A new one I wrote up yesterday; hopefully better than my last couple.
Date: 24 Apr 2011 21:14
Number of posts: 33
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“It was the weirdest thing I’ve ever seen – he had a pastrami sandwich on his head, and it was eating HIM!”
While humorous, this kind of breaks the tone of the article. Maybe you should consider removing it or changing it somehow?
But still fantastic. Up voted.
The point there is if you see someone interacting with SCP-157, you probably see the SCP as something different, and the effect will be comedic rather than of impending danger — someone putting food on their head, or starting to cut up and eat a shoe — the victim is about to kill himself with the SCP, and you're probably standing there either laughing at him or wondering if he's gone crazy.
You have somehow managed to make water bears horrifying.
I do have a problem with where it says "When in the presence of two or more individuals, SCP-157 will have an inconsistent appearance – it may appear to be a food item to one person, and an article of clothing to another." as from everything you've told us, it literally takes the shape of whatever it's trying to intimidate. So I'm not sure how it can take the form of two things at the same time. Not enough for a downvote though, not that it would make a difference at +13 (at the time of writing).
The effect was intended to be psychic; it doesn't actually change form, but affects how observers perceive it. Maybe I wasn't clear enough about that.
It's psychic! Finally, something telekill will work on! GET YOUR GOGGLES READY GUYS!
…it is assumed they form a type of hive mind when sufficiently large.
This portion threw me off a bit. I personally don't think that it needs to have a hive mind to work together like that. I imagine the illusion capability thing to be like an aura that is inherent in their biology rather than something they actively project, which means that they probably wouldn't need to work together to make that happen. Your call though.