Project: ACRISPR.

Summary:

Shuttered Project of the Foundation.

Project: ACRISPR.

Rho-9 Agent H 03 Jun 2020 17:50

Seeking Greenlights: Yes

Page Type: SCP Article

Genre: N/A

Page Layout: Follows the basic SCP structure but with an additional section for a site lockdown based off of the Lockdown Procedures page locatable on the task forces page.

First Edition of Proposal

Elevator Pitch: A shuttered project, formerly backed by the O5 council, that has created what they wanted but at an unimaginable cost. They shuttered the project, but testing has continued which has show the ability to evolve the human race from Homo Sapien to a form called Homo Anomalousus. (Spelling is as shown, and also made up.) The project has since become a major point of interest within the foundation's biohazard research, as well as for rivalling GoIs like the Chaos Insurgency or Marshall, Carter, and Dark Ltd. customers.

Central Narrative: Entrance point to a world where America was destroyed by the foundation in an attempt to stop humanity's demise, which failed and the last surviving Homo Sapiens are trapped in an undercover site designed as a doomsday shelter for any apocalyptic event, anomalous, nuclear or otherwise.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: The SCP, unlike most other Biohazard SCPs which will negatively impact the human body, will be beneficial to the "victim" at the base. It also is able to create what could be the future of the planet, as well as completely wipe out those inferior to them, a mentioned above, utilising intelligence and adaptable skills. The O5 council has also authorised measures that could be seen as drastic to stop what could be the foundation's downfall and society's failure.

Additional Notes: I'll need some assistance with the background planning of how the SCP is able to spread. I am also aware of the similarities to SCP-2546 and SCP-4654 as well as some others, but the SCP's effects and end result will be different compared to the pre-existing SCPs.

Second edition of proposal

Elevator Pitch: A shuttered project, formerly backed by the O5 council, that has created what they wanted but at an unimaginable cost. They shuttered the project, but testing has continued which has show the ability to evolve the human race from Homo Sapien to a form called Homo Anomalousus. (Spelling is as shown, and also made up.) The project has since become a major point of interest within the foundation's biohazard research, as well as for rivalling GoIs like the Chaos Insurgency or Marshall, Carter, and Dark Ltd. customers.

Central Narrative: Entrance point to a world where America was destroyed by the foundation in a final effort after all former procedures failed to stop humanity's demise, which failed and the last surviving Homo Sapiens are trapped in an undercover site designed as a doomsday shelter for any apocalyptic event, anomalous, nuclear or otherwise. The Foundation had almost succeeded in their mission to destroy it, but the Chaos Insurgency were able to collect the anomaly, undoing the protective work the O5 Council instructed.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: The SCP, unlike most other Biohazard SCPs which will negatively impact the human body, will be beneficial to the "victim" at the base. It also is able to create what could be the future of the planet, as well as completely wipe out those inferior to them, a mentioned above, utilising intelligence and adaptable skills. The O5 council has also authorised measures that could be seen as drastic to stop what could be the foundation's downfall and society's failure should the current methods fail to contain the anomaly, but are strictly final resort. The SCP works by entering the cells of its "victims", and altering their housed DNA manually utilising RNA to change and evolve the subject. How the SCP is able to do this with speed ad accuracy is unknown, but is known to regularly mutate itself to create a stronger strain that evolves humans to a subject with a higher brain capacity.

Additional Notes: I'll need some assistance with the background planning of how the SCP is able to spread. I am also aware of the similarities to SCP-2546 and SCP-4654 as well as some others, but the SCP's effects and end result will be different compared to the pre-existing SCPs. I have also changed the Special Containment Procedures due to too many similarities to SCP-5000.

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It is time to leave the darkness, regardless of what the higher-ups say about retirement. We must not be left out of the light, for what might we become in our isolation?

Last edited on 17 Jun 2020 13:49 by Rho-9 Agent H Show more

Re: Project: ACRISPR.

(account deleted) 05 Jun 2020 04:47

Hm. This feels like an interesting start; anomalous evolution is something that catches my eye once in a while. Though, I'm not too sure if this sets this apart from the generic doomsday scenario that the site has?

