Ancient Egyptian painting Idea concept

Summary:

Different paintings that do mysterious things.

Ancient Egyptian painting Idea

Asimplehumanbean 30 Dec 2019 15:16

SCP(insert number) is a series of painting discovered under different pyramids.

The first painting is of a line of women walking with different objects on their head,found in the Khafra pyramid. If a person(subject 1) observes this painting for approximately 20 seconds They will then start walking(object balanced on head) To present day Giza in Greater Cairo, Egypt. If they reach their location they will form the object(no matter what it is) to a square block shape an place it about 40 to 100 feet from the nearest pyramid there that has enough space next to it. If the object is too dense/tough to form into a block the subject will gradually gain strength from unknown means eventually turning said object into a block.

+ show block

The second painting is of a single woman standing with a pot on her right side,also found in the khafra. If a person(subject 2) observes this for 20 seconds a carrying(?) pot with manifest itself on subject 2's right side(or left depending on their main hand) made of the persons tissue and bone. They will stand stationary until a person who is affected by the first painting comes near. If this happens subject 2 will follow subject 1. The pot that they are carrying will gradually fill up with blood, when thy both reach their destination subject 1 will stand with subject 2( who's pot is now full) Subject 2's pot blood(?) will start turning into a sand like substance. subject 2 will then pour this "sand" onto the block that subject 1 has made. The "sand" cannot come off of the block despite numerous efforts form the foundation nor can the block be broken.

There are three other paintings which have not yet been tested by the foundation including a painting of a woman flying towards the son, found in a Pharaohs grave. a giant lion with a human head consuming a group of people, found in the pyramid of Menkaure, and a painting of a person in a crown standing on top of the pyramid, around there are various people who have different animal mask on, found in the Khafra pyramid

Notes: Subjects will not carry objects that are initially too heavy for them.

After subject has completed said block they will revert back to normal with no memory of the event.

Subject will take breaks during said trip unless the trip is less than 5 miles away.

If subject cannot make trip by walking, swimming, running, etc.. they will utilize current means of travel.
subject 2 is always follow subject no matter where subject 1 goes.

edit: if the object is too soft the subject will somehow start turning it more…say… tougher, in order to form a block shape. this process is currently unknown, because subject will stop all activity if anyone comes within a 100 meter radius when they've reached their location.

further searching of the Khafra pyramid is on going

As a courtesy to our readers on mobile devices, please collapse long posts. ~Zyn

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Re: Ancient Egyptian painting Idea

Asimplehumanbean 30 Dec 2019 16:07

Question
Is there such a thing as too graphic on this site?

I was going to make it so that people turn themselves into blocks but I didn't know what the limit was here.

Re: Ancient Egyptian painting Idea

Doctor Fullham 30 Dec 2019 16:22

Is there such a thing as too graphic on this site?

Some of the stuff around here gets pretty high up on the body horror scale, especially the Sarkic stuff, and there's literally a sex goddess, so it's really more up to you as the author to set the limits.

Re: Ancient Egyptian painting Idea

Doctor Fullham 30 Dec 2019 16:12

This is….an interesting starting point. You seem to have put a fair bit of thought into what this thing can do. However, what you have currently is the "thing that does a thing" or "X that does Y" concept. An SCP article is much more than simply an anomalous item, being, place, or event. The true meat of the SCP is the story around the anomalous thing. The thing itself is a vehicle that the narrative is attached to. To give my best example from Series 1, look at SCP 093: The anomalous item itself is a rock that turns mirrors into interdimensional portals. The thing that makes this SCP shine is the story; the history of the dimension that it leads to.

I recommend reading several items on the Guide Hub:

How to Write an SCP

Clinical Tone: Declassified

Things What Do a Thing: An Essay On Anomalies That Are Things That Do A Thing

Essay Regarding SCPs, Narratives, and How They Can Share a Page

There are other guides there that can be very helpful, but these are some of the most often recommended for first-time contributors.

General Notes

We need to know more than just "it's a painting that makes people build pyramids." What story are you going to tell - How The Foundation found it, Who or what created it and why, did someone use it to some end? (These are not all questions that must be answered, these are some possible narrative hooks.) You need something that differentiates this as an SCP, instead of just an Anomalous Item.

I also recommend reading several (at least 10-20) of the top-rated SCPs from the last several months, and avoid reading series 1 SCPs for inspiration. Many series 1 SCPs would not last a day under current SCP standards, and a few are only still around because of their history with the wiki itself. (This does not apply to all series 1 SCPs, as you can see I mentioned 093 earlier, but many of these were written before the wiki's style had really been cemented.)

The anomalous object, while important, is not actually the main focus of the SCP. A good story, a compelling narrative, something that makes the reader feel something - that is the goal of an SCP article. What feeling do you want to evoke from the reader? Horror? Empathy? Sadness? You need to create a narrative around this object and its effects.

I am not saying this to discourage you, I just want you to understand the amount of effort that goes into creating a successful SCP.

If you can revise this idea with a story that you want to tell, we will be able to give you much more meaningful and constructive critique.

The anomalous item is the vehicle, the narrative is the person driving, the readers are the passengers. You can have the shiniest, most polished, most interesting vehicle in the world, but without the driver, the passengers aren't going anywhere. Where is the narrative taking the readers, and how is it getting them there?

Re: Ancient Egyptian painting Idea

Asimplehumanbean 30 Dec 2019 16:18

story?

oh ok…

This painting was discovered when two amaetuer diggers found this painting in perfect condition under pyramid Khufu. When they were taken by authorities( for illegally digging) they handed over the painting. The authorities discovered its affects and handed it over to the foundation. When questioned on how they didn't look at it for that long they stated that they were just worried about the police and getting outside so they only looked at it for a few seconds.

The foundation searched the pyramid and discovered another painting, they have yet to discover its anomalous affects.

The foundation is currently searching not only the rest of pyramid Khufu, but all of the other pyramids

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Re: Ancient Egyptian painting Idea

Doctor Fullham 30 Dec 2019 16:36

That's a very basic and, to be frank, not super engaging narrative. You need something in there that is going to really engage the reader. The SCP itself is interesting, sure, but most modern SCPs have a narrative that really draws you in. What emotion are you trying to get from the reader? Note that the questions I asked are just some possible narrative hooks, not something every SCP article must answer. What you have there is less of a story and more of just a series of things that happened before the Foundation found it.

Re: Ancient Egyptian painting Idea

Asimplehumanbean 30 Dec 2019 16:24

Thanks for the feedback

Its highly appreciated :)

Should I simply edit this or make a new post?

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gee0765 30 Dec 2019 16:30

Edit this post. Duplicate threads are against the forum guidelines.

As a side note, do not make several replies to the same comment. Instead, use the edit function to edit in any additional information to the initial reply. This way, it's not as spammy and isn't against the rules.