Interview SCP-418/3 / Discussion

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FekketCantenel 10 Jun 2010 13:43

Hilarious smackdown.

I've never heard an American say 'pillock'. It sounds strange to have a non-Brit insult Mellows ("limey") and then use what sounds like a Britishism. Possible American words to substitute include 'dope' or 'moron'.

Also, Mellows specifically says 'nothing special in the water'; he never mentions anything suspicious about the water.

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Foweraker 10 Jun 2010 13:45

I will edit it, good catch.

Sorts 10 Jun 2010 16:48

This isn't bad but it comes off entirely as an excuse to pat Mr. Mellows on the back and have his colleagues resent how awesome he is.

There's a term for that.

Foweraker 10 Jun 2010 16:50

Hmm. Re-reading I guess you are right. I will see what I can do to rewrite that.

EDIT: Try that for size.

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FekketCantenel 10 Jun 2010 17:41

I like how they arrive at the conclusion, but the format sounds more like a story and less like an interview log. What you might do is have the two go off-camera for a second and speak quietly, then return and make their accusations.

Also, the bit where he orders the 'water D' bit is still confusing. I've never heard it defined elsewhere, so you might want to find a way to slip in a note at the beginning like 'Dr. __ notes that if subject is not cooperative, a serving of water D with _ drug is to be requested'.

Sorts 10 Jun 2010 20:32

I really like the idea of the Foundation having a - pardon the irresistible pun - cunning linguist on staff and I loved the original trick Mellows played on the prisoner with the water, but c'mon. It's lines like the following that are killing this:

"Dr Lee: Right you bastard. You just made me look like a [EXPLETIVE] in front of the stuck-up Limey. He carries that damn umbrella with him everywhere you know, even midsummer."

This isn't about Mr. Mellows. To be specific, this shouldn't be about Mr. Mellows. This is an interview log for SCP-418 and should be about SCP-418. Gratuitous lines about Mr. Mellows like that make it obvious that this entire thing is an artifice to flesh out a Foundation character and that is the opposite of what anything on the main list should be doing.

tunedtoadeadchannel 10 Jun 2010 21:20

Here's a video of this interview in action:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8vMKN1tYknE&feature=player_embedded

DrArmstrong 10 Jun 2010 23:33

You gotta lot of guts Oscar!

But I have uprated this, Any sueish bits appear to be edited out.

MalcolmMacLean 26 Jun 2010 03:34

I thought intestinal contractions were involuntary?… Aw well. It's still cool.

Foweraker 26 Jun 2010 08:45

The main article notes that he has learned to control involuntary muscular contractions.

Pig_catapult 04 Apr 2011 19:33

It doesn't seem too bad anymore. Upvoted.

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(account deleted) 03 May 2012 02:47

This seems unnecessary. It doesn't tell me anything about 418 that I didn't know from the main article, other than that he's from Brooklyn.

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EmperorOfTheCows 11 Mar 2019 17:16

I love this interview log. The way it outlines the details and what they want out of the log and also the closing log. The actual interview is more than just, the usual logs, which I think makes it more interesting. I do believe it stretched my immersion with the "deduction", as it seemed a bit but not bad enough to effect my vote. +1