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Instances of SCP-3469-J are pornographic magazines containing graphic imagery of multiple SCPs performing sexual acts. This includes, but is definitely not limited to: Instances of SCP-939 mating in various positions. SCP-096 performing oral sex on SCP-173. (When SCP-096's face is seen in the magazine, SCP-096 becomes angered towards the page, and tears it to shreds.), -29 and three staff votes.
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This is kind of the humor that would've made me laugh when I was 12.
The idea behind this could actually be made into something quite funny but instead it's gone for "SCP'S HAVING SEX IS FUNNY!"
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SCP-060-A playing the trumpet "To the tune of 'Spooky Scary Skeletons' " while his "Boner of Blazing Hornyness" (actual quote) is rubbing up against an instance of SCP-966, passed out and supposedly drunk.
To pass off sexually assaulting someone (I know it's SCP's but still) as a joke is just fucking poor taste.
I'm all up for people using sex to write a SCP, but this is just distasteful.
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No. You had a punchline with the original r/DMFS19 post, and you just went WAY too far. This miiiiight have worked with the original post, but you just took it from mildly ubsurd to just gross.
This warranted a chuckle from me when I saw it on Reddit, but now it's just disgusting.
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SCP-3720 Is a humanoid looking creature. Subject appears to be female. Parts of her body, (Thigh, Shoulder, Calf, and Waist) are decaying, and even exposing bone. 4 long, tentacle like limbs are protruding from the subject’s back, these limbs have 4-6 tiny ‘fingers’ connected to the end of them, for holding items. Subject wears a black ripped tank top that stops short right above subject’s stomach, -26 and three staff votes.
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Alright, I get your frustration but for fucks sake you made a 3x3 room with a 5x3 window! Everyone on this site needs help writing go get critique get people to critique your ideas. Also proofread, proofread, proofread.
The article in general has poor clinical tone, and the idea of the skip doesn't interest me because it seems less like a concrete idea, and more like a general humanoid that looks anomalous, doesn't speak, and does… something? There isn't really a story being told here, and it doesn't make me feel anything.
SCP-3921 is a partially intangible figure of varying features, attire, race and height with features usually corresponding with the local ethnic majority. The only obvious difference between SCP-3921 and a normal human is the right hand of SCP-3921 which is blood red below the wrist where it appears the skin has been flayed off in an irregular manner down to the muscle by unknown means, -18 and three staff votes.
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If you have any suggestions on how to contain SCP-3921 please contact Dr Macamis.
On a personal opinion, I don't think this should be added in the 'Special Containments procedure'. This just goes to show that the author didn't put much thought on how to contain 3921, (Did you post this on the drafts section? you should have asked there if any other authors had ideas for containing this entity). However if this is actually intentional and serves a narrative prpose, i don't see it being executed well.
SCP-3921 itself can be neutralized by force that would kill a normal human but is highly resistant to blunt force trauma.
This should be on the description part and you could have just stated that "Blunt force trauma is ineffective."
(slow motion footage has shown that SCP-3921 can dash at over ██████ km/h up to a distance of █ kilometres in less than 0.05 seconds)
I feel sorry for the people trying to contain this Skip. They won't know what they're dealing with.
SCP-3921's primary anomalous effect is that the entity itself is a memetic hazard which causes those whoview it to become aggressive to all of those around it, infected or not (affected individuals are identified as SCP-3921-1).
You seem to have a misunderstanding what memetics are, I think this is more of a cognitohazard, though im not well verse in that area.
Also, the idea of insanity-inducing Skips has been implemented far and wide already and is looked down upon by viewers unless it it done Extremely well.
The whole description part is really dizzying to look at.
I won't comment further since I didn't bother reading the next parts.
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A glaring issue is that the so called "Memetic Hazard" is actually a Cognitohazard.
Memetic is a property used to describe something with a memory erasing property.
Cognitohazards are things that cause some kind of effect be knowing them.
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A meme is a unit of information, so "antimemetic" means you can't remember it, but a "memetic effect" usually refers to effects that are carried or spread by pieces of information.
Cognitohazards are effects that distort or interfere with the way your mind works, like making you think that Eastern Samothrace is a real country or that cats are people. A cognitohazard could be transmitted memetically - that would mean learning a piece of information is what triggers the cognitohazardous effect. However many places, objects and characters on the site have cognitohazardous effects triggered by getting near them.
