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Item #: SCP-91028301 Object Class: Increta Zethin Special Containment Procedures: Keep it in my drawer and let it explode Description: Every time you lie,your pants will explode Addendum: Noooooooooooo. Nope. Nada. Novo. No no nooooooooo, -33 and three staff votes.
SCP-2471 is approx. 2.7m wide, and 3.7m tall. [Addendum 1: SCP-2471 increases height and narrowness to 4.6m tall, and 2.6m wide after use multiple times. It returns to its normal dimensions after about 2 days. Reason unknown. This taller form is known as SCP-2471-1. See Doctor Richters Research in ARC-168], -21 and three staff votes.
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This isn't the first attempt to do the Die Glocke. Urban legends and conspiracy theory are generally tricky material for SCP articles.
This is a pretty straight version of the Die Glocke legend, with nothing to distinguish it, it's kind of a slog to read through, and the interview is formatted incorrectly.
SCP-2497 is a blank silver coin attached to a set of wooden rosary beads made from the heart wood of Cedrus deodara. The initial containment of the artifact was carried out by MTF Alpha-13, “Cardinals”, and was brought to the foundations attention by an Agent in The Vatican, -16 and three staff votes.
SCP-2587 is a large paint can that's up to 1m in height and has a diameter of 38,3 cm, discovered in the year 20██ on a unauthorized construction place. On the side of the paint bucket is " "Researcher 'n Co" " written in black marker, except for the 'n which has been written in blue marker.
SCP-2587 also has a few names written on it, with the same black marker, those names include [DATA EXPUNGED], -19 and three staff votes.
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I'm sorry, I just can't read this. There are so many spacing errors and lolfoundation comments that I can't get through it. Author, if you're unaware, lolfoundation is typically not a good thing as it makes Foundation researchers look unprofessional and occasionally rather stupid.
In the future, please get feedback by using our sandbox site and the drafts and critique forum.
I'm not saying you didn't try, but it's pretty clear that you didn't get much feedback before posting. As for spacing errors, literally every sentence in the containment procedures is on a separate line.
SCP-2836 is a black garage door measuring 2.7 meters by 3.5 meters located in a vacant hotel building in Los Angeles, California, USA. When opened, SCP-2836 leads to a room with 50 or more doors1 each leading to an alternate Los Angeles with each door having unique changes to the city, -15 and three staff votes.
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Unfortunately IMHO this article is very cliched and underdone - it's a door to (arguably) other dimensions, and that's it. I think unless you can work wonders it might be better if you work on an entirely different concept.
Agreeing with Makta, this has a pretty interesting premise, and I feel there is a ton of room to tell an extremely interesting story here. This is a really good start, and I encourage you make a sandbox on our sandbox site and get feedback from our drafts and critique forum.
I really like this idea, and I hope to see it on the wiki again some day.
SCP-2645 Appears as a steel short sword stuck in a large stone located in Northern ███████, and measures roughly 60 centimeters (23 Inches in length. The blade is covered from hilt to tip in symbols resembling the Nordic language, no translation has been found nor provided. All Attempts to shatter the stone SCP-2645 is inserted into have failed, -27 and three staff votes.
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So, a sword in a stone that compels people to pick it up and go on a murdering rampage? Pretty Cliché if you ask me. I also noticed improper use of it's/its- it's is the contraction of it is while its is the possessive pronoun. Downvote from me.
Listen, kiddo, I love Arthurian lore. I absolutely love the stuff. But this… well, while a nice try, isn't exactly all there. The true king of the land being a homicidal maniac isn't exactly appealing, nor is it a good twist on the legend.
Very nice attitude, author. Don't worry, most of us don't feel our time is wasted, even if we end up disliking the article. It takes a special kind of bad to feel like it was a waste of time.
If I could take a shot in the dark, I'd guess that you have mainly read older articles that had a greater emphasis on creating threatening objects. These aren't discouraged per se, but they're only one facet of the many kind of narratives that can be delivered through the format. Hit the Random SCP button a few times and you'll get a taste of how varied these can be.
Feel free to ask for feedback, though do know that it'll be more detailed (even if it sometimes takes longer to be delivered) if you ask for it on the dedicated critique forums.
SCP-2893 is an advanced like Malware that spreads simpler to a worm. SCP-2893 will copy and send itself by email, messaging apps, and other noted sources. SCP-2893 may also infect domain servers or any other hosting servers that are connected to an infected client. Once SCP-2893 has infected a device such as a computer, phone, and other devices, -24 and four staff votes.
