So my SCP is a hair comb that turns emotional states into radiation. The type of radiation depends on the emotional state. So negative emotions(Anger, lust, and depression) turn into ionizing radiation, and positive ones into thermal radiation.
So my SCP is a hair comb that turns emotional states into radiation. The type of radiation depends on the emotional state. So negative emotions(Anger, lust, and depression) turn into ionizing radiation, and positive ones into thermal radiation.
What activates these effects? Does it have to be actively used as a comb?
What you have currently is the "thing that does a thing" or "X that does Y" concept. An SCP article is much more than simply an anomalous item, being, place, or event. The true meat of the SCP is the story around the anomalous thing. The thing itself is a vehicle that the narrative is attached to. To give my best example from Series 1, look at SCP 093: The anomalous item itself is a rock that turns mirrors into interdimensional portals. The thing that makes this SCP shine is the story; the history of the dimension that it leads to.
Things What Do a Thing: An Essay On Anomalies That Are Things That Do A Thing
Essay Regarding SCPs, Narratives, and How They Can Share a Page
There are other guides there that can be very helpful, but these are some of the most often recommended for first-time contributors.
We need to know more than just "it's a comb that turns emotions into radiation." What story are you going to tell - How The Foundation found it, Who or what created it and why, did someone use it to some end? (These are not all questions that must be answered, these are some possible narrative hooks.) You need something that differentiates this as an SCP, instead of just an Anomalous Item.
I also recommend reading a significant amount of the top-rated SCPs from the last several months, and focus on reading more recent SCPs rather than older series. Many early series SCPs would not last a day under current SCP standards, and a few are only still around because of their history with the wiki itself. (This does not apply to all early series SCPs, but many of these were written before the wiki's style had really been cemented.)
The anomalous object, while important, is not actually the main focus of the SCP. A good story, a compelling narrative, something that makes the reader feel something - that is the goal of an SCP article. What feeling do you want to evoke from the reader? Horror? Empathy? Sadness? You need to create a narrative around this object and its effects.
I am not saying this to discourage you, I just want you to understand the amount of effort that goes into creating a successful SCP.
If you can revise this idea with a story that you want to tell, we will be able to give you much more meaningful and constructive critique.
The anomalous item is the vehicle, the narrative is the person driving, the readers are the passengers. You can have the shiniest, most polished, most interesting vehicle in the world, but without the driver, the passengers aren't going anywhere. Where is the narrative taking the readers, and how is it getting them there?
Sorry I'm new, but my idea is (it's dumb I know) the SCP foundation found it after a couple got into a fight around it and it blew them up. Only emotions trigger it, you don't have to use it has a comb for it to kill you. Thanks for the advice I really appreciate it :)
I first want to ask how lust is considered a "bad" emotional state. in a religious view I suppose it is, and if the comb is somehow inferred to be of religious origins, fair dos, but otherwise, lust in my opinion isn't a negative emotional state, it's a primal emotion that's powered simply by biological evolution and the inherent need to reproduce, morally speaking, there is nothing wrong with that.
I'm also not sure how these types of radiation would result in an explosion, I know ionizing radiation is part and parcel of a nuclear bomb, but ionizing radiation isn't in and of itself a combustible thing that causes explosions, arguably thermal is, as it affects surrounding objects which can be more unstable and prone to explosions, but this contradicts the two parameters you've set Ionizing = negative emotions, Thermal = positive emotions.
Talking about these two things. You've stated 2 polar triggers that cause 2 different things, so unless you plan to expand upon the list of what certain emotions will do, then this discovery event does not make much sense.
Also, for lack of a better description, I don't want to come across as a "huge asshole". I would highly advise against calling your own work dumb unless it's intentionally so, it strips any sort of credibility to your work because it shows a lack of self confidence in the author.
Ok thanks for the advice, I just pulled lust out of a hat. The comb can generate x-rays(that's what I meant by explosion) when charged enough. I was going to put an experiment log because the foundation already knows about negative reactions, so they were going to test it with different emotional states










