Seeking Greenlights: Yes
Page Type: SCP Article
Genre: Emotional/Character-Based
Page Layout: Standard SCP format and addendum. The addendum will include a journal kept by the SCP before its acquisition by the Foundation.
Seeking Greenlights: Yes
Page Type: SCP Article
Genre: Emotional/Character-Based
Page Layout: Standard SCP format and addendum. The addendum will include a journal kept by the SCP before its acquisition by the Foundation.
Elevator Pitch: My article shall be about a teen-aged boy who is unable to be forgotten. When a person learns information about him, whether first- or secondhand, they can always recall it instantly with perfect accuracy, making him the easiest thing for people to remember. Because of this, people think about him more frequently as a side-effect.
Central Narrative: The boy was originally non-anomalous. He was extroverted and had many friends. He was also insecure, however, craving validation from others.
When his anomaly manifested, he noticed people recalling information about him in unusually high levels of detail. People would talk and joke about him far more than they usually did, and the boy was under constant attention. The attention quickly became suffocating, as the boy's mistakes couldn't be forgotten and his attempts to alleviate the scrutiny were unsuccessful. He grew to dread social interaction, and eventually stopped coming to school altogether.
The boy's absence caused his school's faculty to take notice, and when an undercover Foundation agent noticed his anomalously boosted popularity, he was discovered and contained.
Hook/Attention-Grabber: I personally haven't seen much relating to unforgettable anomalies, so I feel this would be somewhat new. My plan is to show how Darcy's anomaly changed his personal/social life for the worse, which I think would be interesting.
Additional Notes: This idea is based on my own social anxiety, and the irrational fear of having one's mistakes remembered by everybody. I wanted to write about a scenario where that fear came true. Please tell me if there's anything I should clarify. Also, I currently have it where the "undercover agent" is working at the boy's school, but let me know if that doesn't work.
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The Addendum will have a journal where the main story takes place.
Be careful of doing a journal for the vast majority of the story… you can lose the reader this way, I’d suggest focusing on multiple types of addendums.
When his anomaly manifested, however, he began to draw away from his friends and family, out of fear that they would remember him in a bad way.
How is this anomaly discovered? As being memorable could easily never come to the attention of the Foundation.
That is, until his anomaly manifested. It's not known exactly when it happened, but he noticed how people began to act off around him. This "offness" became more intense over time, until people started to reference things he did that he had trouble remembering, leading him to realise that he was unable to be forgotten.
I’m sorry, I don’t know that such a leap is believable. People can remember things about yourself that you’ve forgotten very easily… it’s happened to me multiple times. I don’t think this fits as a realization moment. Need something a bit more dramatic to make the kid realize he can’t be forgotten.
He drew away from everyone he knew, drawing the attention of the Foundation as a consequence.
There are tremendous amounts of people who aren’t social and isolate, why would this draw the Foundation’s attention?
Overall:
Thank you for responding! I know it's been a while, but I made some major updates to the concept which should address most of your concerns. I also made it so that the boy never consciously realises that he can't be forgotten, and the changes in his social interaction are just reactions to the attention he was getting.
Be careful of doing a journal for the vast majority of the story… you can lose the reader this way, I’d suggest focusing on multiple types of addendums.
That's fair. I was thinking about having interviews between the boy and a Foundation psychologist, but I was worried it would take attention away from the boy's backstory.
I am a little lost as to the core narrative here, what is the point of this story? Other than this kid becoming socially isolated due to his anomaly (which I am not entirely convinced would be a reaction to this specific anomaly) I am not seeing much in the way of an arc.
I guess I'm trying to show the boy's transition from being social to being withdrawn. What I have in mind is that the boy's anxiety would build until he's completely unable to handle social interaction, at which point he would stop showing up to school and the Foundation would find him. Really, I just want to explore the idea of a common fear coming true, and the effect it would have on a person.
when an undercover Foundation agent noticed his anomalously boosted popularity
How was this determined to be anomalous? How would the agent know it wasn't just that this was a popular kid? ALSO, is the undercover agent in the school? Again, some more grounded details of how the Foundation would discover this would be important… EVEN if they knew he was "anomalously popular" how would that lead them to know what his anomaly is? Additionally… would it make him popular? Just because you were unforgettable wouldn't make you popular? You often remember things about people you hate as well
I guess I'm trying to show the boy's transition from being social to being withdrawn. What I have in mind is that the boy's anxiety would build until he's completely unable to handle social interaction, at which point he would stop showing up to school and the Foundation would find him.
That's fine… but that's sorta leading up to the discovery, but what is the arc of the narrative? Is the resolution that he's contained now? He grows more and more anti-social and then….what?





