The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Summary:

the perspective of the Foundation without the containment breaches

The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Craftmine_Pro 24 Mar 2020 14:53

Capturing the perspective of the Foundation without the containment breaches and K-Class Scenarios, but rather the everyday life of the Foundation (with a touch of humor)

Seeking Greenlights: Yes

Page Type: Tale

Genre: Comedy, Everyday Life

Page Layout (Optional): It would be a log of entries (more on that below)

+ Elevator Pitch

In the various foundation tales, we have pages about containment breaches and scenarios, and major chaos.

What if… we captured the scenario of the foundation where everything is actually relatively normal. What if we took a log of those minor incidents?

Researchers commuting and aggressively enter their keycard the wrong way for 5 whole minutes, employees ignoring a wet floor sign and (minor) chaos ensues, etc. These small but rather interesting bits should be noted as it reminds us all that there ARE times that Site-19 is a research facility with people in it making minor mistakes, NOT just being a punching bag for containment breaches.

In addition, the logs would be timelogs, where you explain how the event happened not just what happened, which hasn't been done for a major log page yet.

+ Central Narrative

In Site-19,¹ a security checkpoint was installed a year ago that connects all sectors to a Main Checkpoint Hub (This is what I think it would look like, as a sketch). Just recently the site manager proposed a log of any incidents be written in to help with safety, and YOU get to write entries.

+ Hook

Hook/Attention-Grabber: We've captured the chaos of the foundation, what about the lighter side of the facility where everything is normal, but there ARE some minor sometimes funny mostly non-anomalous accidents[[footnote]] that would be something new and mostly funny to write about as a different perspective of foundation life?

+ Additional Notes

Additional Notes: The page would be updated frequently with new entries, I'm thinking about MAYBE saying people could write in their own.

If you were on r/SCP yesterday, you might have seen an entry I made on there as a meme, so refer to that if you have seen it as a "standard entry" into the page.

Initially I wanted to keep this off the main site, but some people pushed me into making this a real page, and here I am :).

Footnotes

1. I'm going with Site-19 since it's the biggest site containing various anomalies

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Re: The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Doctor Shelby 24 Mar 2020 15:06

Obviously I can't give greenlights but I really think this is a cool idea. The Foundation is run by people and people make stupid little mistakes. It seems like it could be a nice little break coming in to check this tale from time to time and seeing the new entries. Make the whole SCP universe seem a bit more "human".

Re: The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Zyn 25 Mar 2020 05:14

Hmm… admittedly, this feels like a combination of the overall mood/tone of the Kiryu Labs Hub and the premise of the Foundation Gripe Sheet. Maybe take a look at both of those and make sure what you have planned is substantially distinct enough?

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Re: The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Craftmine_Pro 25 Mar 2020 13:31

Zyn, I'm glad you asked, because I actually prepared an answer for something like this. I went over the specific "context" of what's happening in the narrative. This context differentiates the other pages from my idea:

+ Context

In Site-19¹, after a containment breach, the site managers put up a Security Checkpoint to prevent threats. This would lower breaches by roughly 57%, and be proven effective. Recently, the Site Manager recommended a list of incidents at the checkpoint be recorded in order to help with the safety around there.

As we can see here, there is specific lore and a directive of why this exists.

In addition, I don't think that the log would have a "mood", since I like some humor every once in a while, however a serious post that changes stuff up is also something I like. As long as it follows the template (and isn't a giant containment breach), I'm cool with it.

Next, I would like to look at the most likely standards of an entry. This would separate the Foundation Gripe Sheet from my idea:

+ Here is what their template would look like

P: Problem reported.
S: Solution carried out.