And what is the anomaly here? The former half of your summary somewhat gave "anomalous evolution" vibes but then some bits seemed to describe it as somewhat of a biohazard? Unless you're talking about some anomalous alteration to environmental pressures to cause the start of the deviation from the Homo sapien species, I felt like I was left a little too in the dark on what the actual anomaly was here.

Hmm; the bit about the Foundation intentionally taking drastic action that are contradictory to their own motto feels reminiscent of SCP-5000 here. This really isn't bad, but I'm a little concerned on whether this would be very distinguishable from that? Replacing the entity that the Foundation's trying to destroy (which was theorized to be pain itself) with your idea of a hidden anomalous human species, I feel that the two feel… a bit too close? 5000 worked because the introduction really hooked us in with a more grounded version of something horrific happening while maintaining that sense of mystery on why the Foundation's doing this; I'm not sure if laying out the anomaly all at one go may kinda… make it a bit of a less engaging read?

Idk; I feel that this didn't… feel high stakes enough for some reason? Like, yeah, it sucks to have some other species wipe us out, but… I'm not sure if the anomaly here is enough to really hook me in and make me care about the story? I can be completely wrong about this and 5000 being a little too similar in terms of the "Foundation destroying humanity" aspect, so yeah. The story seems to end with a site lockdown from your layout, which I'm not sure if it would be punchy enough for a climax? Because it still all boils down to the end of the world stuff, which feels like pretty well-trod grown, especially in SCP context.

Last edited on 05 Jun 2020 04:51 by (account deleted) Show more

Re: Project: ACRISPR.

Rho-9 Agent H 17 Jun 2020 14:13

In regards to your first piece of advice, that I have not been as detailed on what the SCP actually is, I have edited the proposal to explain how the SCP works a bit more in the latter parts, as well as Describing the anomalous parts of it.

I have also edited parts so that any direct similarities with SCP-5000 have been removed. Specifically making the foundation have the destruction of America as a last resort to minimalise casualties.

Apologies for this being 12 days late, this was the earliest I could check.

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It is time to leave the darkness, regardless of what the higher-ups say about retirement. We must not be left out of the light, for what might we become in our isolation?

Re: Project: ACRISPR.

(account deleted) 17 Jun 2020 14:35

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Hmmm. Yeah but like, this may feel… a little too dry to make it a bit of an engaging read? All we have as of now is like, something that causes a select few of humans to become more "superior", and somehow this erupts into a massive war that forces people underground, but… I'm not seeing a clear structure as to how you're planning to convey all of this information? "Basic SCP structure" feels… a little too vague for me to catch on (after the ConProcs and description) on how you're gonna go about playing around the concept of anomalous evolution.

Another issue is that I'm not really sure on how you want readers to feel by the end? As-is, the story unfolds that makes us go a little like "okay, cool", but then… we don't feel much after we finish reading? I'm also a little unsure as to how some people who became "superior" automatically became hostile against us and then somehow came to the world almost being fucked over; it just feels weird and sudden to conveniently generate a huge conflict that doesn't seem to be fully explored/justified?

As a personal nitpick, I wouldn't totally say evolution = smarter people? Evolution is generally a response to an environmental pressure at a certain moment in time, so it really depends on our environment; at one time we could adapt to battle the cold, yet after some time we could gradually switch to adapt to the heat when temperatures start to rise, but notice we don't adapt both to the cold and hot environments at the same time; it's like a trade-off, per se.

The CI thing feels… shoehorned in? I'm not particularly sure on what narrative value this adds to the story? The ending would feel… directionless and possibly quite unsatisfying?

Overall, idk; the concept's roughly fine, but I'm very unsure about the execution? I'm afraid it would feel… dry and too dense to pack into an SCP article? It does feel more like a tale, of some sort, where the POV's from some Foundation scientist in the world overrun by these "superior" beings of some sort, maybe. At this point, I think it might be best to reach out for fresh pairs of eyes through the Butterfly Squad Roster. Good luck!