Infohazards are thoughts/ideas/information that cause a physical effect, like a symbol that explodes your head when you look at it or a name that summons a demon when you say it out loud. In general, infohazards are transmitted memetically because they're made of information themselves.
Keep in mind that this is all made up science, there is no canon, etc. but this is the most consistent way I've understood it. A lot of older articles use these terms pretty much interchangeably because the community as a whole hadn't settled on what they meant yet.
SCP-3523 is a common domesticated maine coon cat estimated to be 2 years in age. The subject has grey fur and yellow eyes, weighs 4.9 kg, and is approximately 35cm tall and 120cm long, including its tail. Other than its anomalous properties, the subject’s behavior, diet, and appearance are entirely consistent with other cats of its breed, -18 and three staff votes.
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So, this scp has a few problems. For one, the title isn't formatted correctly, so make sure you read the whole posting guide. Make sure you press the preview button on the edit tab to see what you have done before posting because the formatting looks incredibly odd from "Addendum" on. Also, make sure that before writing you make sure that it follows similar formatting and word choice in terms of your bolded areas (for instance, addendum would actually be something like "Addendum.3523-1: Experiment Log" or something of the like). Other than that, make sure that you just post to the forums or the irc to ask for critiques for posting, the people there are super helpful!
It's just a cat with a whacky effect, nothing more. This is simply not enough to create a strong article on the site. Not only that, but there are other issues such as remaining xxxx's, pointless details, tonal inaccuracies, and others such as the allowance of talking to the object in the procedures, which should just be banned altogether. As for the story, all you seem to do with the testing logs is confirm the object's effects by making some test subject get affected and then cure them- three times. It doesn't do much for the article apart from make it needlessly longer, and leaves the reader with a feeling of "why should I care?". -1
SCP-3286 appears to be a large PA speaker, 48 cm in length, 38 cm in width, and 74 cm in height. It does not appear to have any manufacturer's mark however it does have a logo of what appears to be a musical note made of pure diamond that has been embedded into the object. It has no visible power cord or energy source yet is capable of becoming active, -17 and three staff votes.
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It's quite long so here's a collapsible:
a room of at least 1,000 square feet with walls reinforced with solid concrete
Use the metric scale, I think this has already been said in the guide hubs.
SCP-3286 appears to be a large PA speaker.
Similar to Aaxal's statement, it either is, or it isn't.
It does not appear to have any manufacturer's mark.
Same as my previous statement.
sudden burst of noise similar, to a deep bass
The comma is unnecessary.
Taking apart and examining SCP-3286 is currently impossible as it will attempt to use the same tactic as self-defense but in a much more powerful frequency, killing any foundation personnel, in one case Dr.████ was even obliterated in an attempt to disassemble SCP-3286, having his body disintegrated and scattered into the size of a grain of sand.
This whole sentence sounds casual and lacks the clinical sound that a research paper should have. Also, you seem to have a dependency on commas, you should separate different ideas with a periods.
Any object that is the source of the music audio will begin to fly towards SCP-3286 and fuse with it until the song has ended.
What? how? I don't think that fuse is the right word since that means that the object has assimilated with SCP-3286. I think stuck or attracted would be better words to describe the phenomena.
Agent Finn: (Walks on sand covered floor) Uhhh excuse me. This won't in any kill me right.
I don't think that an agent, usually B or C class, would willingly go through an experiment, nor would the Foundation do so since there are always D class to be tested on.
Also,
This won't in any kill me right. »> This won't in any way, kill me right?
try to damage the dam thing »> try to damage the damn thing
Seriously though, the whole experiment is unprofessional and stupid, regarding that the Skip can disintegrate an object if given the correct song.
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The experiment log seems a bit unprofessional. It just looks like he is goofing off with a PA system that kills people. Also if it CAN kill people why use an agent?
Honestly a pretty cool SCP. If it had all the touch-ups of a full-grown article, I'm sure you would get into the positive.
If you haven't already, definitely get some help from other writers regarding formatting and dialogue. I'd love to see this get re-written.
SCP-3266 is a wooden door, painted white. It stands 2.3 meters tall and 95 centimeters wide, it has a rounded metal handle and a numbered keypad in the middle of the door. When an eight digit number is entered into SCP-3266’s keypad, it will ‘connect’ to any door with similar dimensions that is assigned to the eight digit number. Aside from testing, there is no way to determine what door a number corresponds to, -17 and three staff votes.
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First off grammar / sentence structure suggestions
"of it’s number "
No apostrophe here.
