SCP-492 / Discussion

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Yar, I like this.

A Fat Ghost 14 Feb 2009 03:03

It is quite neat. If only it weren't a pirate, that cloth man picture from the photo dump could be used up. Oh wells.

I smiled a bit at "Captain Jack." Changed all the "hes" to "its" though. If it is in fact male, sorry about that, and go ahead and revise.

Re: Yar, I like this.

Agent Circeus 14 Feb 2009 03:49

Referring to gendered SCPs as "it" is not a bad thing AFAIK. Certainly helps with the clinical tone.

Kain Pathos Crow 14 Feb 2009 13:57

Wow….

Uh… look up Climber on Deviantart by a guy called Unknown_Person. They're alarmingly similar.

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Agent Thornsmith 14 Feb 2009 18:30

Oh, he is adorable. Can we keep him?

Dave Rapp 15 Feb 2009 02:10

I'm evil. The first thing I wanted to do was conduct an experiment to see how badly he can be torn up before he dies and can't be sewn back together.

Partileman 01 Mar 2009 21:38

I like it. It's kinda cute.

Sorts 10 May 2009 05:21

The throw-away line at the end about the guys in the dinosaur ride trying to eat him is excellent.

Agent Peters 10 Jun 2009 22:22

Just a nitpick, but it says that if you erase his eyes or mouth he can't see or talk. It also says that they're drawn on in permanent marker. That doesn't sound right, does it?

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Gnosis 04 Aug 2009 01:37

Permanent marker is eraseable, just not easily.

Blade bane 10 Oct 2009 12:53

I adore this one. Hi-five to the person who wrote this, and nice end line as well.

Jorum 08 Nov 2009 21:54

OK really pendantic point coming up:

SCP-492: Well, that that would be about ██████ days to my best guess.
Dr. ███████: (coughs) You mean you've been wandering around that park for ██ years?!

that first blackout is 6 digits, the very minimum of 100,000 days is about 277 years. Which is kinda a lot.

pooryoric 10 Nov 2009 04:54

Agreed. perhaps that should be shortened. Most amusement parks haven't been around that long.

Jorum 10 Nov 2009 09:11

It would predate the war of independance.

wjmacguffin 09 Nov 2009 21:42

Fantastic entry! I really enjoyed something weird but not threatening all life as we know it.

Teenagers entering the abandoned amusement park? It's believable but I immediately thought of Scooby Doo. It won't make or break this article, but I'd recommend changing that to something else, such as real estate developers or amateur local historians.

How do we know that erasing Jack's facial features will ruin its ability to speak and whatnot? Did some doctor try that?

In my opinion, Addendum 3 could be cut and you wouldn't lose a thing. It seems a bit out of place and purposeless. It's kinda funny, don't get me wrong, but it's not hilarious either.

That's all I can recommend. Great work here!

Agent Circeus 10 Nov 2009 04:25

Teenagers entering the abandoned amusement park? It's believable but I immediately thought of Scooby Doo. It won't make or break this article, but I'd recommend changing that to something else, such as real estate developers or amateur local historians.

It's called urban exploration. And an abandoned amusement park is exactly the kind of place I'd expect teenagers to want to explore.

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