SCP-5912 proposal

Summary:

A proposal for what I think should be SCP-5912

The Arrowhead of the Lifebringer

KurisuRafosu 13 Mar 2020 22:29

Seeking Greenlights: Yes

Page Type: SCP Article

Genre (Optional): Light Horror

Elevator Pitch: An arrow when stabbed into a corpse reanimates it until the arrowhead is pulled out. When pierced into a living being it makes them hallucinate.

Central Narrative: An interview between a SCP site supervisor and a D-Class subject who was pierced. The D-Class subject reveals the things that he saw while under SCP-5912's effects.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: "What are the true effects of SCP-5912 and SCP-5912-1?"

Additional Notes: This is my first time writing here, I have the basic idea down, but I would really like constructive criticism and maybe a greenlight if you believe that my idea is worth a page in the foundation. Thank you for your time.

Last edited on 14 Mar 2020 00:59 by KurisuRafosu Show more

Re: SCP Proposal: The Arrowhead of the Lifebringer

Theta454 05 Jan 2021 15:15

So I know this is form March of last year but you’ve got a good baseline and you just need some more meat. I’ll just ask you some questions that I think may help you build up this scp some more or perhaps change it’s dynamic entirely. (This is my first reply ever on the site so I’m sorry for the horrible formatting you’re about to witness.)

1. Who is the LifeBringer?

2. What goal(s) would the LifeBringer have?

3. What/who is the Lifebringer and what is it’s state existence (stuck within the arrowhead, a Soul watching over the arrowhead, omnipotent being, etc)?

4. Does it have the same effect if someone is pierced with the arrow by means of a bow and arrow?

5. Can you see the “Lifebringer” when a live person is stabbed?

6. What other effects does the arrow have on the living?

7. What happens when someone has the arrowhead inside them for over a day? month? A year?

8. What’s the purpose or goal of the reanimated corpse?
Is it sentient? Is it brain dead? Is it a “zombie”? Is it Lifebringer?

9. Are there multiple arrows? Was there ever a bow that went with the arrow?

10. What happens if you just poke the tip of your finger with the tip of the arrow?

11. What happens when it’s used on other SCPs? (682, 049, 914, etc)

That’s all the questions I can think of at this time but I hope it helps!

Forum Criticism Team - Captain Post

Zyn 06 Jan 2021 06:25

So I know this is form March of last year

Theta454, the author here has not been active since last year. If you'd like to provide feedback, please try to comment on threads that are currently active, rather than material that is most likely discontinued.

Re: SCP-5912 proposal

MalyceGraves 14 Mar 2020 03:21

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Mainlist article numbers are given out on a first-come, first-served basis. 5912 may or may not be available when you are ready to post to the main site, so I would not plan everything around getting that specific number.

This is why most proposed SCP articles utilize the "SCP-XXXX" format.

So we have an arrowhead that reanimates the dead or causes hallucinations in the living.

Annnd, here we go! ->

I guess my first question is why would anyone be shooting an arrow at someone/thing that was already dead? This addition really seems random as it is currently presented, and I fail to see how this bit adds anything to the story that you're trying to tell.

My second bit is that you've told us almost nothing about the narrative. Sure, you have a conversation between a doc and a D-class, but you don't tell us much at all about it. What makes this the central narrative? What did the D-class see while he was under that would make me interested in reading a draft about this?

Hook/Attention-Grabber: "What are the true effects of SCP-5912 and SCP-5912-1?"

This is only a hook if you've built up enough mystery surrounding the object to make those questions worth exploring. Right now, all I know is that it's an arrowhead that reanimates the dead or gives living people hallucinations.

This is not enough for your hook to grab me.

I will not be giving this the go-ahead.

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