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This is riddled with grammar errors and non-clinical tone. The biggest issue I take with this, however, is the fact that it's just another "possession" SCP, that makes people harm themselves. You don't really do anything that comes across as original or interesting here.
-1, please get feedback in the drafts and critique section of the forum or in the IRC Chat before posting.
Reiterating Sterbai's main points, there appears to indeed be many grammatical errors throughout, as well as lack of appropriate tone. I suggest looking at this handy guide that provides plenty of helpful tips for clinical tone, not necessarily just for this article but for your future articles as well, should you choose to create more.
In terms of formatting specifically, this was (originally) missing a rate module, and the page is also missing tags. You do not want to forget these in the future!
As a summary, I really do feel that this has not had the appropriate critique to back it or to 'push' it in a better direction. The idea itself is an overused and commonly-seen one (that being an SCP that possesses a subject), and explicit mentions of self-harm may also be particularly distressing to readers, I personally believe. Going for an overused idea is not the best way to show your creativity to the community, you know?
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Yeah, I gotta agree with a lot that has been said here. A new thing to say might be that it really doesn't seem that dangerous to me. You've classified it as Keter, but here you say:
The device is not able to be manually turned off nor unplugged to stop the effects. Taking the power out of the device will stop the function.
Unless, I'm mistaken, you're saying that you can't turn it off and unplugging won't stop it, but turning the power off will. Surely unplugging it is removing the power, right? Now if you can just unplug this thing and render it inert, it seems pretty safe to me. You seem to have it pretty well contained anyway.
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SCP-2893 is an advanced like Malware that spreads simpler to a worm.
could be changed to:
SCP-2893 is an advanced piece of malware, that spreads in the characteristics of a worm virus.
After 9 weeks the user will try any means to kill their selfs…
could be:
After 9 weeks the victim/user will attempt to commit suicide by any means possible.
But there are many more, the guide referenced above is good.
Also, the idea of 'Site 0' does't make sense to me canonically. Site 1 is the most important site, where the 05 council and high ranking personnel meet, so I can't think what there might be in a Site 0, I doubt there would be one. I certainly can't find any other references to it. If you're inventing your own site, make sure it makes sense, and especially with this, explain it, as Site 0 sounds very important.
All in all it seems like a rather less well written, less thought out, and less interesting version of SCP-1471. You may be able to make something out of it, but it will need a lot more revision and a few things added to make it special.
SCP-2892 appears to be an unlabeled box of matches. Within it are fifty matches, which are each categorized as SCP-2892-1. Each instance of SCP-2892-1 is different in size, shape, and color. All instances are between two centimeters and two inches long. Each match is composed of wood and tipped with red phosphorous. All tests indicate that the chemical composition of the matches is completely normal, -20 and three staff votes.
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So, some feedback for you.
SCP-2892 is contained within a 1 meter by one meter tungsten box, fully surrounded by flame retardant foam.
…Why? As far as I can tell, there's no compulsion to use these matches, nor can they self-ignite if they're the same as non-anomalous matches in material and lack ability to move by themselves. Why can't they just be put in a secure locker or safe; they don't need the extra expense listed here. The Foundation is careful, but not silly, and this is overkill on the containment.
In fact, the staff refers to them as “Opposite Matches” […]
Your tone overall isn't too bad, but this isn't clinical at all. 'In fact' simply isn't a term you'd normally see in clinical documents, and 'nicknames' for things generally aren't suitable. It's enough to explain what the matches do, rather than focus on in-universe nicknames for the SCP object.
[…] BLU-82 bomb, commonly known as a “Daisy Cutter.”
Calling it a BLU-82 bomb is sufficient. I'll leave it up to someone with more knowledge of bombs to figure out if that was overkill, and how much damage may have been caused by this. Crosslinking (which, technically you haven't done, as you simply mentioned SCP-457 without a link) has to be done with care, otherwise it seems like you are 'piggybacking' on another story's success - it would be enough, for example, to say that testing had shown the matches had this effect, or to mention a generic containment breach, rather than a specific one.
