S.Toys Ion Zero Gravity Playcube

Summary:

I made a scp looking for feedback

S.Toys Ion Zero Gravity Playcube

lez vegetables 17 Mar 2020 00:42

Item #: SCP-5077
Object Class: Safe
Special Containment Procedures: SCP-5077 is kept In A Steel Case Bolted Together Only to be unbolted For Testing Purposes.

Description:
SCP-5077 Is A Box filled With 12 Objects resembling Numbered Wooden Play Cubes Intended For Use By A Toddler. Named SCP-5077-1 Through SCP-5077-12. Each varying in The Numbers On The Block

The Box Seems To Be well worn out With the words "S.Toys Ion Zero Gravity Playcube".

In Testing When SCP-5077-3 Was Lifted And Then let go of SCP-5077-3 remained in the air for approximately Three Minutes Before SCP-5077-1 Slowly Fell To The Ground.

One D-Class personnel Attempted To throw SCP-5077-8. SCP-5077-8 Stayed At The Speed It Was Thrown For Approximately Four Seconds Before Coming To A Slow Halt.

Throwing SCP-5077-12 Is Strictly Forbidden. As it carry's The Force For A Unlimited Amount Of Time
Destroying Anything In Its Path.

History:SCP-5077 Was Found In A Old shack In Clarksdale, Mississippi Next To a machine with the wires Chewed Out By ratts any attempt to fix the machine has failed

Forum Criticism Team - Captain Post

Zyn 17 Mar 2020 04:30

Author, out of curiosity, what grade are you currently in at school? Most successful SCP authors have at least some college-level writing experience, since clinical tone is typically covered in college. If you haven’t encountered clinical tone or writing analytical essays in school yet, it can be hard to write an article that possesses the unique "flash fiction as written by a professional scientist" tone the site audience is looking for.

If you tell us where you are academically, we can recommend some materials you can study up on, such as these college resources for clinical tone:
http://www.aje.com/en/arc/editing-tip-maintaining-formal-tone-scientific-writing/
http://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter/scholarlyvoice/tone
https://healthcare.utah.edu/brand-and-style-guide/writing-guide.php
http://vrici.lojban.org/~cowan/style-revised.html

Junior Staff Post

MalyceGraves 17 Mar 2020 00:52

Author,

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