Object Class: Keter
Definitely.
Special Containment Procedures: Webcrawler programs TpFC v.7, v.8, and v.9 (collectively designated TpFC) have been designed to monitor for all instances of SCP-XXXX that appear on the internet. TpFC v.7 was created for prioritizing advice forums for fiction writers, v.8 for social media at large, and v.9 for all other miscellaneous sources.
Break up the blocks of text to make it easier to read.
Once an instance of SCP-XXXX has been detected, TpFC will delete infected subject's account and all posts, as well as track activity of other accounts who have interacted with these posts to prevent further spread. The program will simultaneously search for all real-world information belonging to subjects' account, including full legal name, most up-to-date address, and current GPS location if available.
I would suggest something along the lines of:
Once an instance of SCP-XXXX has been detected, TpFC will copy all meta and user data associated with the infected subject's account onto a secure database, then purge all existant infected material from the internet. Simultaneously, TpFC will track activity of other accounts who have interacted with these posts to prevent further spread.
This information will be sent to the MTF¶ ("Word Scramblers") team appropriate for that indicated region.
Consider: This quarantined data will be transmitted to the MTF-¶ ("Word Scramblers") regional team appropriate to the user's location.
MTF¶ members have one or more mental disability that severely affect reading comprehension in order to counteract SCP-XXXX's effects as much as possible. MTF¶ are equipped with real-time censoring headsets with visors and ear pieces programmed by TpFC to block visual and verbal instances.
I really wouldn't call it a disability. I suggest asking someone more familiar with this, but calling it a mental disability can be really offensive to some.
Additionally, consider: All MTF-¶ members are exclusively selected from lists of available agents that consistently score low (<25%) on the Kleppenfeld-Ritker Reading Comprehension test. Additionally, all MTF-¶ agents are inoculated monthly against known reading-induced memetic hazards.
Also, I suggest MTF-¶ instead of MTF¶. It fits with the standard followed by most of the site.
Each MTF¶ team is responsible for investigating within their assigned region of English-speaking populations. They will track, assess, and, if necessary, detain all subjects. MTF¶ is authorized to use professional opinion when determining type and dosage of amnestics, depending on progression of infection and severity of symptoms.
Break up the block here. Also, all MTF teams that interact with the general public are given this freedom. If they didn't, incidents would quickly spiral out of control while the field agents fought through red tape getting permission to use amnestics.
Subjects discovered to have survived infection may recover if administered to the nearest hospital with implanted Foundation agents within a timely manner. As of 09/21/2017, amnestics have been proven to be an effective cure for infection, with negligible side effects.
This sentence doesn't make much sense, consistently. If field-administered amnestics are sufficient to cure the infected, then why must they be sent to the hospital? If that is an old conproc, I suggest striking it.
MTF¶ teams are also also responsible for locating, collecting, and incinerating all physical instances of SCP-XXXX-1.
All information about the infection may be accessed by those with a Pathology Clearance of level 2 or higher.
I don't know what this means at all. Is this a security clearance level? Is it referencing people with specific memetic inoculations? Please clarify.
SCP-XXXX-1 is the collective designation for all notes, drafts, outlines, manuscripts, and other related material created by the infected writer, designated "subject."
I'd be careful here, I was initially confused by the designations. I'd designate the people infected as SCP-X-1, and the stuff they spawn as SCP-X-1A, just for clarity.
Subjects are primarily writers of novels but can come from any background whose preferred medium can carry a fictional narrative, such as movies, television series, music videos, songs, poetry, live plays, short stories, etc.
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The rate of progression and severity of symptoms is dependent on subject's proficiency and the amount….
It is currently unknown how long SCP-XXXX has existed, or by what mechanisms it was created, but the TpFC Webcrawlers show that the infection has been spreading since at least 2006, during the period when online chat rooms and forums started gaining popularity.
Run on sentence. Consider:
To date, TpFC Webcrawlers have only been able to identify the SCP-XXXX infection in posts from 2006 and later. It is not currently known if this represents the earliest known iterations of the infection, nor does it indicate by which processes the infection was created.
On 7/13/2017, Agent David Pham and his team were investigating a reported sighting of an unrelated SCP object. Four days later, Agent Mathew Roman, Agent Pham's accompanying team member, reported Pham acting counter to Roman's personal assessment. The following is an excerpt from an informal interview regarding this concern.
This is awkwardly crafted. Consider:
On 07/13/2017, Field Agent David Pham was reported as behaving in a way that was inconsistent with observed norms. The report was filed by Field Agent Roman, one of Agent Pham's fellow team members. An excerpt from his report follows:
Look. Davy's a writer. Always has been and always will be. He's very …let's go with …particular. About the way he writes, his artistic process. He'll gladly share whatever he's got to share, but only when he has it. Only then.
Been that way ever since he was a kid. 'If I don't have anything to say yet, I won't say it yet.' But over the past few days now, he keeps going on and on about these, like, partial ideas he gets. 'Oh, I got a great idea for a character.'
'Cool. What do they do? Where do they go?'
'I don't know yet. It'll come to me soon.'
That's not Davy. I know, I know. I'm not as good with words as he is, so I don't know how to describe it. Wrong. It's just wrong. I don't know. I hope it's nothing, though.
Agent Pham was then taken to be tested and found to be infected by a previously undiscovered memetic hazard. After quick deliberation between the Ethics Comity and lead memetic experts, Agent Pham, provisionally designated E-45765, was isolated in a standard observation cell in Site 50 under the belief that it was related to his previous assignment.
I would revise this entirely. I'm not sure why the Ethics Committee was involved, instead of just sending Pham to the Antimemetics department. Seems to me that that'd be the standard protocol.
The following is a summary of E-45765's progression through the infection.
{{collapsible show="Day 01 of Observation" hide="Interview 01"]]
E-45765 was seen pacing across the room and muttering to himself. He abruptly stopped and requested to be supplied with his personal notebook and a writing utensil. The notebook was retrieved from the subject's home a few hours later. A D-class personnel was sent in and an impromptu interview began.
I don't understand why a D-class was sent in and allowed to stay. In fact, this whole interview procedure is awkward and doesn't flow well. What happens to Pham is not bad, but I think you could do away with all of the interviews.
During observation, E-## steadily progressed through several stages of worsening symptoms…. compulsion is really kind of tricky to write, and it is difficult to make it work right. Best advice I can give is to ditch most of the interviews and just summarize. The last interview is the one that's interesting, so keep that part if you want.
{{collapsible show="Aftermath" hide="Aftermath"]]
This aftermath is great. No major errors I can see.