+ And here is what my template would look like

**Checkpoint Incident #(number)**
> @@@@
**Reporter:**
> @@@@
**Date:** DD/MM/YYYY
> @@@@
**Report:** (Summarize what happened in a few words)
> @@@@
<BEGIN LOG>
> @@@@
**00:00:**
> @@@@
**00:01:**
> @@@@
**00:02:** (Feel free to use as many timestamps as you want).
> @@@@
**Results:** (Put any changes to the facility here, including injuries).
> @@@@
//Note: (Insert Quote.) - Person//

And here is what a submission would look like if the template was followed (I made this on short notice)

Not only am I looking for a specific problem, but I also ask how it happened, and to picture that using a series of events. Because I said that this takes place at a security checkpoint, it paints a picture of how at an extent you can improve it. I also allow for an optional note at the end so that's cool.

+ Conclusion of my reasoning

So to conclude this reply, what I have is "substantially distinct enough" because:
- There is a valid explanation behind why the logs exist
- This is taking place at a specific place in a site (Security Checkpoint).
- There is a change in the template that encourages elaboration, not just a problem and solution, but rather: "What happened, how did it happen (in the form of a time log), and what do we do to prevent this from happening again"

Showing these examples of the uniqueness, you should relook the potential of this idea with noted above.

From,

Craftmine_Pro

Footnotes

1. again since it's the biggest site

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Re: The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Zyn 26 Mar 2020 05:43

As we can see here, there is specific lore and a directive of why this exists.

This is taking place at a specific place in a site (Security Checkpoint).

I'm not sure this is necessarily an interest point though? The Foundation Gripe Sheet is rather successful without that sort of context, and there being multiple locations noted isn't really a deterrent to readers.

There is a change in the template that encourages elaboration

This might not really appeal to readers who are more interested in quick bites for a log with this sort of setup. If this eventually just seems like a lot of bureaucracy, it might be more of a chore than an interest to read; the reason that the Gripe Sheet works is because the entries are witty and short and snappy.

Sorry, but I'm not entirely convinced that what you're presenting uniqueness are necessarily going to matter that much to readers. Definitely reach out to other reviewers to see what they think though.

Re: The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Craftmine_Pro 26 Mar 2020 13:13

Well I see that didn't go well for me did it :|

I guess I'll go over what you said and adjust my pitch accordingly.

I'm not sure this is necessarily an interest point though?

When making this, I thought of the most serious place to make a "not a containment breach log." I went with a security checkpoint. The checkpoint makes it different from other logs, we haven't done a security checkpoint. To capture the normal I thought let's mix it up a bit. If this is my directive, do you think this could possibly work? Either way, I'll cut down on the lore or at least make it less complicated because I think that was a good point.

Also I will, without a question remove the elaboration part and replace it with "it's a timed log" instead since I don't think any logs have done time logs and mentioning elaboration will scare off new writers.

Thanks for the advice, I will definitely reach out to other writers, have a nice day!

Re: The Lighter Side of the Foundation

Zyn 28 Mar 2020 02:05

The checkpoint makes it different from other logs, we haven't done a security checkpoint.

Again, I don't know if this is necessarily an interest point. We haven't done a D-Class cafeteria menu or a janitor's bathroom log yet either; that doesn't mean that the majority of the audience will be automatically interested in that material.

If this is my directive, do you think this could possibly work?

I'm a little confused here. What is the directive? Just "security checkpoint, mix it up"? What do you mean by "mix it up"?

since I don't think any logs have done time logs

Most of the time having timestamps isn't super necessary or relevant for enjoyment of the reading. Again, you should make sure that what you're adding is something that readers will enjoy having, not just kind of shoehorned in because no other page has those elements.

I feel like this might be better formatted as a tale about a personnel member who has to respond to all these random mishaps in a Site, rather than a log which might get repetitive. It'll also give this more of a Foundation-flavor feel, since the examples you've given ("Researchers commuting and aggressively enter their keycard the wrong way for 5 whole minutes, employees ignoring a wet floor sign and (minor) chaos ensues") could happen IRL pretty much at any office with keycard systems, not necessarily only in the Foundation.