This is great stuff. I'm looking forward to see where this story goes next!
BTW, typo: "near invincible, but trust my when I say"
+1
Some highly entertaining invective being flung around in that phone conversation. I love how it all builds to threat of death by shit brick. :D
Also interesting how the Ethics Committee liaison isn't terribly interested in the ethical side of what's happened…
I really like the tension in the conversations in this piece, be it discussion among scientists, a phone call from EthCom, or flat out lying to the captain of your ship that his officer is alright. Combined with the enclosed atmosphere of the tale's environment, I get that wonderfully claustrophobic feeling reading this that has become a staple of material related to SCP-3000.
+1. Nice work.
There are a few odd phrasings that are diminishing the effectiveness of the writing.
What it lacked in warmth it made up for in humidity.
That suggests that the site is cold (lacking in warmth) but humid. However the next paragraph notes that the site is hot.
His charade was interrupted when his secretary, a squat woman named Viola, rapped quickly on the door. She poked her head through.
“Boss,” she said, “phone for you.”
This seems a bizarrely inefficient way of working - why does Viola not simply call from her desk, or forward the call for Kerry to see. She doesn't even let him know who it is.
if there’s some extenuating circumstances here that caused this man’s death, then the Committee is going to show up and park their asses on your front step and find someone to hang for this
"Extenuating circumstances" are those that lessen the guilt involved in the offence. Do you mean "aggravating circumstances" or something similar?
“I’m not worried,” Kerry said, laughing beside himself.
Is he laughing *inside* himself, or laughing despite himself, or beside himself with laughter, or is this some odd variant that I haven't come across before?
Now… what would happen if you stuffed Li full of mnestics and made him remember everything
I'm surprisingly engrossed by the politics, but Dr. David's cartoonishly vulgar character really pulls me out of the story, putting me into soft -1 territory.
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Cartoonishly vulgar is a funny way to put it, considering that character is based off an actual HR director I worked for.
Atzak III when?
Seriously this is so engrossing I could read an entire book about this one SCP. This and SCP-093 are the only two skips I've read that I can say that about. Obviously it wouldn't be a good idea to stretch the idea too thin like that, but I really do love this one.
Also I think David's anger is hostility is justified. I really related to Kerry when he was like, "It's just another dead guy, it's whatevs"
Then David brought up the possibility of someone with higher clearance having their memories put into someone else's mind and it all became clear. I don't think either are bad characters, and everything they're saying makes sense.
Wow… These are, really really terrible people, more concerned with perception than reality, the small and personal scale than the large… I suspect that these people and there position relative to the Eel may mean something metaphorical but I can't quite see it.
