The [DATA EXPUNGED] in this article hinder more then they help. At the very least, hint at the shape of things to come as SCP-200 matures in his development. Once you've got a shape, once you've got a taste of a little of the evidence, then hit them with the [DATA EXPUNGED].
Date: 08 Jun 2009 01:32
Number of posts: 25
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I actually love this one as is, because he could literally be anything.
This one is a tad too expunged for me. I like it, mostly, but I just can't get enough of a picture of what's going on to enjoy it.
It either needs less expungement or more description, I'm not sure which.
No vote, because I like it but I just can't get into it properly.
A butterfly person. Whoopdiedoo. How does this have a positive score?
Because it's in transition and we don't know what it's gonna turn into. Which is unsettling.
Plus the idea of a kid randomly getting fat, then running off into the woods to eat trees and shit and then turning into a chrysalis is very amusing.
Downvoted. SCP-1540 did far more for me than this. Too much data expunged, not a unique or interesting concept.
Too much expungement, too little elaboration and clinicality, and only just on the cusp of being an original and interesting skip.
Since this was written so long ago, I propose a rewrite. It could be transformed into something fairly good, I think.
Of course, I won't be participating in the rewrite, because I suck. :P
I think this is not a chrysalis, but a cocoon.
Cocoon is casing structure surrounding chrysalis of certain moths. Not every chrysalis have to have a cocoon.
I thought chrysalis and cocoon were mutually exclusive. Caterpillars spin chrysalises, moths spin cocoons.
They generally are, but it can get mixed up. Also- the chrysalis is a hard shell, not spun.
For instance, this is the cocoon of a Urodid Moth. No human interaction has been involved in the shape of the cocoon; inside you can plainly see the Urodid Moth pupa.
If you want to get really technical, the difference is that the moth pupa spin an extra layer of protection that butterfly pupa lack; if you saw a moth pupa without its cocoon, you could mistake for a drab-colored chrysalis. Both don't move much and are hard.
Dawww, that Urodid moth cocoon is adorable! It's like a little hammock.
And yeah, conceding the chrysalis bit. Caterpillars spin a bit of silk to anchor themselves, but then they just shove off their skin and then BAM chrysalis, right?
Moth's chrysalis is within cocoon. This is it. (Beware if you hate creepy bugs)
There is no solid matter in this, so this cannot be chrysalis. It's only cocoon containing fluid.
It appears that the child has [DATA EXPUNGED]. Samples of the [DATA EXPUNGED] used to bind the chrysalis are also a DNA match for SCP-200.
I think this could be more effectively replaced with just a simple [DATA EXPUNGED], which would be more realistic, imply almost as much, and be less annoying to read. And, insofar as expungement works for this article, it would better convey the idea that some important information is being hidden here.
Not that it really matters because this isn't getting edited, but hey.