"There is currently no possible way of knowing what number a door is assigned to aside from guessing."
This doesn't feel clinical, I would suggest 'Aside from testing, there is no way to determine what door a number corresponds to.'
However grammar issues pale in comparison to the fact that this item… it doesn't really feel like it has a point. Further than that, it's actually ludicrously useful even with one configuration. The Foundation makes use of the Paddling Pool and that literally requires human sacrifices to dial to useful destinations. From your test log this door can transport to at least four continents with no cost other than having to take a plane back to where you came from. This thing is a free way to instantly transport MTF's to anywhere in the world instantly.
I gotta downvote, mate.
Agreeing to what is said above, this thing just seems too convenient. Maybe put some risks and of using or maybe even limitations?
Plus, the redaction at the ending leaves little to none narrative value, it doesn't make you intrigued that much since everything that was in the test logs was safe, it doesn't, (at least to me) invoke that sense of "Oh! what could have happened there?!" and more like "Oh, okay).
Neutral vote for now.
Edit: Why is it even nicknamed as 'broken'? the author hasn't stated if there is actually damage or any deficiencies and problems with the device, did they?
This one reminds me heavily of SCP-249. Honestly, I think 249 is a terrible article that wouldn't survive today (the door opens to Madagascar? Really? Just anywhere on an island the size of France as if appearing in a Bordeaux vineyard is the same experience as appearing at the top of the Eiffel Tower?).
That doesn't mean that something along these lines can't work. I'm positive it can, but it would involve being able to tell a story about how the door is used. A couple of similar articles that do work with different conditions are SCP-120 and SCP-2403. Find ways to twist, embellish, and drive up the evocative nature of the door would help this article (and 249).
Whats up with the fith test log? The Doctor was removed from testing for a logical reaction to seeing two armed guards on the other side of a teleportation door? As far as the Foundation knows someone could have a door like it and they opened a gate straight into an enemy GOI.
SCP-3964, Origin is currently unknown, Death Man is made from complete concrete. If any person looks at Scp 3964, they will have the urge to go closer, if closer than 10 feet, Death Man will cover the person looking with ash all over their body. After the person is completely covered with ash, they will incinerate. No pictures of Death Man have been taken. No trace of the bodies of personnel have been found, -28 and three staff votes.
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Death Man is made from complete concrete
Personnel report blood on the ground in the container, origin of these materials is unknown. The enclosure must be cleaned on a bi-weekly basis.
So, disregardng the total lack of effort, content, interesting qualities, or the fact that he's called "Death Man," did you really think ripping off the single most famous and iconic SCP would fly?
The concept is not the worst thing I’ve ever heard. A guy that coats you in ash and burns you if you come within ten feet of him? Ok. Fair enough. But the thing that gets me is why rip off SCP-173? Be original. I know this might be your first time, but try harder dude.
SCP-3342, Shift is a tall black and white creature. Exact measurements are impossible as no one can get close to it due to when you look at it for 5 seconds it will make you go insane no matter what angle. Trying to write a persona for Shift will always end up writing or typing Shift. Shift is a tall black and white creature with 8 spider-like legs and 6 tentacles on its back. 2 of witch have decapitated heads on it. Shift was found in Kamloops Canada by a man named ████ █████████. ████ gave up his life to contain shift, -20 and three staff votes.
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Well, where do I start? Measurements shift from metric to imperial, description is fuzzy, language is informal, and the style of writing is radically different from what it's supposed to be. If you want to make a short article, make sure it's effective. Sorry, but this just isn't in any way.
Make sure to get feedback next time from the Drafts and Critiques forum.
SCP-3911 is box set of 10 ███ VHS tapes with the words "The Wilson West Power-hour" written in sharpie. Each tape contains 2 episodes that each run for the titular length of time. Each episode opens with an empty talk show set with the title superimposed at the bottom of the screen. A stereotypical talk show theme will play over the opening for approximately 5 seconds while an unknown male voice will announce the title of the show followed by " Here's your host, Wilson West!", -18 and three staff votes.
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The writing is competent enough, if pretty bland, but it ends up being a less interesting and scary version of SCP-2030.
SCP-3908 summarily deleted after a failed author self-delete. Joreth witnessing.
SCP-3866 is a seemingly normal looking Compact Disc (CD).
Where SCP-3866 came from is currently unknown but the foundation got a hold of it in 19██ after [DATA EXPUNGED] and the home owners mysteriously disappeared.
