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here are the images used in this article, in order of appearance:
Ivanpah Solar Power Facility by Craig Dietrich
FuBK wide by wikipedia user "Ughhhg"
Sleep Study Room by Chiara Ogan
field countryside country wheat by pixabay user "Foundry"
the last two pictures are from the visual records wiki:
pyramid thingy is under the "architecture" section
mask lady is under the "humanoid" section
Ivanpah Solar Power Facility and Sleep Study Room are non-compliant with the site license as they contain non-commercial clauses. The visual records site is not itself sufficient sourcing. You need to find the original posting of the images and they need to be compliant with the site license.
i can get rid of the sleep study room picture but the ivanpah solar power facility picture doesn't seem to contain any non-commercial clauses? im not too familiar with creative commons so please correct me if im wrong.
also i did some digging and found the sources for the last two pictures:
untitled by 鳲来
the last picture seems to be from some chinese photo gallery site. i asked somebody to look through the terms and services and they said everything in the site has to be public domain, so there shouldn't be any problems, right?
You are correct about ivanpah solar power facility, I misread that. As you've sourced the rest to my satisfaction and removed the non-compliant image, this is resolved. Thanks!
"the last picture seems to be from some chinese photo gallery site. i asked somebody to look through the terms and services and they said everything in the site has to be public domain, so there shouldn't be any problems, right?"
Does this mean a bucket load of fuel for SCP writers?
rhinos am i rightos
Not a huge fan of the gif at the start of the article. It gave me a headache and was too distracting for me to really read much past the description. If it wasn't a gif, it wouldn't be as much of a problem.
Pretty sure that means you're dreaming right now
wake up
Creepy, yes, but a little cheesy near the end. That was an abrupt end without much explanation that felt very tonally different than the body of the article, in a bad way. Maybe I'm missing something, but I don't understand the significance of the female figure, or why that's the end. Is it insinuating that the reader is dreaming? Because I thought the opening warnings confirmed that the reader isn't.
I'm split between agreeing with this and liking the ambiguity of the ending. In either case, the ending does feel really rushed
Agree with that. The first two logs almost make for what would otherwise be a really bland article, but the other two kind of kill the story being told just to put a couple of creepy images without telling nothing whatsoever.
I'm leaning to downvote right now.
Started out interesting, but it kind of feels like 106 but a lady and she only attacks dreaming people.
I don't see how 106 is even remotely comparable to this.
Seconding Cyan in that this ended far too suddenly. It cuts off right when it was getting juicy. I don't feel like there's enough context to really appreciate whatever is implied by the final log.
ETA: 'Implued' is my new favorite word.
Dream skips have a high bar to clear as far as I'm concerned, and this one doesn't.
Further testing has revealed that post-wake memory retention is reduced when an individual is affected by SCP-3000. The average estimated degree of recall for all subjects involved in SCP-3000 testing has been measured to be less than 10%.
Okay, so how do they know it exists? How did they figure out this was in any way anomalous in the first place? The whole "we use anomalies to magically record dream footage" is somehow even more disbelief-breaking. I just can't reconcile that at all.
The research outpost looks like a solar power tower. Is it supposed to be a solar power tower? Like, is there some reason that a solar power tower is the best place to study this anomaly?
Subject was placed in an intensive care unit. It is not currently known if recovery is possible.
Wouldn't the subject have already been medically set up so that he could stay asleep for at least several days, in which case him just not waking up wouldn't need any change? Or did something happen to the subject beyond just no waking up, like having a seizure or showing bodily damage?
Eh. This doesn't do much for me.
Your set up is solid, but as Cyan and shaggy have pointed out you cut things off right when they really start to draw the reader in, leaving me more frustrated than intrigued. If you get a chance to when the contest ends, I'd consider expanding on this. As is, however, it just kind of spins its wheels without going anywhere.
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