Okay, for starters: I like this idea. It's got horror movie vibes out the whazoo in the best ways. Creepy kids, creepy house, only the kids see what's going on in the house. Reminds me of a combination of IT and The Shining, two of my favorite horror movies of all time.
However, I do have a few things that I hope you can clarify:
What caught the Foundation’s attention were reports of children visiting the house and talking about the family within, despite the house being abandoned for several years.
Why would The Foundation take notice of this? It just sounds like kids playing make-believe to me. What incident occurs that actually attracts the Foundation's attention?
They then brought children who were not from the area and each one experienced the same things as the others.
What led them to believe that this would be a variable that needed testing? Did they simply want children from outside of the town to make sure it wasn't some urban legend that got out of hand?
The oldest of the group, usually a 9 or 10 year old, are technically classified as researchers (this may change, as I'm not 100% on it yet), while the rest of the group are classified as D-Class (this one I'm sure of).
This….this is the biggest issue I have. The Foundation is willing to do some shady stuff, but using children for testing is a big deal, even for them. Even if the anomaly isn't outwardly shown to be dangerous, knowingly exposing children to one is….it's not impossible, but it needs a huge disclaimer and one hell of a justification. Again, not impossible, but they would handle this with the utmost care. Also, classifying any of the children as "D-Class" is just….I can't buy that bit. D-Class are people whom the foundation will throw into the fire to see what color they burn. That's not a classification I see them ever giving to an innocent kid. Using them in an experiment because only children can interact with the anomaly is one thing, but putting any child on par with a D-Class is a bridge too far for me.
I have to say, this bit right here:
Simply being able to interact with the inhabitants of the house: a young girl (who acts as a companion and friend to the children), a mother (who comes off as a caretaker of sorts), a father (a dangerous, as reported by the children, individual who they avoid at the request of the girl), and the baby brother (A baby with a missing eye, who reportedly doesn't do much if left alone). The more they interact with her and her family, the stranger dreams they have.
Yes. Just, all the yes. Something that goes from innocent to creepy to downright sinister is a progression that I personally love, and kids being involved just dials the creep factor up to 11. And the fact that this would all have to be told to researchers by the kids who experienced / are experiencing it? Fucking A+.
And then I get to the last bit.
These dreams are where the true story will come into play, with each one for each child becoming darker and referencing something else in play. This will be the reasons for the drawings, as the children will be unable to properly explain the dreams through words.
Holy. Shit. YES.
I'm interested to see what you might come up with for this whole nightmare concept. I love what you have here so far.
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