No unsolicited crit, please! I've already messaged 2 reviewers and want to keep it a low number at a time for easier management. I feel obligated to write a reply to each one, and when reviewers drop unasked feedback, I get extremely stressed because I have more things I need to address at one certain time.
Greenlights:
- http://www.scpwiki.com/forum/t-13764047/dino-friend-wants-to-play-video-games#post-4785709
- http://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-14002397/dino-friend-wants-to-play-video-games#post-4896370
Under the Drafts tab, click the collapsible titled “Dino Friend Wants to Play Video Games”: http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/truc-linh
Word count: 720
General areas of concern:
- Clinical tone: I felt confident until right after the containment procedures.
- Emotional impact: as an emotionally repressed young adult, this was extremely tough for me to pull off in the emotional aspects. I wanted the audience to feel sympathy for both the SCP and the elderly lady through the events and addendums. I also aimed to display the brother as someone who is silly and lovable to get readers emotionally invested. Was I able to achieve what I intended?
- The addendum: should there be typos in the letter to make it more realistic? Does it seem like a type of letter an older brother would write to his sister while away and serving in a different country?
- The names: do the names fit the characters? I picked Duri because it meant two or a couple in Korean to indicate that she was never meant to be alone and Kyung-Soon because it meant honorable and gentle which may be fitting for his role. I’m open to other name suggestions, though!










