It is a buoy attached to a plane with random zombies in it that are constantly in need for hunger.
I don't get it. I really don't.
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
It is a buoy attached to a plane with random zombies in it that are constantly in need for hunger.
I don't get it. I really don't.
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
I really enjoy the weirdness of the original crash suggested by the reanimation and I can imagine how such an event could produce a reoccurring anomaly. I like the article itself too, it's really decent and interesting. I would love to see a tale about the crash.
Upvote, could use something more but I believe it shouldn't be at -
I like it. One small nitpick, and not something easily changable, is that everything seems to be a large jumble of numbers. I have a hard time discerning exactly what the hell is going on in the described scene. I don't have a suggestion on how that would be cleaned up, but just giving my two cents.
Overall, upvote.
I do feel that it could use some cleaning, but I'm not sure how yet.
Very weird and very original. The scene could use some better description, but overall, very well executed.
Thank you. I agree, and I hope I can find a way to revise it that feels more natural but still clinical.
Zombies trapped in a time loop(ish) with a malicious emergency distress buoy from a plane that crashed because something something hungry anomaly on the wing incorporating new victims into the scene.
There's a lotta elements here, some of which don't connect neatly, but it's cleanly written, nicely paced, weird as fuck and makes me want to know more. +1
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I forgot to say, any time you write something where the phrase "something on the wing" can be used, peoples minds are going to go to "Nightmare at 20,000 Feet", the Shatner-in-a-plane Twilight Zone, and you run the risk of losing them to that distraction. I don't feel that you do lose them here, there's enough oddness to keep the reader engaged by the time you get to this point, but it's something to keep in mind.
I knew a Shatner reference would be inevitable, but what else could I do? lol There's a. Thing! On the. Wing. Of the plane!
The loops my head is going through connecting the origin of this and the end result are making me a good kind of dizzy. +1.
if your reading this your gay
That was my hope. You see all this and it feels so confusing, so it makes you wonder: what was it that attacked them, and what did it do that resulted in THIS?
I liked this one - it made the hairs on the back of my neck stand up. The decaying passengers of the original flight reanimating was so-so to me, with all the "eating children" and "cannibalizing noisy passenger's hand" bits. What pushed me to upvote was the concept of the D-personnel being more aware of the situation, and attempting to communicate and escape, only to become inanimate with the rest of them. The sheer horror of being deep underwater, being aware that one is decaying, and attempting to escape whatever is happening down there chills me to the bone.
A part of me wonders what will happen if, due to the Foundation's containment procedures, it cannot "feed" anymore; will it become more aggressive or malicious? Will it widen the range of its effects? Will the actions of the passengers below start to change - become more disturbing, or more self-aware? All the questions just makes it more disturbing to me, and I like that.
There were 56 original passengers on the original flight that are unaccounted for (their bodies aren't on the plane). Having absorbed three fishermen and a D-class, the crew compliment is back to 56. Something to think about.
What gets me is that it seems to be replacing the "original" passengers/crew with people it's killing/eating. So… what happens when most/all of the originals have been replaced? I like the mystery implied in ALL of this.
Giving bearhugs to the unsuspecting since 1872.
The eating children bit…like, da fuck? That doesn't feel necessary, just tacked on to feel horrible. Like, ech.
Otherwise, pretty good, yeah.
Well look at it this way: whatever attacked them, whatever it did to the plane, was so unnatural that it resulted in an SCP. If you were there when it happened, trying to eat a kid would probably be one of the more logical things going through your mind at the time.
Well, let's put it this way; that didn't provoke a "good" (as I would call it) reaction to to the SCP. Instead of really enjoying it I just felt really nauseous…those are kids man. I hate anything to do with kids.
Blast, I was about to write something similar to this. You did it in a much freakier manner than I was going to, though, so i'm okay with this. Upvote.