Harmless insects may be introduced to SCP-XXXX containments as food.
Consider rephrasing. “Insects of the insert science term variety may be introduced to SCP-XXXX’s containment area for feeding.” Maybe feeding times, and put when the thing needs to eat in your description.
Any personnel entering SCP-XXXX's containment chamber must wear a full-body, airtight, incision-resistant weighted suit.
I’m sure personnel would enjoy breathing. Did you mean “skintight?”
Any personnel entering the containment chamber must weigh no less than the population of SCP-XXXX divided by 6, in kilograms, including the suit.
There isn’t anything wrong with this, I just want to tell you that I think it’s interesting and that I like it.
Carrying heavy objects is not a suitable substitute for meeting the weight requirement.
I’m sure we will find out why later on, you don’t need to keep this in there. The weight requirements are okay on their own.
Any personnel exiting the containment chamber must be thoroughly showered with boiling water while within the airlock.
Jesus H Christ.
I’m guessing this is to terminate any buggies hanging onto the suit on their way out, but dude. That’s a little intense. How about gas, instead?
SCP-XXXX's chambers must be cleaned on a weekly basis.
Ehhhh, clinical a bit off. “Containment area must be maintained by janitorial staff on a blah blah blah basis” maybe?
SCP-XXXX-1 is a parallel dimension, instinctively utilized by SCP-XXXX.
Cool!
SCP-XXXX's forearms partially exist on SCP-XXXX-1
I dunno about “on”, how about “within?”
This behaviour is utilized during self-transport and hunting.
I would do “as well as hunting”
omnipresent within SCP-XXXX-1, severely limiting vision.
I am not entirely sure what you mean by “severely limiting vision”, here. The object has limited vision? The alternate dimension is hard to see inside? Clarify.
Note: I'm framing this man-nequin-tis. - Assistant Zabur
Lmao
makes certain sections come in and out of vision
I would reword this part. “Sections fade in and out of eyeshot”, perhaps?
suggesting light does not travel consistently
I would “suggesting THAT light does not travel consistently”
D-Class have been assigned to extraction and manipulation of forearms.
Grammar.
“For the extraction and manipulation of”
Or “to extract and manipulate”.
D-045626 incinerated.
I would get rid of that, it’s a smidge superfluous.
Not quite. It's more like it won't be stable at that ratio.
I would italicize ‘stable’ instead of underline it.
