Is this a let player? OMG I had an idea like this, this is cool! Can't wait to read it soon!
EDIT : Just letting you know Tanhony, your image format is really outdated.
pastarasta1 is quick-talking and often scheming
Is this a let player? OMG I had an idea like this, this is cool! Can't wait to read it soon!
EDIT : Just letting you know Tanhony, your image format is really outdated.
pastarasta1 is quick-talking and often scheming
Not feeling it. It's too… straightforward. No mystery. The dialogue isn't really sticking out from all of the other vague video logs I've seen.
if your reading this your gay
The two separate elements here (YouTube Let's Player converting people into killer agents and the Foundation creating an anomaly to turn over governments) are interesting but don't gel enough for me to support it.
I agree with the above comments, this has some potential but not enough is done with the two primary elements to make anything of it.
e: Much improved after rewrite, whole article now feels cohesive and the logs are both crushingly depressing and terrifying. Bimmy comes across much more strongly and I empathized with his character, even if that character was a bit of a stock youtube personality. Downdoot changed to updoot.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
Its an interesting set of Ideas, yet I don't feel like its fleshed out enough. The captured Youtuber idea might work better if its on its own
There's been a couple variants on "weird youtuber", though…the big two that jump to mind are the masochistic guy (anyone remember the number of that one?) and SCP-2352.
This could still find a niche of it's own, but it needs to focus on developing the unique "subversive propaganda war via an unwilling mouthpiece" aspect.
Side note: if you can find a way to make this one work, Webcrawler J159DI ("That Weird Part of Youtube Again") could make a cameo.
I don't know which eyes are mine - which are they?
I thought the "random scary" dialogue in the excerpts was rather good. Unfortunately the rest of the entry didn't live up to that standard - some clumsy phrasing, compulsion effect, note at the end (which could be deleted completely with no damage to the skip). And the overall idea of using new media to trigger sleeper agents is well-trodden territory - I don't feel like this adds much.
Note:
In the event that an individual is determined to come under SCP-2391's effects to such a degree that amnestics would be ineffective are to be brought into custody immediately and kept in confinement until the effects have worn off.
Needs fixing.
All in all… I really wasn't sold throughout the description, but the dialogue was generally pretty compelling. ("Miss Lenora"' is a bit of a dumb name, though.)
I don't honestly know what it's lacking, but I feel it needs polishing. I guess the assassination thing feels pretty forced and discordant. -1, but I really hope you choose to rewrite it.
The scip is an interesting idea. And the idea that there's some anti U.S. Russian fellows are also interesting. However the execution needs more oomph.
No Vote for now.