Roget's Proposal II / Discussion

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RJB_R 30 Jul 2020 15:18

Thank you to djkaktus, Modulum, Rounderhouse, Bread, JackalRelated, RockTeethMothEyes, etoisle, Pedagon, Woedenaz, Yossi, Calibri Bold, Stormbreath, Kirby, Hippo, and anyone else who I may be forgetting to mention for helping this come together. Couldn't have made it here without any of you.

This is a spiritual sequel to my first 001 proposal, I wrote it as the spirit moved me to. Blame to the film JFK, Parcast's Conspiracy, Wikipedia, Case Closed by Gerald Posner, and the Last Podcast On The Left for stuffing my brain with JFK conspiracy thoughts which boiled over and poured this out for us to parse together.

Image Credits:

• Blakdogman : Public Domain
• Badge Man Public Domain
• Main Image Public Domain
• President Ford Public Domain
• Paper Background CC 4.0
• Rifle Picture Public Domain

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Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!

Last edited on 05 Aug 2020 03:57 by RJB_R Show more

WhiteGuard 30 Jul 2020 15:34

Once again, sorry about never getting around to my review. To be fair, you had a very polished product already. Kudos to the great proposal, it was a joy to read. +1

+1

Azamo 30 Jul 2020 16:36

noice

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And that was from me, Azamo.

notgull 30 Jul 2020 16:44

Tentative upvote. The Description could use some edits to be more cohesive; I had to read over it a few times to really get it. In addition, I sort of skimmed over some of the interviews. This SCP does cover a lot of territory in an elegant way, however, and I did enjoy reading it.

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RJB_R 30 Jul 2020 16:47

I would be happy to take any suggestions on phrasing edits for the description, I was sort of getting into uncharted territory in terms of my own writing and while I am happy with what's there, I know it could always be better. The interviews I actually cut down before being posted, so if the ones there make you skim a little that means I probably made the right choice. Which ones didn't hold your interest?

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Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!

Christopoulos 30 Jul 2020 19:55

Big +1. Exactly the kind of insane hyperconspiracy fiction that I love.

Vincent Van Gone 30 Jul 2020 20:58

I appreciated the url you chose for this page, I think it fits the overall vibe very well.

I don't really understand it (although I don't think I was supposed to) but I liked reading it, +1.

JackalRelated 30 Jul 2020 21:47

Loved it, and as an amateur assassination attempts historian, a lot of this is steeped enough in reality where you're not sure where the fiction starts or ends- and that's exactly what conspiracy is, anyhow. Proved its own point to a tee. Enthusiastic +1

Pedagon 30 Jul 2020 22:48

Loved being a part of critique! One final critique though.. Username is pedagon for the top post ;)
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More Power 31 Jul 2020 15:27

The second SCP to focus around JFK’s assassination, and yet it doesn’t feel like it conflicts with the other. I like it.

Not My Favourite

TheHouseOfBalloons 31 Jul 2020 18:17

Not feeling this one, if I'm being honest. I've read it over twice now and with exception of the excellent last section, which has some amazing atmosphere, I don't really vibe with it (For lack of a better term.) There were ~20 sentences where I had to read it multiple times to understand what you were trying to say. I get trying to make intentionally incoherent works but if your readers aren't sure what's a typo and what isn't, IMO you've made some creative mistakes.

It also felt really bloated in some parts, especially the interviews. I feel most of them, especially the Castro and Umbrella Man ones, didn't add anything to the story. Concepts were kind of just being thrown around left and right throughout that were never explored.

The bit under the footnotes was admittedly epic, but that doesn't save the article from more or less being weird and incoherent in a not so flattering way.

That'll be a downvote from me, sorry man.

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