All in all, they're just matches that are a little bit unusual. They'd be safe in a secure locker, and generally aren't interesting as a story or an object. I can see what you're trying to do, but you're basically taking a normal object and making it do the 'opposite', which oftentimes doesn't work as well as people hope. It's better if your article can tell a story using a clinical narrative - why do these matches exist, where/how were they found, who made them, why? Otherwise they're just another anomalous item.
SCP-2576 is a 0,6x9x0,1 golden mirror, with artistic carvings along its edges. Studies have shown that its reflective surface consists of 59% glass, 32% silver (Ag), 8,5% iron (Fe) and 0,5% a previously unknown element, dubbed ████████. No brand or logo can be seen on its surface, -15 and three staff votes.
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I do quite like the concept here, it's unique and interesting. However, as already mentioned, the containment procedures are a bit redundant, and it gives off a bit of a LOLFoundation vibe.
Novote.
I'm unclear on why maintenance is needed. From what I can read here, you could put this in a wooden box, nail it shut, put the box in a storage locker - hey presto, Safe.
SCP-2573 is a 30 year old human male of Nepali origin whose emotional state, thoughts, and needs compel the behavior of nonhuman animals (thereafter referred to as instances of SCP-2573-1) within a 1.6- 1.7 kilometer radius. This results in compelled animals attempting to meet the desires and needs of SCP-2573, -14 and three staff votes.
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This is not a bad idea. At first I naively imagined the "Disney Princess" deal, so I was pleasantly surprised by the darker turn (and felt a little stupid for thinking this power could be a good thing). However, the excessive test logs kinda killed it for me. Most of them are redundant and just serve to reinforce the fact that the animals will do anything to "help" this man. Additionally, all of the tests lead to the most obvious conclusion, which reinforces the repetitive feeling I get from the logs. After reading two or three I could more or less predict the outcome of the remaining tests.
The second weak point IMO is the interview. It's not exactly bad, but it doesn't grip me either. I begin to feel some compassion for the guy after the first few lines but overall the conversation feels a bit clumsy and unnatural.
I'm also not a fan of the increasing effect radius, coupled with the termination notice. This would work better if you don't try to artificially increase the dangerousness and instead focus on studying the effects this anomaly has on the man and those who contain him.
In the end, this is a novote for me. With some more work spent on the interview and cutting down the test logs, I would upvote.
Love the idea here, but agree the testing logs need trimming (and I'm a fan of extensive testing logs, mind you) In this case you really only need two or three of each need at most. Cut it down to the highlights that really tell them something: 1, 4, and 5 in the hunger category, for instance.
I like the idea. The interview feels a little forced, I appreciate that you were trying to make them sound less stiff but it comes off as unnatural
Again, as I pointed this problem out ages ago in chat:
How does the idea of waking up with animals covering every cold spot sound to you?
Here's another one. Have you ever had a ton of birds break through your window or fly through the chimney with worms in their mouths trying to serve you breakfast? How does all of this sound so far?
This is one of the main reasons the interview seems unnatural. It seems very forced- a cheap short-hand attempt to get people to empathize with their situation, instead of allowing the character to behave naturally and recount their life in a manner one can actually sympathize with.
Nting the test log complaints. It's seen improvement from the draft stage, but it's really very repetitive. A few, very creative solutions from these animals would go a long way to improving it in that regard.
SCP-B47B01-J, -58 and three staff votes.
SCP-2471 looks like a grey rabbit with a completely white stomach. It has a neckband with a nametag. The nametag says: "Jupiter". If you try to harm it in any way, the organism doesnt show any pain and no wound is to be seen. It can survive extreme weathers and temperatures. While researching this SCP, it was found that it was approximately 2600 years old when captured, -27 and three staff votes.
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Firstly, the foundation would never let an SCP roam the facility - what's the point in containing it if it's just walking around freely. Additionally, there are an abundance of fragments in this article, and the idea is not particularly interesting at all. I would recommend next time you want to make an SCP to draft it on the sandbox site, then get criticism on the forums or chat. If you follow all the suggestions and tips, I'm confident you'll eventually make a great SCP!
Edit: I just notice that you posted this article under a different number about five hours before you posted this. Don't do this, unless you've made reasonably important changes. It's a good way to get in trouble
The vibe I'm getting from this SCP is that it's a vampire rabbit, and I find that hilarious. If that is what the concept was intended to be, I feel that would be interesting, and I encourage you to continue working on this idea in draft form.