The CD is completely blank and the plastic case has no cover or album art.
Deleted at -17 and three votes.
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Well, there are a large number of problems here. Firstly, the clinical tone is a swing and a miss, with phrases such as "normal looking" and pointlessly informal doctor's notes. The object itself is pretty boring, being literally just a CD with a generic compulsion effect. There doesn't seem to be anything else to this article aside from a mere description of the object, and while the containment procedures are reasonable (I would avoid directly referring to the foundation though), the testing logs do nothing expect confirm its effect by chucking Class-D personnel in its face, along with shoe-horning old characters such as Dr. Clef for no reason whatsoever. Articles need to have more to them than this, they need to have an impact on readers, interest them, make them feel a strong emotion, tell them a story. This just leaves the reader with a feeling of "why should I care". -1
SCP-3278 was discovered by a S.W.A.T force on ██/██/████ at the residence of Mr. ████ █████████ during a drug raid. When being interrogated, Mr. ████ █████████ showed many Schizophrenic personality traits. Originally, it was thought that Mr. ████ █████████ suffered from Schizophrenia, but later reports showed that he was being stalked by SCP-3278. The S.W.A.T team found SCP-3278 locked in Mr. ████ █████████'s basement, but Mr. ████ █████████ claimed that SCP-3278 was behind his ear, whispering since ██/██/████. They contacted Dr. ████ █████ of the SCP foundation immediately.
Deleted at -19 and three votes.
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I can see that this has been put through some polishing; this reads quite well, unlike brand new work. However, not enough story is inserted into the anomaly's effects for it to work for me… Some kind of backstory, or better still, a rough idea of the anomaly's past, would be nice.
I originally thought this might be a simple Mary Sue, but it reads quite well, and the final interview log is actually pretty cool. Novote.
SCP-3945 appears to be some sort of time travelling device, although it lacks any kind of power sorce (at least one known to mankind currently). SCP-3945 appears to be harmless without any form of sapient control, as it appears to lack sentience (sentience is still being tested). SCP-3945 is a large (4x3 meter) door, connected to a cavity (4x3x3 meters). The cavity is contained within a solid steel structure. There are two (2) large pipes connected from the top of SCP-3945, to one of two tanks full of H3O+. The pipes appear to be made from a tungsten/cobalt alloy, although it is not conclusive whether or not those are the only substances these pipes are composed of. Inside SCP-3945, there was a gauge [ranging from 0-4829, which is believed to be the final year of either the Earth, SCP-3945, or everything], a large (1x0.05x0.05 Meters) lever, and finally (that we can find), a panel resembling a U.S. keyboard, in which you type the (in this order) date, time, and place you wish to go. Scp-3945 was found in ██████ █████████, USA, on ██,██,20██. SCP-3945 was removed via █████████.
Deleted at -19 and three votes.
SCP-3274 is a black compact cassette tape titled ‘Father’s day song’, the tape is covered in a thick layer of dried blood, samples taken of the blood indicates not only varying blood types, but different ages as well. SCP-3274 can be played in any able device after which approximately five seconds of silence the tape will begin to play. SCP-3274 was recovered in the home of ████████ in ████████ Australia.
Deleted at -21 and three votes.
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Because everyone wants my criticism.
Each glass wall is to be 3 inches thick
metric much?
this is theorised to be the result of ████████.
Result of something we don't know about and was never hinted to or listed? yay! Also there's a z in theorized.
SCP-3274-A will harm any class personnel who attempt to approach SCP-3274,
Why would class of personnel matter? Also, this may be nitpicky but i think it should be "instances of SCP-3274-A"
moan and even speak, apparently saying words such as ‘he is lost’, and ‘he must be found’
The beginning of a narrative that is expanded upon only once, ultimately leads to nothing.
but instead suffer from a strange form of insanity and schizophrenia.
Slip in clinical tone, expand on "strange".
Any personnel who enter SCP-3274’s cell are not to remain for more than a duration of 1 minute and 15 seconds
I thought anyone who exits in under 2 minutes has a "strange" form of schizophrenia? that should be enough to merit demotion to E-class. Also I notice you didn't mention a period of time that is safe to listen to SCP-3274 after which there are no effects, is there not one? is 1 minute 15 seconds the minimum? or did you forget to put it in?
secure high grade sound cancelling earmuffs
Commas, need more commas,,
With messages such as ‘I know your listening’ and ‘come home daddy’ placed at the ending.
