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That was incredible. Top tier dialogue. Top tier characters.

+1 by WizzBlizzWizzBlizz, 31 Oct 2020 05:04

Hello everyone

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Re: LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOOOO by WizzBlizzWizzBlizz, 31 Oct 2020 04:46
RiemannRiemann 31 Oct 2020 04:43
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-166

This - it's ultimately so short as to be meaningless. There are no characters, there's not particularly a plot, and the mystery of who the father is is not actually engaging.

by RiemannRiemann, 31 Oct 2020 04:43

This rewrite is better than the original, but only because its issues aren't rooted in misogyny and fetishization. Its biggest problem is still that its women aren't characterized. SCP-166 doesn't do much except restate bits of her backstory we already got in the description. She and Father Davis both needed more screentime to be compelling or sympathetic. Worse, the mother goddess isn't even a character. She gets fridged to make Alto Clef more morally complex because he loves his daughter but killed her mother.

But Clef shouldn't become the de facto protagonist halfway through the article. His only points of sympathy are that he A) works for the Foundation, B) loves his daughter, and C) is Alto Clef. He isn't a good guy even in his most popular depictions. Worse, his dialogue is centered around the frankly obvious point that the Foundation are cold to the point of cruelty sometimes. That's not a compelling theme, nor is it one that services these characters.

This article needs to be rewritten again to actually characterize SCP-166 and The Goddess. Ideally, we would learn how The Goddess and Clef actually talked to and loved each other, follow SCP-166 as she uncovers the truth about her pagan heritage and her father's sins, learn why Clef chose ideology over love, and make SCP-166's Catholicism affect her characterization and how she thinks of him. There's potential for a compelling tragedy about family, religion, and ideology here, but what's presented is an extremely superficial tragedy that doesn't effectively use its religious elements or develop its characters in a compelling way.

by A Random DayA Random Day, 31 Oct 2020 04:35

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@forbiddenquest by LuxkeeperLuxkeeper, 31 Oct 2020 04:26

Honestly, I'm pretty down for this idea, but you're gonna actually have to choose one of your three potential paths.

I'll briefly touch on all three.

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The world is healing…

LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOOOO by pr0m37h3umpr0m37h3um, 31 Oct 2020 03:35

WELL. That's a wrap on this story. I've been beyond lucky to have written this story with my teammates, who time and again had brilliant ideas, and wonderful solutions when it seemed we were writing ourselves into a corner. I couldn't have done this by myself, I can't even imagine trying. This was a sweeping narrative, despite our attempt to keep things as grounded as possible.

Thank you to all the readers and people who have come to me or other members of the team with words of encouragement. It's been a lovely experience.

Thank you to my teammates: Calibri BoldCalibri Bold, NagirosNagiros and redredredredredred for helping me tell this huge sprawling tale series.

Crit by: Calibri BoldCalibri Bold, NagirosNagiros, Dr MonedDr Moned, and as always:HarryBlankHarryBlank

Annnnnnnnnd don't be surprised if you see some of these characters again, I am certainly not done with Carlotta and Lucretia especially… but I have come to love all these characters in the Resurrection setting specifically.

…Sophia Light will return

Author Post by Grigori KarpinGrigori Karpin, 31 Oct 2020 03:25

SCP 5161 is a chamber made by instances SCP 1000 that is on a ledge on Mt. ████████, the door and walls of this chamber is made of unknown materials at the moment that through past interaction proved indomitable, but appears to be granite, after an unprecedented opening of the door the researchers found intricate carvings, alongside SCP-5161-A, SCP-5161-A is a liquid inside a pod, that of origin has not yet been identified,

Deleted at -20 and three votes.

Mirroring what Nagiros and cybersqyd have said above, I am unclear as to the connection between the camera and this anomalous being. As stated the woman took a picture of the anomalous being, so it existed free of the existence of the camera.

Moreover, I don't know what the narrative is concerning: a) the woman who's camera was found or b) the anomalous primate? Because the connection between these two facets of your story is tenuous, the overall intent of the arc is hard for me to discern.

Lemme ask you some questions, so I can know what to suggest:
1) What are your overall goals with the thematic arc of this article? (what do you want the reader to feel about the events you will describe?)
2) Are we supposed to relate to the anomaly or the woman from the photos, or both? (or possibly neither)

Some overall suggestions:
I find the idea of someone reaching through the pixelation and losing an arm just to find it in the memory card stored image to be too much like Iris from series I, personally. I would drop this aspect.