Unfortunately, this SCP suffers from a few problems. There's not much reason for an SCP to wander the facility. SCP-1316 is a good example of why SCPs or even anomalous objects shouldn't be allowed to wander their facilities. There are exceptions, yes. But they're allowed to wander a facility for good reason.
This SCP also suffers from tone issues throughout the piece, which leads to several sentences reading awkwardly. I'll list a few of them here.
It refuses to eat vegetables with any other color, and any other kind of foods.
Why not just say "It refuses to eat any other type of food or vegetable.
It has a neckband with a nametag. The nametag says: "Jupiter"
These sentences should be combined.
I would highly encourage pursuing this idea further, it's endearing. We have multiple resources to help new users write SCPs, including a sandbox site for putting drafts and practicing wikidot syntax. We also have a drafts and critique forum where you can get really good feedback from other members.
Other version: SCP-2561 looks like a grey rabbit with a completely white stomach. It has a neckband with a nametag. The nametag says: "Jupiter". If you try to harm it in any way, the organism doesnt show any pain and no wound is to be seen. It can survive extreme weathers and temperatures. While researching this SCP, it was found that it was approximately 2600 years old when found, -24 and three staff votes.
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Hi author.
Some feedback for you -
Firstly and most glaringly when you look at the page, at least to me, is the fact the JPG image is broken.
SCP-2561 is contained in a metal chamber of 5m x 10m x 6m.
That is a huge room, even if The Foundation are being kind to a rabbit and wanting to give it enough space. Humanoid objects often get smaller rooms than this, let alone what, as far as I can tell, is a 'normal' sized rabbit!
[…] it's allowed to roam the facility.
I know this can be tempting to allow when it's your SCP object, or when the SCP object seems 'harmless', but it's generally not what would be done. For a start, it's a normal sized rabbit hopping up and down corridors - there will be places it can get that may be dangerous to it, or dangerous to staff. It could easily get hurt, especially if there was a breach. It may even cause a breach, squeezing into a space too small for humans. It's not a little bunny you know is hopping up and down your house - it's a little bunny hopping around a place with loose electrical wires, gaps behind important machines that could be chewed and peed on, people marching up and down corridors that could accidentally kick this SCP object …Not to mention there would be little rabbit pellets everywhere! Remember the motto - secure, contain, protect. Secure the rabbit in its more than large enough containment chamber - Contain it there so it doesn't get hurt or hurt anyone else - Protect both the subject, other SCP objects, and the staff from getting hurt.
It refuses to eat vegetables with any other color, and any other kind of foods.
The biology of this rabbit would have to be explored. If I remember correctly from years of working in a pet shop (also years ago), rabbits cannot exist on vegetables, especially vegetables of a specific colour, alone. Tomatoes, whilst not harmful for a rabbit to eat, are unusual and also potentially unsafe - rabbits should only have up to two tablespoons of fruit a day, due to the sugar content. There's no way a 'normal' rabbit could safely eat enough fruit to sustain itself. Too many carrots (e.g., enough to support a living animal) could cause vitamin imbalances, whilst lack of other food could cause undernourishment. It is vital that rabbits are given hay, as well as pellet-based food that contains all the vitamins and nourishment they can't get from vegetables alone.
So really, unless the biology of this rabbit is wildly different (and it may be, considering what you go on to describe), it's not going to be around long with that diet.
It has a neckband with a nametag. The nametag says: "Jupiter".
Again, the photo doesn't work but the caption does - if it didn't have a neckband when the photo was taken, when exactly did it gain this neckband? Is it simply because you had handy a photograph of a rabbit, but no photograph of a rabbit with a neckband? You don't need to try and cram anomalous effects in based on a concept that can't be seen in photographs.
The last paragraph was, overall, a confusing read to me.
So it does no harm to humans - but bites humans? Even if that causes an anomalous effect, isn't that 'doing harm'? Causing personnel to experience no pain isn't as good as it sounds, as pain is essential for telling us when we need help - you don't want a staff member who has been bitten by this SCP object going around unaware that SCP-X just breached and attacked them, but they don't know because they couldn't feel the pain.
The 'other rabbits' line feels thrown in and unneeded - you could just say its anomalous effects only affect humans.
You contradict yourself quite soon in this last paragraph -
SCP-2561-1 feels no pain […] meaning it cannot feel pain […] If SCP-2561-1 is hurt while having the effect, SCP-2561-1 will feel pain for approximately 5 seconds.
