Overall
There are lots of SPaG errors in the interviews. I suggest reading the dialogue out loud to find them all. I have included a few here as reference.
The note block at the end of the first interview has a coding error, there's no closing mark to the italics. Also, you could probably just combine the "note" with the interview into a single collapsible. It's less clicking needed by the reader. Having it in an extra collapsible serves no purpose that I could find.
subject is currently ██ years old
I tend to avoid blackboxes whenever and wherever possible. This seems like a pointlessly redacted thing.
Since testing with SCP-████, subject suffers…
This is an example of blackboxing that is understandable, and I don't find it egregious.
There is also a Bolding error for one of the Subject entries for Dr. Escoffier's interview, past the sound file.
SUBJECT: SCP-D-67111 interview is all aligned-> center. It doesn't fit with previous formatting. Also, the note block at the end is missing the second italics syntax.
Addendum No. 1 D: Dr. Willow Amarte - bold formatting error. Also, the paragraph following is also aligned-> center.
The collapsible immediately following that is still showing the default show="" and hide="" text.
(800 Hours:)
I believe the proper way to show this is (0800 Hours:), but that may be a regional thing.
The second "Observed Recording Between Willow and Amie Amarte:" has several significant coding errors.
SPaG
SCP-4943 has been classified as a Yesod entity and had been implemented into The Foundation's command.
This reads like there is a word or two missing. "implemented into the Foundation's command" what? Integrated, rather than implemented, perhaps? Perhaps "by" instead of "into"? I'm not sure what's going on.
SCP-4943 is to be contained within a sound-proofed, copper-lined safe-class containment chamber, in site-60 when not in testing or during scheduled maintence.
maintenance. Also the commas. I suggest "…within a sound-proofed, copper-lined, safe-class containment chamber at Site-60…"
Also, caps on Site-60.
…treatment of memory disorders amomg staff…
among.
I've administered more amnestics then you probably have ever, Lucille. Of course, I'm ready.
I've administered more amnestics than you probably ever have, Lucille.
Subject: Yeah, yeah, I'm awake, now. I'm fine, assure from a headache, a bit of nausea and the sort.
I'm fine, aside from a headache, a bit of nausea, and the sort.
SUBJECT: Dr. Willow Amarte, Jr. Researcher Amie Amarte
Comma, after Jr.
Consistency/Flow
The Subclass: Prodest linking to the threat levels page seems to be incongruous. Maybe I'm missing something, but the threat levels page says nothing about subclasses.
SCP-4943 is to be contained…
I prefer the more active present "SCP-X is contained…", as "is to be" connotes that it isn't currently.
An oil-based lubricant applied to SCP-4943's inner machinery is to be blessed by a member of the Roseafaer clergy, following Hemingford's original instructions.
I have a few issues with this sentence. Hemingford hasn't been introduced yet, so this has no context yet. Also, I didn't actually see any document labeled "instructions" or any such in the rest of the document, so this is also inconsistent.
I'm also not a fan with the overall flow of the sentence, so I suggest the following:
"A special oil-based lubricant must be prepared prior to application to SCP-XXXX's inner machinery. Per the original instructions, this lubricant is also to be blessed by clergy of the Catholic(?) faith assigned to the diocese of Roseafaer, Scotland before use."
I could also simply be unaware of existing canon involving Roseafaer, so please excuse my ignorance.
Current research has shown that…
Does this also work on chemical amnestics and intentionally created cognitohazardous antimemes?
Due to the significant potential benefit SCP-4943's mnestic properties could provide in containment of memory-affecting SCPs and treatment of memory disorders amomg staff, testing with the aim of mass-producing SCP-4943-A has been approved.
Clunky. I suggest:
"SCP-XXXX presents a significant potential benefit due to it's mnestic properties. Testing on the utility of SCP-XXXX in aiding containment of memory affecting SCPs as well as the treatment of various memory disorders among staff is ongoing. Additionally, research into mass-producing SCP-XXXX-A has been conditionally approved based upon test outcomes."
Footnote "3" has two different spellings of Roseafaer.
Closing Remarks
I enjoyed reading this, even though the fight against dementia is a hard one to go over. Losing my memory like that is one of my deepest fears, and I dread having to one day face this in my own life.
As I said, all of the interviews and transcripts have multiple SPaG and syntax errors. I suggest going over them in detail to get them all. Also, I've found that reading all my dialogue aloud helps me to insure that it sounds fluid and natural.