Second mention of an underlying story, what this story is i have no idea.
During these times if any personnel interrupt the music, SCP-3274-A will go into a fit of rage.
What does this rage entail? How is it any different from their normal aggression?
Upon discovery of SCP-3274 in [DATA EXPUNGED]
I think this should have been put in the description alongside the location where it was retrieved.
Also, why is this expunged but the other location blanked? they should be the same right?
so yeah, flesh it out a bit more, maybe make the instances of SCP-3274-A react differently to people who look a certain way? As in looks like the father.
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Scp 3971 - The Aggresive, summarily deleted at -10 for being a work in progress (with no content).
Authors, please note that we do not allow empty slots to be reserved.
SCP-3914 appears to be a humanoid, unusually tall girl that, during questioning, has answered to be a 6th Grader. SCP-3914 has a tanned caucasian complexion and black hair. She has a short fused personality and a loud speaking voice. She also has an irrational fondness for the Harry Potter series. SCP-3914 will become agitated when approached in a 3 meter radius, -20 and three staff votes.
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Why are we containing a child with anger issue that is otherwise normal? Why are we containing it in a massive 100 feet room—especially when the effect only extend to three meters?
This is extremely poor. It's not serious enough to be a mainlist and not funny enough to be a -J, and it feels like it's trying to be both and failing hard. The containment procedures are also grossly overstated; she's a sixth grade girl whose anomalous effects only extend ten feet out away from her, and only last for an hour. She could be defeated by a MTF armed with nothing more than a literal ten foot pole.
SCP-3914 has been shown to have a extreme distaste in puns and/or jokes, thus serving as a secondary agitation method.
Why would the Foundation care what one of their skips has a distaste for? And if this thing is so dangerous why would they want to agitate it in the first place.
She also has an irrational fondness for the Harry Potter series.
Why would anyone in the Foundation ever make a note of this?
but this was simply inspired by a crummy classmate i hated that i had a long time ago.
That is, at best, a poor concept for a mainlister because it is so personal.
SCP-3229 is a male specimen of the species Lithobates catesbeianus, commonly known as the American Bullfrog. The anomalous properties of SCP-3229 manifest in its call. Any female bullfrog that hears the call of SCP-3229 experiences cardiac arrest followed by death. Any human that hears its call will experience great feelings of sorrow and pity, followed by a desire to find it a potential mate, -14 and three staff votes.
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So it is a bullfrog that instantly kills female bullfrogs with its croaking. Unique, yet I don't understand its purpose. Does this bullfrog hate other bullfrogs?
The one problem I'm seeing is the infamous 'rage-state' thingamajig. Avoid that, it tends to be disliked.
Also, what damage can a bullfrog do? A bite at most, but it's not that dangerous, yet in the description sounds like it's gonna kill everything it sees.
Grammatically, it's not bad, besides the 'no where's in the interview.
Talking about it, why is the interviewer so censored? And why is that Site in the interview censored too? You can just check the list of current existing Sites and picked the one that makes sense the most.
Hope it helps!
No personnel are allowed to enter its container during a rage-state.
I hate this term. This alone pulled me tentatively into downvote territory, but I might've been willing to forgive it, had the anomaly itself had an interesting effect that was tied to it getting angry. Because, well, that's all a rage-state is. Getting angry. Which usually and predictably leads to violence. Which is seldom interesting or fun to read by itself.
Unfortunately, this is just not interesting. It's a frog that kills other frogs with its voice and gets mad about it, and was discovered by a researcher that's named after a toad. This conveniently-named researcher then makes a not-at-all vague implication about the anomaly's origin, goes nowhere with it (because there's really nowhere to go), and then the document's basically over. The two tests at the end don't add anything meaningful or substantial.
Anomalies whose effects pretty much amount to 'does X » kills Y', with nothing else going for it are pretty overdone and boring. This is a step away from the tried-and-true 'thing that kills you', but it's a very small step, and it's not a step in a better direction. -1.
Scp 3364, work in progress with only standard template and improper self-delete, summarily deleted at -8 with Sly161 witnessing.