Which is it? Do they feel pain, or do they not feel pain? I read the paragraph through a few times, to make sure I wasn't confusing the initial effect with the long-lasting one, and I don't think I am. You seem to imply the bite is painless, but also that the subject develops the inability to feel pain, but then states they can get hurt and do feel pain?
This effect is called "Potestas of Jupiter", Which is the Latin translation of "Power of Jupiter".
Although research and an interesting foundation is nice to see, I feel like this was tacked on after you had the idea for a creature of some kind that 'cures disease', which seems to be the ultimate end for this SCP object. Hence why the non-working image would contain a photograph of a rabbit with no neckband. So really, the SCP object's form is redundant - it could have been any animal that happened to be referred to in some way as Jupiter.
All in all, this is quite a confusing SCP object. I can't understand why it does what it does - why a rabbit? - and The Foundation wouldn't be so daft as to let a small rabbit bounce around a facility on its own, considering how much they chew, pee, and crawl into tiny gaps humans can't get into. The last paragraph is confusing overall, and doesn't lend much to the SCP object itself. I think you need to go back to the drawing board with this idea, and start over again. It just doesn't work.
SCP-2571 is an antique church organ console. It messures 1.6 metes tall and 2 metres tall. It contains three keyboards each stacked above the lower and four pedals. SCP-2571 weighs 700lbs. SCP-2571 was discovered in a chatedral in █ England. The archdiocese had planned to renevate the ancient church so a relestate agent was sent in to survey the church who played SCP-2571 to see if it was still in working order, -22 and three staff votes.
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Improper formatting plus poor spelling ("chatedral" "renevate" "personnel diary" "unbarable" just to name a few) are enough to push me to a downvote. It's better to get feedback before posting.
Should any music be detected or the keys of SCP-2571 move by themselves all audio servelance is to be cut and mobile task force █ is to be alerted.
H9w are we supposed to know which MTF to contact if their designation is blacked out?
Additionally, you need to copy-paste multiple blacboxes (█) in a row to make it look like you're covering whole words and not single digits or letters.
SCP-2873 seems to be constructed of carbon steel and jet black spray paint. The item has a distinct aroma of sulfur or raw sewage; any change in this behavior must be reported to the acting HMCL supervisor on duty. It is a small ornament that takes the form of a man riding a horse. It seems to do nothing at all, -21 and three staff votes.
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There's no real logic here. It honestly feels like you just pulled random elements from a hat and threw them together to form an object. The fact that it somehow makes disappointed and envious groans does not connect (except by some extreme guessing) to either what it is or what it ends up doing to people. Cryptic is not always bad, but you need to give your public more on which to chew.
SCP-2637 is a gel light blue weighing 7.6kg, it is made by a material not identified by modern science, It appears to have electromagnetic properties. Several attempts to destroy it have been made, all have failed as it simply recombines into the base form, it also has withstood temperatures of 20,000 degrees kelvin. It is sentient, calling itself Violet, it's voice and mannerisms are parallel to that of an 8 year old girl and is seemingly perpetually happy, -19 and three staff votes.
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I find it a bit weird (not in a suspicious tone, just a casual observation) that a concept that pops up every now and then is articles that explicitly compare their object to SCP-999. Whereas you get spoopy murder humanoids, things that make you crazy til death, or superpowered reptiles more often, the in-article comparison to the "classic" object is what makes it notable. But I digress.
There's very little substance here. You try to cramp various different effects into one thing and don't really elaborate on any of them:
Gel with strange properties? Yawn. So it's sentient and lives like a perpetually happy girl? OK, you could elaborate on that. Oh, it changes color depending on mood? Kinda cliche but could be used. Now it consumes organic matter and turns it into something like itself but unspecifically different? A (half-cooked) twist, sure but… oh, it also saps electricity.
It never turns into a gripping read. You must either tell a story through the limitations of the format or create an object which is so unique that the very act of describing it draws the reader into the story.
SCP-2857 is a tall, full-length mirror, inside a cardboard, typical of one would found in a home or furniture store. The box is inscribed with “Dr Wondertainment’s fantastic reflecting mirror! See yourself in a whole new light! View who you really are!” no retailer has ever admitted to selling the mirror, and its origins are still under investigation. The mirror behaves like a normal mirror, and will reflect light shined upon it, -18 and three staff votes.
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Object Class: Safe
How is it Safe if it needs to be guarded?
tall, full-length mirror
Dimensions?
