"Sir, your cats are a little... rabid."
So I got this idea at the best place to get SCP ideas, Subway. Ehh gonna make a collapsible here to keep things short.
-Zett
"Sir, your cats are a little... rabid."
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Ideas, ideas... What should a id- I love cats.
It is pretty much a predatory species of bat. They have a specific diet of well, the flesh inbetween the eyes of cats.
This seems unusually specific and kind of detrimental to these bats, since cats are known for taking out flying animals and there's not a lot of flesh on the average cat's forehead. Also, I'm not entirely sure if bats and cats routinely occupy the same general living areas. Cats might do fine in urban areas, but bats would have plenty of airspace hazards to deal with.
The cats lack the ability to digest food so they die within a couple of weeks.
This seems kind of randomly added, and is another detriment to the bats. If they routinely kill their prey for a very little amount of sustenance, that makes it all the more difficult to survive.
Back to the bats, they reproduce to fast for the foundation. So much so they kill two of the mother's six offspring.
This seems kind of nonsensical to me, since the more likely scenario to me is that the bats would be starving into extinction.
I personally don't know about this. Most of the effects seem kind of randomly chosen, and like you've said, something that just induces some weird rabies-like behavior in cats isn't super anomalous at its core. It doesn't really feel like there's enough contextual material to tie all the individual attributes together, and while this is certainly weird, it doesn't strike me as enjoyable to the audience.
Out of curiosity, have you read many Series IV and V SCP articles?
This seems unusually specific and kind of detrimental to these bats, since cats are known for taking out flying animals and there's not a lot of flesh on the average cat's forehead. Also, I'm not entirely sure if bats and cats routinely occupy the same general living areas. Cats might do fine in urban areas, but bats would have plenty of airspace hazards to deal with.
Thank you for this! Would it be improved if I make the bats hunt down any quadrape that they have a chance of killing, and let them eat the flesh on any part of the body as long as it keeps it alive? Would mice or dogs work?
Bats don't attack or anything and actually rabies is not as common in bats as most people
think..less than 1% or all bats carry the rabies virus. Unless your dog actually catches it and bites it (your dog would probably kill it before it had the chance to bite) he is not likely to get bitten.
This was taken from google. How about the bats auctully being aggresive instead of staying passive agianst dogs, but then still the problem faces on how strong dogs are agianst bats. Should I give the bats a better chance of managing to kill a dog, or any other animal that might live in the area like deer or cattle? Deer or cattle would probaly be easier to catch anyway, so should I make easy but big prey the main food source for the bats? (Deer would probaly not be to easy, but they have less defenses than a dog or cat.) Google also mentions that on 1% of bats transmit rabies, so I was thinking that maybe 50% or 75% of the bats in this specific species transmit whatever happens to those cats.
This seems kind of randomly added, and is another detriment to the bats. If they routinely kill their prey for a very little amount of sustenance, that makes it all the more difficult to survive.
Yes, this was rushed into the idea I was posting. Maybe the prey would die from the bite from the bat after (that sounded weird) a couple of weeks instead of hunger. This could be used so the bats get extra food from their prey.
This seems kind of nonsensical to me, since the more likely scenario to me is that the bats would be starving into extinction.
Yes this is very nonsensical, I think it would be bettter if I made them reproduce like normal bats.
I personally don't know about this. Most of the effects seem kind of randomly chosen, and like you've said, something that just induces some weird rabies-like behavior in cats isn't super anomalous at its core. It doesn't really feel like there's enough contextual material to tie all the individual attributes together, and while this is certainly weird, it doesn't strike me as enjoyable to the audience.
With this I will take a break and start brainstorming ideas for anomalous properties.
- Maybe no matter what animal gets infected it will still try to kill and eat things even if it is a deer or something.
- Maybe these bats could have a living system like ants or bees with a colony/hive. Yes I am aware this is not how bats live, and that is why this is labeled anomalous.
- Despite the bats still biting humans, oddly humans have no reaction other than well teeth sticking into their body. (And the next one which is not to special.)
- All living things infected (Including humans, I know I said they have no reaction) have a strong loss of balance and enjoy rolling on the ground.
As a courtesy to our readers on mobile devices, please collapse long posts. ~Zyn
Hope this improves, thanks for the feedback Zyn!
And yes I have read a few Series IV and Series V because I have been told a million times that Series I SCPs were created when the site standards were low.
-Zett
Despite the bats still biting humans, oddly humans have no reaction other than well teeth sticking into their body. (And the next one which is not to special.)
All living things infected (Including humans, I know I said they have no reaction) have a strong loss of balance and enjoy rolling on the ground.
I actually like this bit, but I feel like it'd work better if the bats weren't just generic aggressive monsters. It got me thinking about zombies wanting brains, but if bats were zombies, they'd be hilariously inefficient, especially if they went after human brains. Also, the bats being undead would account for the lack of sustenance making it tough to survive, since they just kind of keep going in their search for brains, and just sort of freeze in place when they're hungry. Maybe the Foundation just goes around picking these bats off trees and feeding them pieces of cow and sheep brains which will keep them alive, but docile. Sort of like domestic dogs being fed differently than wild dogs I guess???
