New SCP idea

Summary:

Second try at an SCP for a school project :)

New SCP idea

Chasz Ducharme 21 Jan 2020 19:36

So the SCP is a stone vaguely resembling something curled up into a ball found at the bottom of the Pacific ocean during a deep sea exploration, when found the stone was giving off a faint warmth and was brought to the attention on the SCP foundation the day there of. And during transportation little chunks of the rock fall off exposing different furs and skins from multiple animals including humans, the SCP will vaguely resemble a dog with multiple physical traits from animals found in its DNA, Including sabertooth teeth, woolly mammoth horns, shark/dolphin gills and other traits that will develop while it matures. It was made during the ice age and will mostly have animals that survived during the ice age in its DNA.

That's all I have so far concerning the details, but I'm planning for it to be a SCP that has alot of experiments done finding out the extent of its mutations. Thank you for any and all feedback (◍•ᴗ•◍)

Last edited on 05 Feb 2020 16:18 by Chasz Ducharme Show more

Re: New SCP idea

Doctor Fullham 22 Jan 2020 01:47

What you have currently is the "thing that does a thing" or "X that does Y" concept. An SCP article is much more than simply an anomalous item, being, place, or event. The true meat of the SCP is the story around the anomalous thing. The thing itself is a vehicle that the narrative is attached to. To give my best example from Series 1, look at SCP 093: The anomalous item itself is a rock that turns mirrors into interdimensional portals. The thing that makes this SCP shine is the story; the history of the dimension that it leads to.

I recommend reading several items on the Guide Hub:

How to Write an SCP

Things What Do a Thing: An Essay On Anomalies That Are Things That Do A Thing

Essay Regarding SCPs, Narratives, and How They Can Share a Page

There are other guides there that can be very helpful, but these are some of the most often recommended for first-time contributors.

General Notes

We need to know more than just "it's a rock(?) that has skin/fur/body parts of different animals found on Earth in it." What story are you going to tell - How The Foundation found it, Who or what created it and why, did someone use it to some end? (These are not all questions that must be answered, these are some possible narrative hooks.) You need something that differentiates this as an SCP, instead of just an Anomalous Item.

I recommend reading a significant amount of the top-rated SCPs from the last several months, and focus on reading more recent SCPs rather than older series. Many early series SCPs would not last a day under current SCP standards, and a few are only still around because of their history with the wiki itself. (This does not apply to all early series SCPs, but many of these were written before the wiki's style had really been cemented.)

The anomalous object, while important, is not actually the main focus of the SCP. A good story, a compelling narrative, something that makes the reader feel something - that is the goal of an SCP article. What feeling do you want to evoke from the reader? Horror? Empathy? Sadness? You need to create a narrative around this object and its effects.

I am not saying this to discourage you, I just want you to understand the amount of effort that goes into creating a successful SCP.

If you can revise this idea with a story that you want to tell, we will be able to give you much more meaningful and constructive critique.

The anomalous item is the vehicle, the narrative is the person driving, the readers are the passengers. You can have the shiniest, most polished, most interesting vehicle in the world, but without the driver, the passengers aren't going anywhere. Where is the narrative taking the readers, and how is it getting them there?

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Re: New SCP idea

Chasz Ducharme 27 Jan 2020 14:36

Thanks :)

Re: New SCP idea

Mew-ltiverse 27 Jan 2020 15:57

Immediately, this stood out to me:

I'm planning for it to be a SCP that has alot of experiments done or cross linking with other scps.

I highly advise against this. I am not saying not to crosslink. I am saying that writing an article that depends on other articles is not likely to do very well. Most SCPs should be able to stand on their own in some fashion.

Next, the visualization this gives off is pretty neat but it just kinda abruptly stops. You did say you want to develop it more, so I highly suggest that, as it's a bit hard to critique what you have now, at least in my opinion, if we don't have the full idea.

Re: New SCP idea

Chasz Ducharme 27 Jan 2020 17:16

Thank you so much, this is due early March so I'm trying to work on it as much as possible. :)

Re: New SCP idea

Chasz Ducharme 04 Feb 2020 14:37

^{No drafts in the ideas forum- Mgmt}

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Forum Criticism Team - Staff Post

TheMightyMcB 04 Feb 2020 16:02

Chasz Ducharme, do not double post in the forums. It is explicitly against the rules to prevent spam buildup. Instead, edit your posts at the bottom right under "Options".

Additionally, this forum is specifically for IDEAS, not sandbox drafts. Do not link them here.

Re: Forum Criticism Team - Staff Post

Chasz Ducharme 05 Feb 2020 16:40

Thank you fixing my f*ck up :)