SCP Idea: The cosmic gemini

Summary:

Two cosmic string like entities travelling around the universe creating and destroying SCPs.

SCP Idea: The cosmic gemini

DrNiroch 10 Jun 2020 22:14

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Page Type: SCP Article/Tale

Genre: Sci-fi (idk its not really anything else)

Page Layout: This SCP Article will be told mostly through "folk lore" type stories in supplement to a short item description (if an SCP article).

Elevator Pitch: Two entities barely detectable travelling around the known universe in a spiral formation. The first entity creates spacial anomalies in the celestial bodies it passes, while the second corrects those anomalies.

Central Narrative: This SCP could be an explanation for the discovery/creation of SCPs, with the two cosmic entities travelling through the universe creating anomalies, and expanding the universe with an unknown radiation.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: Its an entity that creates anomalies, and provides an explanation for the expansion of the universe. Also its very vaguely related to string theory and I kinda wanted to run with that train of thought for a while

Additional Notes: I don't really know what class this object would be (if its a SCP), its not really helpful, or detrimental, it can't be contained (its the size of a large sun) and may or may not cause a zk-level event just by being near the plant.

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Zyn 12 Jun 2020 04:43

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Re: SCP Idea: The cosmic gemini

The Pighead 12 Jun 2020 17:30

Hello, author, Pighead In. Let's take a look at your idea.

Elevator Pitch : This is a too short pitch, let's be honest. This is also pretty underdeveloped, because we know nothing about the goals of the two anomalies, where they come from and how they are able to do what they do. Where did they come from? Why they are barely detectable when they do their travels? How the first is able to create anomalies in the universe, especially spatial? How the second is able to "correct" them and what do you mean exactly when you say that it "correct" the anomalies? I think that it could be interesting to think about those questions, because otherwise, right now, it just looks like to your average super-powered anomaly who can do too many things. And it's not interesting.

Central Narrative : Well, according to the fact that, like I said above, we don't know really much about your anomaly so at the end of the day, what we see is not really interesting. Personally, before seeing how they do their thing and how they are able to create anomalies, I want to know much more about their relation to each other, how they are characterized… because it's what will keep the reader interested (at least, at my opinion). Plus, I think that the whole "this anomaly had created the SCPs" part is something that had been made in the multiple 001 Proposals that had been released since the first years of the site. What makes these Proposals interesting to read is the fact that they are more than a "this is what had created the universe and the SCPs", there's big narratives, many characters and if there's people responsible for the creation of that, they generally have reasons to do that.

And because your hook don't tell anything else and that this post is already way too long, I will stop it. No greenlight from me. As you can see, the problem I have with your idea is the lack of informations and the lack of characterization of your anomaly. If you want this idea to work, you need to think about the goals of your anomalies, about what they think, about why they travel in space… there's the first steps of characterization for anomalies like that, at my advice. For the rest, I suggest you to follow what Zyn told you above. It's all for me, Pighead Out.

Re: SCP Idea: The cosmic gemini

DrNiroch 12 Jun 2020 19:54

Thanks a lot for your feedback! I will try to use this for the next idea I come up with.