Upvoted.
As commented in chat, this is cool. It does fit perfectly well in the THIS IS WEIRD SCP fiction, and I have no medical complaints. :3
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Ohhh. Ohhhhhhhhh man. This is really cool. Starts of simple, ends with cool interesting implications. I think this might be one of my new favorite SCPs.
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(account deleted)My downvote is pretty much a matter of personal preference. I would have rather seen the potential here for some truly uncomfortable body horror and exploration of psychological trauma, as opposed to more Series 3 silliness. But that's just me.
Same. The idea of a sentient fat mass forcing the host to eat and laze around to make itself bigger is good, but I think giving it the personality of an obnoxious vidiot detracts from the article. Neutral vote for now.
Neutral voting for precisely this reason. It's executed well, but this "type" of SCP feels over-done.
These are also my feels. So much wasted potential here.
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Not too keen on this, mainly because this isn't the sequel to Unfinished Business II we already have some talking tumors and other body parts.
I don't have strong enough feelings about this to vote one way or another. Like others, I'm a little nonplussed about the direction you chose to take it: television addiction rather than some other, more interesting article focus. But the form of the piece is nigh immaculate, and the clinical tone of the description is spot on.
One thing that edges me very nearly toward the upvote is the implication that this entity is one of many million currently inhabiting what appear, at first, to be mundane obese humans. Which at first seems clever, but in the end basically amounts to "people don't get fat on their own; alien parasites make them fat"… I don't know whether to be mildly offended or just laugh at the narminess of it.
Good execution saves it, though. If I were you, I'd consider (although probably never implement) a re-write with a more creative or psychological focus.
I want to know why it is given TV to placate it. It is just as simple to lock it in a room without television, and since its host clearly isn't amicable with its situation, no reason to do that.
I feel as though you could have done more with this idea, but turning it into a couch potato isn't terribly interesting.
So, does this thing have a face, or does it just control the poor woman completely? I guess I must have missed something.
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