SCP-3473 / Discussion

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You are my sunshine, my only sunshine...

Yohan-Gas-Mask 21 Apr 2018 14:42

This is my first skip. It's a project I've spent a couple of years playing with. Now I finally think it is worthy, so here it is.

Thanks to Bear-run, Marr965, Dr_Gates, SeptemberJackal does not match any existing user name, Stallmantic and Dr Reach for their critiques, as well all my friends who have given this reviews and writing suggestions.

I'd also like to thank Dr Reach and Communism will win for allowing me to make reference to to their articles.

Also, since people really wanted it, I've added an interview log to the final version. Hope it provides some satisfying context.

Finally, both images are released under creative commons. Sources are here:
https://www.pexels.com/photo/backlit-breathing-apparatus-danger-dangerous-279979/
http://www.theamazingpics.com/pics/explosive-photo-of-7200-pounds-of-unusable-explosives-are-detonated-near-camp-leatherneck-in-afghanistan

=EDIT 01/07/2019=
I'm just gonna leave this link to some amazing fanart of 3473 by Ida Salovaara here: https://cdna.artstation.com/p/assets/images/images/018/793/272/large/ida-salovaara-d7wif1yw4aab5qv.jpg?1560763303

Last edited on 01 Jul 2019 21:11 by Yohan-Gas-Mask Show more

Re: You are my sunshine, my only sunshine...

Chaskyy 11 May 2018 06:57

I adore this skip, I can tell you've spent a lot of time perfecting it. Its very long and detailed but I was engaged throughout the article, bravo. +1 from me.

Re: You are my sunshine, my only sunshine...

Dirpbiwro 19 Oct 2018 13:21

This is an amazing first skip. I genuinely feel bad for the creature, while simultaneously understanding the horror its very existence causes those around it.

Nevermind imagining the level of depression he'll feel if he became "mature" enough to realize what he's doing to the people around him just by socializing.

Pryhzma 21 Apr 2018 21:49

This is very long and detailed. Though, regarding the fact that it's really fucking hot, wouldn't any interaction near the SCP result in the Foundation Personnel's death? It would radiate a lot of heat.
Even with the suits.

Still a +1 from me.

Last edited on 21 Apr 2018 21:51 by Pryhzma Show more

Yohan-Gas-Mask 21 Apr 2018 22:10

You're not wrong. This is why most interaction has to be at a distance of 15 meters AND using high grade heat shielding suits, because much closer for too long and you'd be cooked alive.

That being said, it doesn't shield out the radiation well enough, even with the suits, which is the main source of danger the entity poses.

Thanks for the +1 and the comment. Greatly appreciated.

Accelerando 25 Apr 2018 06:15

There's just way too much detail and smaller parts for an otherwise straightly played article, as well as oddly tone-breaking sentences.

It has no nose or ears, but does have yellow eyes

This is by no means the hottest the entity can become

I'm no science expert, but the description of certain aspects like the radiation ("Time of day, ambient temperature and the composition of…") or the 'gravitational acceleration' it uses to eat seem a little silly. Other aspects, such as the expungment of procedures should it try to escape, and the 'agitated state' doesn't support the article's cause.

Yohan-Gas-Mask 25 Apr 2018 18:34

Hearing you loud and clear, and in some cases, yeah, I see what you mean. Some parts of the tone could be sharpened, like what you suggested. So I'll do that. If you have any other examples, do let me know.

That being said, as to the length and detail, I had a bunch of requests while it was in draft stages to add as much detail as possible. I'll consider shortening it if I get enough requests to do so.

As for the data expunging, it IS revealed why that is the case in the second addendum. It's simply because most people reading the document SHOULDN'T know the truth. And in regards to the stuff about not agitating it too much, that's there because it might puke up a small solar flare if it becomes too aggravated or distressed, and we don't want that.

Still, I'll keep your observations in mind as I make further alterations.

Last edited on 25 Apr 2018 18:35 by Yohan-Gas-Mask Show more

Update: 18/07/2018

Yohan-Gas-Mask 18 Jul 2018 21:08

Just went through and reworked this up a bit. Tweaked some wording and re-arranged a bunch of stuff. Hopefully it's an improvement.