The Suicidal Songboy

Summary:

An SCP I posted a while ago, but made major changes to. Criticism mucho appriciato!

The Suicidal Songboy

Dr Cameron 31 Dec 2018 17:42

SCP Article here!

I've made a bunch of changes since I posted this SCP here, so I want to get feedback here before posting it anywhere major. I think I might be getting close to being able to call it finished, but that might just be me hoping. Feedback and criticism is greatly appreciated!

Biggest thing I'm not really sure about right now is the interview. I'm very unsure about whether I should include it. I can see reasons both to include and exclude it from the final article.

Thanks in advance!

Re: The Suicidal Songboy

Doctor Soviet 31 Dec 2018 20:51

Heyyyyyy i'm back again on the new revised version of the panicked singer yeet
Critiques:
Instead of redacting the names, just put a black bar thingamajig.
I feel like the Interviewer's title (senior researcher dr) could be one of the titles: either Senior Researcher or Doctor.
There's a couple random spaces in the interview between lines.
Instead of closing statement, perhaps make it something like "Note from [title here][name here]"
This is my personal opinion, but put actions from the interview in italics.
In the description, instead of "SCP-xxx does not have a voice of its own" maybe put "SCP-xxx cannot speak conversationally."
If it prefers to communicate with a keyboard, than have the interview done with a keyboard.
For "except for the anxiety attack when you contained me" doesn't work with the rest of the article. Its had several anxiety attacks after initial containment.
Put "nobody with the exception of current on-duty psychologist is allowed within…".

That's all for now, folks.