SCP-3828 (or Zarzic Nubelar as its nameplate reads and is to be referred to as) is a roughly DVD-sized dome containing miniature terra-firma, a sea, Humans, and a wide range of species. These animals, creatures, and plants/fungi range from modern-day species to pre-historic and alien species to even futuristic and giant species. The scale of Zarzic Nubelar is equivalently (to a 6 foot man) 1,000 miles in diameters in length and has a 750 miles tall dome. In the center of Zarzic Nubelar is a city (equivalently) 35.7 miles in diameters. Around the edges of Zarzic Nubelar is a 28 miles wide, 3 miles deep sea stretching around and enveloping the inner terra-firma of Zarzic Nubelar. The day & night cycle is controlled by a floating body 100 miles in diameters called the 'Solluna.' By glowing extremely bright and emitting heat, it makes the day hours, and cooling and diming to a faint light to make the night hours. Solluna is located at the very top of the dome. Most of Zarzic Nubelar gets all of the four seasons, which are usually mild with the exception of a few large spots of land in the Yasei Ssenredliw region that are arctic and desertic all year round and are unaffected by outside temperature change what-so-ever.
Deleted at -15 and three votes.
SCP-3387 is an authentic Enfield Pattern 1853 rifle-musket, with signs of use and wear but otherwise has the appearance of a normal rifle of this type. SCP-3387 has three distinct states, the first of which being SCP-3387-01, its default state. While in SCP-3387-01, SCP-3387 is unable to fire Minié Ball bullets, and cannot be repaired in this stage, rendering it unusable. SCP-3387-01 usually lasts around a week before SCP-3387-02 starts, the second state of SCP-3387
Deleted at -11 and four votes.
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For a first scp, this is not a bad try. While there are a few inconsistencies and flaws in the clinical tone, the format is fine and you have a narrative in place. However, what bugs me here is that the narrative itself only seems to follow the "it was possessed by some guy" cliche and doesn't really do much else, apart from a few predictable testing logs that lead up to an ending that seems as though it WANTS the reader to feel emotional really badly, but just doesn't hit hard enough. The story overall just feels a bit forced and rushed, with little room for much build up. However, the object itself did catch my interest.
However, it's a far too lacking to be a successful article on the site, in both impact and originality. That along with the small dribbles of off-tone language result in a downvote from me.
The article is solid, if somewhat rough. It needs more proofreading for grammatical reasons alone.
I don't know, if you have gotten proper feedback, but I would recommend to return to that stage of the writing process, to analyse the flaws which may exist besides some grammar.
There is no incentive for anyone to give feedback to "posted" articles like this, so don't take the silent downvoting personal. If it was in the sandbox and this was the forum for feedback, I would say you are at 90% completion.
edit: I am writing more complete criticism now. brb.
Special Containment Procedures: As of 08/19/2013, SCP-3387 has been reclassified clear of any anomalous properties1 and is stored to be stored at Washington Confederate Cemetery in Hagerstown, MD, where it's to be kept for long term storage. (neutralized remains of anomalies are usually incinerated, however in this case a reference to a reason, which does not even need to be written out, considering the context of the neutralization, would complete this line for me.)
SCP-3387 is to be kept in a standard sized containment cell with lead ventilation systems in place to clear out any lead particles in its cell.
One of the walls must be covered in steel plating to act as a backstop wall for SCP-3387. SCP-3387 is to be locked into a resting position, the barrel pointing toward the steel-plated backstop wall, with a tightened metal gun rack. Wire rope is to be wrapped around SCP-3387 and the gun rack for extra reinforcement. The gun rack is to be fastened onto a metal table using screws, and the table is to be fastened onto the floor using screws as well.
A Sound-capturing security camera is to be stationed in the containment cell. In the instance of SCP-3387-02 and SCP-3387-03, sound and video recording of the incident is to be downloaded onto all Level 2 researchers’ computers associated with SCP-3387 to be studied.
This whole section is a bit too specific. It is a gun, which fires occasionally. It is entirely sufficient to say, that it is affixed to the ground, and points at a durable and replacable target.
For cost reasons, the bullets may even be used in the manufacturing of this target, if the guidelines in your headcanon allow for that level of lax skip-handling.
After SCP-3387-03, Level 1 janitors are to be instructed to clean the cell of SCP-3387 to remove any trace of lead, pick up any bullet fragments, and to replace any damaged steel plates on the containment cell’s backstop wall.
SCP-3387 is an Enfield Pattern 1853 rifle-musket, with signs of use and wear but otherwise has the appearance of a normal rifle of this type.
Was there a check about the origin of it? Is is an actual rifle from the war?
