Abnormal Senses

Summary:

A creature from another world with dimension-jumping abilities and an unconventional set of senses [thread locked, repeat]

Abnormal Senses

Idontworkhere 28 Jan 2020 13:44

The creature lacks a lot of development in sight, taste, sound, touch, and smell. This makes it very cautious and skittish, but aggressive in a 1:1 situation. The creature has the innate ability to seek out and enter dimensional portals to its 'homeworld.' These are single-use, and can only be seen by the creature. When the creature returns to this world, it brings with it ONE abnormal method of detection. These 'senses' vary, but here are a few examples:
Knowledge of a person's intended location
Thermal Radiation
Memory Consumption
Emotional state
Knowledge of air currents

It uses these to attempt escape and if successful makes its way towards a spot in the Sahara, where a little black box sits buried in the sand…
critiques appreciated.

Admin Post - Info - Closed

Zyn 28 Jan 2020 17:01

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Re: Abnormal Senses

N_Aepic_Fael 28 Jan 2020 15:09

At the moment, this is just a thing that does a thing, which is a staple of Series 1 and 2 scips. That's not an inherently a bad thing, but the standards of the site have move on since then. Nowadays, most scips have some narrative these days that expand upon the core anomaly that ultimately makes the piece both more fleshed out and more interesting. To get a sense of what I mean, I advise reading more Series 4 and 5 SCPs.

I suggest checking out the Guides and Essays tab on the sidebar for more resources on crafting narratives.

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Re: Abnormal Senses

rattles 28 Jan 2020 15:14

In general, SCP ideas that are pretty much just a critter and its anomalous attributes are not likely to be successful unless they are extremely creative, primarily because so many of those already exist. In your case, you also seem to be giving this creature a mixture of telepathic and somatic abilities that don't really connect to each other at all.

My recommendation is to work out exactly what its "point" is, why it exists, what it is actually trying to get to in this black box, or something like that.

Re: Abnormal Senses

Idontworkhere 28 Jan 2020 16:55

The Creature's goal is to use the black box to enable a sort of permanent two way connection to our world- the black box is a larger version of the portals it creates. It is a member of an extra dimensional race that takes over and turns sentient beings into livestock. Its role is as a hunting dog. In the article's final mission log, it will be fitted with a camera and we will be able to see a little of its home world.