Omnieverything Maid

Summary:

A maid that is able to carry out any task, despite some being literally impossible. Seeking greenlights/help!

Omnieverything Maid

LadyAshalara 21 Jan 2020 01:24

The idea I had was there is this maid that is able to do any task she is given. While this may range from the normal, "Clean my car" command, the real anomalous property here is in a case where the maid is told to "Serve me an edible piece of the fabric of the universe", in which case, she would bring an edible area of the fabric of the universe. I thought it was interesting enough to put out there for a greenlight.

Re: Omnieverything Maid

Doctor Fullham 21 Jan 2020 03:27

What you have currently is the "Superpowered humanoid" or "X-Man" concept. An SCP article is much more than simply an anomalous item, being, place, or event. The true meat of the SCP is the story around the anomalous thing. The thing itself is a vehicle that the narrative is attached to. To give my best example from Series 1, look at SCP 093: The anomalous item itself is a rock that turns mirrors into interdimensional portals. The thing that makes this SCP shine is the story; the history of the dimension that it leads to.

I recommend reading several items on the Guide Hub:

How to Write an SCP

Essay Regarding SCPs, Narratives, and How They Can Share a Page

There are other guides there that can be very helpful, but these are some of the most often recommended for first-time contributors.

As you are pitching a humanoid SCP idea, I also recommend reading So You Want To Write A Humanoid SCP Object to assist in avoiding the "X-Men problem."

General Notes

We need to know more than just "she's a maid that can do anything she's told to." What story are you going to tell - How The Foundation found her, Who or what created her and why, did someone use her to some end? Does she have her own motivations? Personality? Goals? (These are not all questions that must be answered, these are some possible narrative hooks.)

I recommend reading a significant amount of the top-rated SCPs from the last several months, and focus on reading more recent SCPs rather than older series. Many early series SCPs would not last a day under current SCP standards, and a few are only still around because of their history with the wiki itself. (This does not apply to all early series SCPs, but many of these were written before the wiki's style had really been cemented.)

The anomalous entity, while important, is not actually the main focus of the SCP. A good story, a compelling narrative, something that makes the reader feel something - that is the goal of an SCP article. What feeling do you want to evoke from the reader? Horror? Empathy? Sadness? You need to create a narrative around this person and her abilities.

I am not saying this to discourage you, I just want you to understand the amount of effort that goes into creating a successful SCP.

If you can revise this idea with a story that you want to tell, we will be able to give you much more meaningful and constructive critique.

The anomalous being is the vehicle, the narrative is the person driving, the readers are the passengers. You can have the shiniest, most polished, most interesting vehicle in the world, but without the driver, the passengers aren't going anywhere. Where is the narrative taking the readers, and how is it getting them there?

Re: Omnieverything Maid

LadyAshalara 21 Jan 2020 18:50

In hindsight, I probably should have included the the general story I had planned along with the original post. While the narrative to this idea is still somewhat in development, here's what I have so far:

The maid herself used to be a normal person until she came across an anomalous object, and this object is what had given her the abilities she now possesses. Though despite this object being severely potent and powerful, I planned for this object to have a *reason* in order for it's properties to be activated. In such, the story I wanted to tell is that this object was passed down through multiple many generations and had many owners to it.

So, as a summary, the SCP idea I sort of had was an object, not a human and that the owner must have a reason in order to use the object in question. Hopefully this helps with critique!

Also, I do not mind the information you have already given to me! I'm happy this community is such a welcoming place!

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