Simple and like a fairytale. I like this.
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Love the tone of the whole thing, and how you kept it simple at the end. Good job man.
I vaguely recall the SCP that this refers to. I don't know whether it was removed in the Mass Edit or if it was deleted afterwards, but does anyone have a copy of it somewhere?
Anyways, this is a very good story, very mythical.
Giving bearhugs to the unsuspecting since 1872.
(account deleted)The core of this story is good, but it needs grammar edits.
Edits I would be willing to make, given permission. Don't think this one gets much traffic, though.
This article is being placed up for review, please take the time to read. It could use the attention.
I'm not particularly interested by this one. The general premise has some amount of potential, but the execution just doesn't do it for me. I'd like to recommend that the author do something else with it, but unfortunately he doesn't seem to be around any longer.
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It has plenty of potential, and it's good enough for me to upvote, but it definitely could be better.
- Needs a creepypasta tag, methinks.
- Seems like an introduction to something bigger, methinks.
I actually am fond of this. There's one major thing from keeping me from an upvote, and one minor thing I wish could be expanded upon if this ever gets rewritten if carriontrooper is still around.
First; it needs paragraph breaks, because it makes my eyes glaze over and makes the tale so goddamn hard to read. I'm not sure how I'd do it, so I won't touch it, but seriously. This needs it. And with every new speaker, there needs to be a new paragraph/line break.
The minor thing is how it ends kind of weirdly and with a resolution that doesn't really resolve too neatly with justification.
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