2-D object in 3-D space is not exactly what it seems.

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Seven seals for the Scarlet King, and the world dies in fives.

2-D object in 3-D space is not exactly what it seems.

PoolofLCL 27 Jan 2020 15:23

Seven seals for the Scarlet King, and the world dies in fives. But people die in threes, and that is your demise.

I trimmed your thread summary above, since it was taking up a lot of space on the forum listing. Try to keep thread descriptions and titles under 7 lines so you don't visually crowd out other people's threads. ~Zyn

My idea is a 2 dimensional object in 3-d space, where the number 3 slowly takes over the article, similar to fifthist articles, and leading to the phrase, "Seven seals for the Scarlet King, and the world ends in fives. But people die in threes, and that is your demise. The rest of the article is a simple "Thing that does a thing really well" to distract from the slowly growing presence of the number 3. It is generally still, but will move on occasion in response to threats. It is not sapient, and is composed of an unknown material. Actions it sees as threats include: having weapons directed at it and attempts to remove a piece of it (remotely or directly) within a three meter radius. The object can only be fully observed at a 90 degree angle. Attempts to view it head on will result in the viewer not seeing anything where the object is. It was discovered in a raid on an anart convention in Stockholm. Can cut through most objects, however it has difficulty with differing or alternating patterns of material.

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Re: 2-D object in 3-D space is not exactly what it seems.

Kelas Benkom 27 Jan 2020 15:36

Seems like a cool idea! Although it is a very basic concept and needs to be written well to pull it of. Because of the clinical way SCP's are written, numbers tend to stick out even more then they do already in written text. So to mask the fact that the number three is becoming more and more prevalent in the text you should find creative way's to include 3.

Some suggestions here:

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1. Maybe try to decrease paragraph length at the end to contain only three sentences or three lines.
2. If there are any characters in your SCP like foundation staff members they could have names with 3's in them. Maybe a tres(spanish) or trois(french) but the lesser known the language the more hidden it is.
3. Luckily the number 3 is very well represented in nature. This article may be of help finding more 3's to use. But a quick search on google will help you find loads more.
4. Maybe a visual aspect of the SCP-article can be used. After a certain number of pages highlight every third word, or spell something out with the first word of every sentence so that it reveals even more three's.
5. In my opinion these kind of ideas are best when they are subtle enough that you do not notice when you read it at first, but glaringly obvious when you know about it. Like Michael Madhusudan Dutt's Sentences without E’s or the novel Gadsby by Ernest Vincent Wright.
6. These are all suggestions that sprung to my mind from your initial concept, so i'm sure there are a lot more creative ways to include 3's/triplets. But most importantly it has to be an entertaining SCP even without knowing the truth about the 3's.

If you're going to include fifth-ism you could maybe include something like the movie The number 23. In it a man finds that everything in his life is in some way connected to the number 23.
Also maybe check out this little video about how 100% of all numbers contain the number 3.

Hopefully you find this helpful.

Edit: Edited my reply to give more concrete advise!

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MalyceGraves 27 Jan 2020 15:42

Kelas Benkom, the forum crit team prioritizes posts without any responses. Vague and unhelpful critique can prevent the original poster from getting the help that they're looking for.

For example, if you're going to say something like:

Although it is a very basic concept and needs to be written well to pull it of.

You should add some suggestions on how to pull it off better.

Re: 2-D object in 3-D space is not exactly what it seems.

PoolofLCL 27 Jan 2020 16:37

The number 3 is very well represented in nature.

That's why I chose it. Also, I was going to replace every "e" with the number 3.

Because of the clinical way SCPs are written, numbers tend to stick out even more.

That's the whole idea. I wanted to slowly show how it was encroaching on the article, and what it all means in the end without giving it away to early.

The point of the "Thing that does a thing" is to act as a red herring to what is really going on. Overall, thanks for the advice, as this is my first real idea I wanted to flesh out.