be more than one on the case (in case one goes nuts).

Re: My first SCP by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 26 Jul 2017 23:31

Aw, the poor thing, no wonder it's so confused :( it's hooked put to a MacBook.

(Also +1)


It isn't a party unless you summon a lesser demon.

by VaraxousVaraxous, 26 Jul 2017 23:26

Till I was 5, I was afraid of balloons. For some reason, the sound of a balloon exploding along with the crying of other infants made me thought their explosions were capable of causing wounds, and thus I didn't get close to them for a long time.

I really, really like this series (which I'm commenting on as a whole). Apart from what Roget said about it being great historical SCP-verse fiction, I also like the unique ways in which you're incorporating SCP-verse tensions (the conflict between the anomalous factions) with historical political and ethnic ones. It's also really solid prose; your command over dialogue and the small ways in which people interact with each other (the ending scene of Blazing Searchlight and Lucija's initial entrance into the church come to mind).

I think there are a few spots where things could be polished up, although these are certainly nitpicks. In this tale, I had some trouble following the first scene, because you're juggling a lot of things at once: Lucija's reflections on the altar ceremony, characterizing her sister, exposition on how the events of the last tale have affected Rijeka, and the CotBG revival. While it's cool how you look through all of these things through the lens of Lucija's conservatism, it's still a lot to follow. I also felt like there were some parts in the scene in the congregation where you slightly over-explain Lucija's thoughts when you're already doing a good job showing them through her actions.

Another nitpick—it'd have been cool to get a link to the previous tale in the top of the page, because I first read this by seeing it in .lc, and I had no idea I was reading the second installment of a series.

In all, this is a super good (and underrated) tale series, and I'm really looking forwards to reading more of it.

by ChubertChubert, 26 Jul 2017 23:13

Are we talking the start of a Bug based Canon? with the way SCP-2794 is written it makes a stream of bug tales and scips possible.

Re: Bug Poo Cult by Alfred HitchcockAlfred Hitchcock, 26 Jul 2017 23:11

Good progress on your part.
I would try to fix the

exceeds the ability of any of any individual subject before their exposure to SCP-XXXX.

Than i would suggest giving the 2 Ds names in the interview.

The Reason of urgency should properly not be redacted and perhaps find another way of saying Super-organism.

Re: "Fluidic AI" by Meta WonderratMeta Wonderrat, 26 Jul 2017 23:10
NaxinDNaxinD 26 Jul 2017 23:04
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-3284

In general, there are a lot of commas used throughout this entire document (far too much to list)

100 commas altogether, according to the Ctrl + F option.


Wubba Lubba Dub Dub!

by NaxinDNaxinD, 26 Jul 2017 23:04

I spent FOUR months on this thing and I am still very uncertain about its quality but life is too short and I have other content backed up behind it, so, here. [chucks it messily on the table, walks away in a huff]

I'm so bad at writing characters. I find it so hard to write in anybody's voice other than my own. The other problem is when the characters want the conversation to go in a different direction from what I wanted. I have stuff to cover, you idiots! I had all this great conflict dialogue written for you!

Mnugh.

by qntmqntm, 26 Jul 2017 23:01

When you can't help but raise a slight chuckle every time you process a shed made by the Keter Plastic compaby.

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