SCP-3387 has three distinct stages, the first of which being SCP-3387-01, its default stage. While in SCP-3387-01, SCP-3387 is unable to fire Minié Ball bullets, and cannot be repaired in this stage, rendering it unusable. SCP-3387-01 usually lasts around a week before SCP-3387-02 starts, the second stage of SCP-3387
The stages would probably be designated states. Stages are for diseases or named processes, which this is not (but could be).
slowly getting louder
Not sciency enough for some. At a glance ok though.
with no need for the voice to catch its breath.
Replace that with the word "uninterrupted" somewhere in the previous sentence.
The Minié Ball bullets and powder SCP-3387 uses during SCP-3387-03 are created from within SCP-3387 itself during SCP-3387-03, which is confirmed by the fact that during SCP-3387-01 and SCP-3387-02 the barrel is empty. After SCP-3387-03 is over, SCP-3387-01 begins again, restarting the cycle.
A bit cumbersome. This basically says, that
The projectiles and powder used during stage 2 only come into existence during stage 3.
After the firing concludes, SCP-3387 returns to stage 1.
The way it is written now, the only condition for the skip to stop firing, is its eventual return to stage 1. This never happens, because the condition for that is the end of stage 3, which has no condition.
Think of these stages as a program, if that helps.
Every instance of SCP-3387-03
These are not instances, but occurrences, I think.
Addendum 3387-A: SCP-3387 was discovered by Foundation Personnel in the Museum of Southern History in ████████, SC on 04/26/2012.. The Foundation was alarmed when reports of an antique rifle screaming and shooting people from within its display was sent to local law enforcement. Upon arrival to the museum, 1 person had been shot, and the rest of those who were at the museum were sent to stay in one of the other rooms, where they were all administered Class-A amnestics. The exhibit SCP-3387 was placed in was the newest exhibit at the museum, and was labeled "The Haunted Rifle", with a plaque on the bottom of the exhibit. The plaque read as follows:
This is not a simple addendum, but a recovery report. There also is no mention of any investigation into the person, that introduced the skip to the museum, which is odd.
These messages have been documented since its introduction to Site-██ on 05/04/2012.
Addendum 3387-B: Log of Messages from SCP-3387-03 since its introduction to Site-██ in 05/04/2012
This is usually done with the first one referencing the existence of the second one.
For example: These messages have been documented in Addendum 3387-B.
Addendum 3387-C: On 07/18/2012, during testing with SCP-3387 during SCP-3387-02, it was discovered that, through pulling back the trigger of SCP-3387 in Morse Code, researchers would get a direct message back during SCP-3387-03. This could be repeated for several subsequent messages, culminating in an interview with SCP-3387.
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Interviewed: SCP-3387
Interviewer: Researcher █████████
<Begin Log>
Researcher █████████: CAN YOU HEAR ME?
SCP-3387: YOU CAN HEAR ME?
Researcher █████████: YES
SCP-3387: WHAT TOOK YOU SO LONG?
This is an odd start to what seems to be the first accidental conversation. No mention of the odd firing or whatever happened during the first accidental message relayed.
I would recommend a solid [superfluous dialogue removed] or however it went.
Closing Statement: After the interview, SCP-3387 returned into SCP-3387-01. For the next month, SCP-3387 went into SCP-3387-03 each day, skipping SCP-3387-02. During SCP-3387-03, SCP-3387 transmitted the same message every day: “BURY ME WITH MY BODY, AND ILL BE FOREVER FREE”. Any attempts to communicate with SCP-3387 turned no results. After a month of this, the corpse of Jake ████████ was located in the Washington Confederate Cenetery, within Hagerstown, MD. Upon inspection, Jake ████████ showed no signs of decomposition. Whether this is due to the absence of SCP-3387 is unknown at this time. It was decided that SCP-3387 would be moved to Jake ████████‘s coffin, where it would be monitored by one security officer for any anomalous effects. After a year of no anomalous activity, Jake ████████ had already decomposed considerably. The security officer was removed from the cemetery, and SCP-3387 was reclassified as neutralized.
This is the closing statement to the interview. The neutralization is a separate matter.
This took longer than I thought it would. Please take it with a grain of salt, as the biggest contribution to the site on my part was a brainstorming session, which led to a space related skip by someone else. Not all of this is important. It just stuck out to me.
SCP-3931 is a modern SAGE ENDEC EAS machine used to send out emergency alerts to radio stations and TV's. It seems to be in mint condition. No scratches are on the machine, and any attempts to administer scratches to SCP-3931 have been met with failure.
