I'm glad you gave me a preview of this one in chat. You're clearly very skilled at storytelling, and you have a great grasp of dialogue a lot of your peers seem to lack.
I'm happy to +1 this. Expecting to see great things from you in the future.
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AWWWWWEES. The Foundation gave me feeeeels!!!
EDIT: More information as to why I like it, it shows that the Foundation _CAN_ be nice a sweet, when it needs to be. In this case, it knew that resurrecting the wife would allow them to retain the services of an important Foundation asset, namely a kick-ass husband and wife team. Also, in my headcanon, they used Fortune-Favors-Bold's Deus Ex Machina to resurrect her.
it shows that the Foundation _CAN_ be nice a sweet, when it needs to be.
Self-promotion aside, I agree with the statement and I very much enjoyed this piece. It takes a small bit of time and expands on it, creating a believable storyline and establishing a character I became wholeheartedly emotionally invested in.
I look forward to more. Excellent work.
This is good and all, and it's already been explained why, but I can not not point this out:
My cursory count came up with 13 different instances of the psychiatrist calling Nigel 'Nigel' in this single conversation.
whhhyyyyyywhywhy
I read this tale before, but I did not remember the mirror. Interesting plot device.
I don't get it.
Like, I had to reread to see that he was talking to himself, but what does the last line even mean? The amnestics took? He lost the memories of his wife? He's just a loony? I don't get it.
I wanted to like this until the UIU comparison. I hate this UIUseless bullshit, and I hate how by using UIUseless as the baseline of a comparison, the husband makes his wife seem weak and pitiful and a dumbass, and thus making her just a plot point to advance the story further, and advance his characterization. It's only an insinuation, sure, but it's an absolute hokey and incredibly dumb one, so downvoted.
I liked this. Clever and touching, with a twist that I didn't expect at all but liked. Also I laughed at this part:
"Did you hear about the murderous teddy bear?"
"Which one?"
Nigel shot an inquisitive look at the psychiatrist. "What?"
"Never mind," said the doctor quickly.
Upvoted.
So I'm a bit confused. I enjoyed the tale, but I don't completely understand that last bit. He's performing psychiatry on himself, and in walls… Two people? One?
Two people. The nurse and his (ex?) wife.
I really enjoyed this one. Self-analysis is usually reserved for our interior monologue; externalizing it shadows the fact he knows why he did it.
+1. Great and natural dialogue.
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