Mobile Task Force Basic School: Induction Remarks / Discussion

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Mr Carbon 03 Feb 2014 00:57

Okay! This is a thing I've been thinking about doing for a while. There are some awesome Orientations for scientist and regular Agents (thanks to DrMann for okaying the callback, by the way), but there wasn't one for new Mobile Task Force operatives in particular, specially given the current site canon of them being something of an elite group. Of course, in real life, it's usually not just a neat little orientation meeting, so I had them do all their paperwork and admin stuff off-camera after the break.

Edit: Didn't wanna say it in the text, but just in case anyone's curious, Rabbi Ben-David is there for two reasons: he's taking over the "welcome wagon" appointment next month, and he wanted to get his eyes on Aziz ASAP to see what he'd be working with.

Edit 2: This doesn't link back to the MTF Theta-90 Hub Page because it's not really a Theta-90 tale, as such. But, obviously, Dimaccio and Weiss are the same people from the Theta-90 tales. I've since changed the title to make this more obvious.

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Devereaux 03 Feb 2014 01:04

Good job Carbon. I was on the fence with this one and was probably going to no vote, but the assignment dialogue at the end was very well executed and tied it all together. +1

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Mr Carbon 03 Feb 2014 01:14

Thanks! The original draft was a little more "realistic" (using that term loosely), as I do like to lean that way when possible, but I cut out a lot of the acronyms and jargon because, frankly, they got in the way of the narrative.

Bryx 03 Feb 2014 01:55

Honestly, what else can I say besides +1? A great new orientation.

MurderOfRavens 03 Feb 2014 01:55

Really beautiful writing here and excellent execution. Take this upvote, you certainly earned it.

weizhong 03 Feb 2014 02:57

It took me until the last few lines to realize that this was a prequel to the regular Theta-90 tales. Didn't prevent the upvote though.

TL333s 03 Feb 2014 23:46

Green. You the art specialist? No? Okay.

I see what you did there!

Solid orientation piece.

Montala 06 Feb 2014 04:48

It just now clicked…I feel stupid. It nudged the back of my mind and just now clicked. Why can't I upvote again?!

Doktori 05 Feb 2014 04:14

Very believable. Upvoted.

Montala 06 Feb 2014 04:47

Me gusta mucho. I really like what you've been doing lately and this is no exception. +1 from me.

Doctor Sirus 07 Feb 2014 07:15

I'm not sure if I'm just really sleepy right now and it's clouding my judgement, but this one didn't do much for me. Perhaps my disappointment stems from I really like the idea, but feel it didn't go quite far enough. I like the idea of an MTF pre-assignment meeting, but I don't feel like I gained any intimate knowledge of its inner workings, the various task forces, or the people.

I guess my problem its that it one was step short of something truly great. And I feel like i'm about to pass out at my keyboard. I like it, it's crafted well, but it could have been so much more. Tenuous upvote.

Communism will win 10 Feb 2014 08:54

See, I just can't see a point in time where they would actually have this in the form of a presentation. Also, it doesn't really go anywhere.

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Mr Carbon 12 Feb 2014 05:01

Those responses are easily, if maybe not satisfactorily, addressed:

1. The point is "after initial selection but before MTF Basic School, during a lull between roll call and the time allocated to fill out the new MTF operative's formal assignment paperwork."

2. Nope! Although you could argue that it acts as a prequel to the Theta-90 tales, I suppose. But it's not really supposed to Go Anywhere, writ large. I like that kind of vignette and will write it regardless of downvotes (assuming the articles survive, of course).

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