Deleted at -21 and four votes.
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A couple of relatively minor points to think about for future versions (and some major conceptual ones):
The worst case scenario is that it would affect every city and town, which would mean MTF units would be required to wipe the whole population of said state out. Research is ongoing to hopefully prevent this from happening.
If they had to wipe out the population of a state, having units go around murdering everyone seems a lot harder to conceal than, say, bombing the whole place and claiming that it was a tragic malfunction at a missile base. (ETA - How would they know it stops at the state boundary anyway?)
No scratches are on the machine, and any attempts to administer scratches to SCP-3931 have been met with failure.
This doesn't really seem worth mentioning - why does this thing need to be indestructible, why would they even care enough about scratching its surface to try that - but if you're going to say a damage test was met with failure you should probably elaborate on that a little bit. What did they try (scratching with a nail? Engraving with a laser? Dynamite?) and why did it fail (thing is invincible? Thing becomes intangible when you try to damage it? Thing alters probability so the test never gets done?)? Since this is a lot of distracting questions for an unimportant detail, it's probably better to just leave out the invincibility altogether.
I think the concept here needs a lot of work - while these aren't rotting or eating flesh from their victims, they're functionally identical to the zombies from the movies described above or video games like Left 4 Dead. Whether or not it's a memetic effect, they're still zombies if what they do is run around with no brain function biting people and have to be shot in the head. Maybe you can come up with some more unique effect for the broadcast to have - maybe the broadcast convinces people that "everything is fine" no matter what, and the affected become agitated/violent when someone around them tries to take any kind of action because they don't want things to change? There's potential there for interesting themes about the nature of paranoia and what it means to be anxious.
Reading this, though, I get the impression that the shooty parts with people getting bitten apart and MTF guys blowing heads off is what this is all about. I get it, I'm a good audience for that kind of thing, but it's played too straight in this case. I've seen lots of zombie movies and games where gratuitous violence is entertaining in itself, but short fiction like an SCP article isn't a very good medium for that kind of experience. If you're going for violent action, I think you're going to have to find a more interesting context (like MTFs having to sort out who's infected from who's just weird, on a time crunch that forces them to shoot people who might be human) and if you're going for zombies, you'll have to come up with something more original for them to do than bite people and get their brains blown out. Zombies + violence with no other twist is not a formula I can see working for an SCP article, so figuring out how you want yours to be differnt would be a good first step.
SCP-3238 is a 1m x 1m framed painting on a standard linen canvas. The frame is lined in a pink-tinted stainless-steel bordering. When inactive, the painting depicts a hilly landscape with several trees dotting it, as well as three humanoid entities (collectively designated SCP-3238-1). Each entity of SCP-3238-1 resembles two nude humans conjoined at the back and head, physiologically similar to the beings depicted in the Greek Platonic Myth of Aristophanes. When inactive, SCP-3238-1 appear to be in fixed spots in the scene, looking towards the ground and walking. From left to right, SCP-3238-1a resembles two conjoined XX-bodied humans, SCP-3238-1b resembles two conjoined XY-bodied humans, and SCP-3238-1c resembles two conjoined XXY-bodied humans.
Deleted at -16 and four votes.
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Multiple grammar issues, poor clinical tone, and a pretty bland story (a woman goes crazy), all make for a pretty lackluster reading experience. As said above, this is literally just a scary painting that does what? Scare people? Just giving the reader a mundane anomalous magic painting with some grimdark effect is not enough to frighten readers, or even interest them. Articles on the site need to have more than this. They need to convey a sense of interest, to hook the reader and keep them reading until you hit them with a satisfying finish. This simply leaves me thinking "why should I care"? -1
SCP-3266 is a forested area approximately 10km^2 located in Singapore. Prior to Foundation acquisition the area was previously owned by collective group of camping and outdoor education organisations, namely REDACTED, REDACTED and REDCACTED. As such, multiple campsites, hostels and outdoor recreational facilities are also present in the area, varying in architecture and size, most of which have been overgrown by wildlife and are in a state of disrepair. The flora, fauna and topography within SCP-3266 are consistent with that of the surrounding region. No apparent abnormalities will be visible with initial observations.
Deleted at -19 and three votes.
SCP-3482, improper self-delete, proper staff delete with ARD witnessing.
"Ouroboros Hub", a placeholder page, summarily deleted with Anakin witnessing and Taff trying to witness but failing because they're slow + a chump.