Even if you don't wanna drop that… why is this a D-Class reaching into it and not like a robotic arm of a drone or like just a stick??

Noting that this is a duplicate thread of this:

Agent ReichterAgent Reichter, per the forum guidelines:

Do not create a new thread for a concept already on the forum, unless the current thread has not been posted on in 14 days or longer.

This is to help prevent flooding of the forums, and because it would make it less difficult for you and reviewers to keep track of posted content if it were all in one thread.

Instead of waiting and opting for a repost due to the thread getting buried, authors are encouraged to reach out to reviewers. Please consider referring to this thread for guidance on how to contact them:

Thank you! I spent an ungodly amount of time on the design elements (I am not super artistic naturally, so it was a struggle) and I appreciate the kind words.

Please do read the articles, after all they're the point of the hub!

by Grigori KarpinGrigori Karpin, 31 Oct 2020 02:37

DretyuiopDretyuiop, per the required forum guidelines found here:

The combined text of the last four sections1of the template may not exceed 400 words.

What you currently have is about 120 words over the limit. For future reference, you can check wordcount using this site:

Please edit and trim your post accordingly rather than creating a new thread, and if you are having trouble editing, click the "edit" function under the "options" tab to the lower right of your post. Please feel free to then reach out to a reviewer for your concept:

A monster trapped in its own mind. Rampaging across the country

Thread summary moved to the main post as the thread is now locked.

Seeking Greenlights: Yes

Page Type: SCP article

Genre (Optional): Horror.

Page Layout (Optional): Starts off with containment procedures explaining how to stop further investigation into SCP caused disappearances. As well as what to do with witnesses and images of SCP. Then goes into detail about description of physical appearance and anomalous properties.

Elevator Pitch: A humanoid that looks almost identical to an average person, just covered in torn clothing and blood. stalks country roads, killing anyone it sees by using its cognitohazardous abilities. It finds someone and entrances them into a state of doped up lucidity. The person will spot SCP and rush over trying to help it. Not noticing its normal human features changing into monstrous fangs and blade like arms. Once they get close enough SCP will stab them with there arms and eat them. The SCP is believed to be a normal human being who befell an awful experiment by Marshall, Carter, and Dark Ltd. involving multiple SCP’s. In the end it turned the then human into a monstrous SCP, trapped in it’s own mind with something else controlling it’s mind. It was then sold to one [Data Expunged] until it escaped from there villa in [Data Expunged]. After escaping it teleported back to where it was from in Kansas. It is still currently lurking around country roads. Trapped in it’s mind, still fully aware and sane.

Hey there Agent Reichter!
I'll be doing a brief crit of your concept today, so here goes:
Edit - Hang on a moment!
It seems a moderator told you in your last post to EDIT rather than creating a new thread. Buddy, you gotta listen to them. I'll leave my crit here, but this thread may be locked.
Now that that intermission is over, on with the crit:

Anyway, that's it for my crit. Thanks for reading, and I hope this helps!
P.S Don't feel too discouraged by this crit. While your concept may not have worked and my crit was a bit harsh, this is normal, and almost everyone (except a very rare few) goes through this. Just work on improving your writing ability and keep trying!

Re: The country walker by TheAlienBabyTheAlienBaby, 31 Oct 2020 01:42

Greetings, AnEndlessUsernameAnEndlessUsername. Welcome to the SCP Wiki!

I understand that it may seem intimidating at first, but everyone here is really friendly; the hardest part is simply joining and making your first post, which you've already done, so kudos to you. As I usually say, when getting into writing for the wiki, I highly suggest that you read a bunch of the newer articles when getting into writing. It really helps gauge what people want to see more of and what the current standard of writing is. I personally recommend SCP-5002; it's a great murder mystery with all of the loved traits of such a story, with some interesting twists. I also really like music, it's great for background noise when writing. As for recommendations, you've probably already heard of them, but I've been listening to a lot of AJR recently. Personally, I love the tones and rhythms they use, especially in 'Bummerland'. With that said, here are some resources that'll help you out:

As always, I hope your time here is amazing.

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