SCP-1181 / Discussion

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Goodwill 28 Jul 2012 06:59

Personally I'd get rid of the last sentence in the doctor's note, but I like how this turned out.

Edit: And I got a kick out of the title on the series list.

Last edited on 28 Jul 2012 07:00 by Goodwill Show more

SoullessSingularity 28 Jul 2012 07:08

Hey Swampless! Good to see your SCP up.

Living fused and/or mutilated copies and copies that block each others' paths, will still attempt to the best of their ability to mimic

You don't need the comma here.

Should the subject die, they and all their copies, and any remains, of the copies, will disappear.

You don't need some commas here. 'Should the subject die, they, all their copies, and any remains will disappear'.

there were over a 16 thousand copies

Remove 'a'

I don't really think you need the doctor's note, but I like this one. I also think it'd be a great place to do some synchronized dancing in. Just imagine Thriller in here!

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Living the dream, or dreaming the life?

Last edited on 28 Jul 2012 07:09 by SoullessSingularity Show more

SwamplessThing 28 Jul 2012 07:17

Thanks guys.

I fixed those bits up soul.

As for the doctors note… I don't know if i can remove it, for many reasons, mostly personal, I just think that small bit of dark contrast sums up the SCP, for me anyway. I'll wait and see what people think before i do anything, if people really decide it needs to be changed or removed, then I'll do it.

Anyway, thanks again.

EDIT: And thanks to everyone who had a part in helping me edit and get this ready, i really appreciate it.

Last edited on 28 Jul 2012 07:23 by SwamplessThing Show more

entropicage 28 Jul 2012 08:38

Not entirely sure how I feel about this, yet. It's an interesting concept, though. The doctor's note does seem somewhat unprofessional, though the note on radial symmetry is an interesting detail.

Reserving my vote.

firewoven 28 Jul 2012 09:17

I think the note would work if it was not brought up like an official research note, but more as a personal log entry or something. It'd make me feel better.

Still going to give this a vote. It's not bad, and the concept is neat.

SwamplessThing 28 Jul 2012 09:21

Actually that's a good idea, I'll change it now

Thanks

Doktori 28 Jul 2012 12:13

Nicely written. Upvoted

Bob Humbug 28 Jul 2012 14:59

Disliked the doctor's note at the end. I could probably have done without the bursting into flame upon contact with the inside surface of the sphere, too. On the other hand, this has high WTF content, and there's a certain charm to the idea of a spontaneous, improvised Busby Berkeley number in which some of the participants occasionally fuse into horrible, suffering flesh blobs. So: no vote at the moment; still thinking.

Lumancer 28 Jul 2012 20:09

This is kind of ridiculous, conceptually. It's an interesting thought exercise, but other than that I don't much care for it.

Last edited on 29 Jul 2012 06:51 by Lumancer Show more

thedeadlymoose 28 Jul 2012 21:38

Eh… I still just don't have an opinion on this. The writing is not bad, and I don't think it merits being kicked off the wiki, but I don't find it interesting, myself.

TL333s 28 Jul 2012 22:16

That note is terrible. The underlying concept of the article is decent enough, but the execution is lacking, especially in spots like descriptions of the sensations and so forth.

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