Dr Wondertainment’s fantastic reflecting mirror! See yourself in a whole new light! View who you really are!
This doesn't seem like a Wondertainment™ product.
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Half of the containment procedures are unnessecary. Why guard it? Why the containment chamber? Why not just a standard item locker?
Overall, the idea is bland and has a small endnote that has no interesting qualities. The wondertainment part could be taken away and nothing would be lost. If anything it's a copout.
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How is it Safe if it needs to be guarded?
Just because something needs to be guarded, doesn't mean its not safe. There are a lot of different factors that go into object class. If containment consists of just sticking it in a box and having the box guarded, than realistically it's still safe.
E. Safe doesn't mean it's unguarded, it just means it's simple to contain and test.
Item #: SCP-2593 Object Class: Safe Special Containment Procedures: SCP-2593 and all known copies are to be kept on SCP Foundation property unless approved for transport by a Security Officer. Description: SCP-2593 is a Keep Calm and, Poster that changes daily. Its dimensions are 59.5cm by 42cm. When it was first discovered in 2017 it by a field agent inspecting SCP-2972 an incident involving [REDACTED] and [REDACTED], -32 and three staff votes. Dr Nagai has volunteered a rewrite.
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Ok. There is nothing here. It is a poster that changes. There's no story, no interesting hook, nothing to engage a reader, and virtually no article. If this is an unfinished piece, then this is the wrong place to have posted this, as the mainsite is for finished works only. If that is the case, please make a sandbox page, write your draft there, and then ask for critique on our crit forum or in our IRC chat.
SCP-2893 appears to be a sentient humanoid that is made of ████████████ that communicates using telepathy. Tests with SCP-2893 have concluded in loss of [DATA EXPUNGED] realities including reality #375486866. SCP-2893 has provided the foundation with knowledge of reality travel (see SCP-2893 Interview #4. SCP-2893 and can survive any and all damage, -30 and three staff votes.
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You can't have the same composition as a black hole as black holes as a class don't have any specific composition. They're just, you know, composed of the remnants of the processes that created them and whatever space crap ends up getting sucked in.
Also, "testes" is a very different thing from "tests", juuuust sayin'.
Here's some feedback that might be helpful. It's a bit long, but bear with me. I think it'll help.
The casket is surrounded by a concrete and titanium room 10x 10x 10x meters large.
Why? If the casket successfully contains it, the room is unnecessary. Also why does the room have to be this huge?
SCP-2893 is incredibly dangerous and testing is not allowed outside of primary containment. If SCP-2893 escapes containment it will lead to universal annihilation.
Who in their right mind will use it for testing then?
Activate all warheads in site 348 and move the most important people to reality #3754868663 using a wormhole
While the Foundation has excessive resources, giving them access to wormholes this casually seems like a cop-out.
If enough uranium and plutonium enter SCP-2893 it will remove SCP-2893 from from this reality and send it to a random reality contained in its casket.
How do we know this? If we've tried this before, then it would already be gone. Keep in mind that as the author, you know the entire story, but the Foundation needs to have discovered what it knows about the SCP object through observation and experimentation. You'll need to convince your reader that
someone with no prior knowledge whatsoever of the anomaly managed to somehow figure out (not magically know!) all the information you've got in the article.
SCP-2893 kills everything, it kills by engulfing them in darkness, sending them to alternate dimensions and realities, shredding them atom from atom, sending objects from different dimensions exiting portals and destroying targets, strangulation, and telekinetic mutilation.
This is something of a pitfall that some newer authors fall into: Dangerous does not equal interesting.
Just like magic items, monsters are entities that simply exist to cause pain and suffering with no rhyme or reason. This doesn't mean that we have to understand where all of our creatures come from, it simply means that you either have to describe it beyond simply what it looks like and what it does.
This is very important: The SCP has to be more than 'a thing that kills you'. The most successful (modern) articles don't revolve around the SCP. It tells a story through it.
Here's a thought experiment: Do you think SCP-096 would be half as good without everything surrounding it? The incident reports, the interviews?
Right now, it looks like you wanted something dangerous and nothing else. The reader doesn't automatically cares about an object just because of the danger it poses. Sorry for rambling on a bit there, I hope you find it useful.
Edit: After a quick glance, I notice you haven't made a sandbox page or asked for feedback in the forums. I'd strongly encourage you to do that next time.
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