A backstory you might have is maybe some nerd/scientist dude who studies bats and was a horror fan, but when he was teased by his colleagues for [insert reason here], he wanted to use his research to get back at the lab techs who made fun of him and his bats. So he made these zombie bats to try and get those people infected with rabies. Didn't work as well as he'd hoped, so instead he just let a flock of those bats loose at a conference in the middle of a talk, and all the people who made fun of him got latched onto by bats and rolled on the ground and looked like idiots. So the guy's revenge was complete and he packed his bags and moved elsewhere to do whatever else he wanted with his life. But the bats stayed, and so did those people who were humiliated, whom the Foundation ended up interviewing and amnesticizing before going out to capture some of the zombie bats.
That's just one angle though. If you're not into it, maybe give us some details about where you want to go with the draft? Do you want it to be straight-up scary? Or sort of goofy? Something else?
AHHH! A collapsible of terror!
It got me thinking about zombies wanting brains, but if bats were zombies, they'd be hilariously inefficient, especially if they went after human brains.
Despite this actually accounting for the lack of food that the bats would have to deal with, I feel as though I do not like the idea of them being zombie bats.
I feel like it'd work better if the bats weren't just generic aggressive monsters.
You are right on this one, would it help if I make them only bite in self-defense like a normal bat (or any animal when not hunting) would?
A backstory you might have is maybe some nerd/scientist dude who studies bats and was a horror fan, but when he was teased by his colleagues for [insert reason here], he wanted to use his research to get back at the lab techs who made fun of him and his bats. So he made these zombie bats to try and get those people infected with rabies. Didn't work as well as he'd hoped, so instead he just let a flock of those bats loose at a conference in the middle of a talk, and all the people who made fun of him got latched onto by bats and rolled on the ground and looked like idiots. So the guy's revenge was complete and he packed his bags and moved elsewhere to do whatever else he wanted with his life. But the bats stayed, and so did those people who were humiliated, whom the Foundation ended up interviewing and amnesticizing before going out to capture some of the zombie bats.
I enjoy this backstory, I definitely try to give a few extra details on this story before going all, "Yep this is perfect!" For a quick question, should I portray this story by having an interview (like you said in the reply)? Maybe I could also have a recovery log?
That's just one angle though. If you're not into it, maybe give us some details about where you want to go with the draft? Do you want it to be straight-up scary? Or sort of goofy? Something else?
I want the article to have a weirdish tone to it. The idea itself already screams "What? Why? Why does this exist?" (And I take that as a good thing, it was what I have been going for).
-Zett
I feel as though I do not like the idea of them being zombie bats.
"Genetically altered anomalously targeting bats" can also work. Doesn't need to be zombies.
You are right on this one, would it help if I make them only bite in self-defense like a normal bat (or any animal when not hunting) would?
Sure, though you can also make them sort of like dogs or birds (or betta fish…) that just sort of bite anything to investigate because they're curious and that's their primary way of interacting with the world. It depends on how you want to portray the bats; I feel like so long as you don't just make them bite EVERYTHING BECAUSE THEY LIVE TO BITE ALL THE THINGS BECAUSE RAAWWRRR!!! you're fine.
For a quick question, should I portray this story by having an interview (like you said in the reply)? Maybe I could also have a recovery log?
Depends on what you feel would be more fun to write! An interview log works well if you have some interesting dialogue in mind; otherwise, recovery log is the way to go I think.
I want the article to have a weirdish tone to it. The idea itself already screams "What? Why? Why does this exist?"
I think this is a good angle. Derpy bats that spread derpiness via biting with the backstory given seems workable to me. Also I just really like the mental of the Foundation picking these bats off trees like fruit. And the bats just biting someone and staying latched onto them while the person rolls around.
Depends on what you feel would be more fun to write! An interview log works well if you have some interesting dialogue in mind; otherwise, recovery log is the way to go I think.
I am not the best at dialogue so I will definitely go for a recovery log to try to get this backstory out.
I think this is a good angle. Derpy bats that spread derpiness via biting with the backstory given seems workable to me. Also I just really like the mental of the Foundation picking these bats off trees like fruit. And the bats just biting someone and staying latched onto them while the person rolls around.
Yes, this would fit amazing in an addendum. Should I make an addendum detailing that there are more in Clinton, Utah and that is how the "fruit picking" procedure came in place?
After detailing all of this, may I ask a question I have a question, am I ready for drafting stages (the hardest part for me).
-Zett
Yes, this would fit amazing in an addendum. Should I make an addendum detailing that there are more in Clinton, Utah and that is how the "fruit picking" procedure came in place?
Sure, I think that would be a good way to cap off the piece. Just end with "Foundation agents stationed in the area found more of the bats. Current procedure is to wear gloves and just pick the bats off the trees for transport back to Foundation Site" short and sweet, and that's the audience's ending image of the work.
I have a question, am I ready for drafting stages (the hardest part for me).
I would say probably? I feel like for something like this, things to keep in mind are to not go overboard in the details, and make sure you balance the weirdness of the bats with the relatability of the creator's story (you want the dude who made the bats to be someone the audience is willing to identify with). I see this as being a relatively medium to short wordcount article.
But that's how I would write it! Feel free to tweak as you like.
Thank you for a nine post discussion, I appreciate all of this time you spent just to make my job easier.
Feel free to tweak as you like.
It is my golden rule to tweak the feedback I get.
-Zett
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