SCP Idea - I've Been There

Summary:

A 4000 series SCP idea.

SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 21 Sep 2019 19:24

I thought about this a few days ago, The SCP itself is a completely dark figure with visibe human-like eyes that would appear in video, and images from your past, but in the background going unnoticed. In videos, the figure wouldn't be seen doing anything except blinking. After seeing a picture or video of yourself with the SCP in it, you would be eternally cursed with paranoia and the sense of being watched, nothing would happen to you physically, but your mental state is screwed with. Just an idea. If you have any other ideas, recommendations or changes, please reply.

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Uncle Nicolini 22 Sep 2019 15:21

Right now this makes for a good creepypasta, but not a good SCP.
To elaborate, you've got the right idea for what makes for something striking. Memories and cursed media are an interesting place to take a haunting, but think about it for a second. What kind of person does this affect? Does it target specific memories/events?

I personally would avoid the generic vengeful spirit approach. What if this was a ghost that haunted media of a childhood friend you had forgotten that was only trying to get you to remember them? Or alternatively, what if this affected people who have seen their relatives die?
The possibilities are endless here. For some help fleshing this out please read the following guides
http://www.scp-wiki.net/yourjouney-part-1
http://www.scp-wiki.net/things-what-do-a-thing-an-essay-on-things

Once you've fleshed this out a little more please PM me and I will let you know if I can greenlight this.

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 22 Sep 2019 15:36

The SCP isn't necessarily a vengeful spirit, it's more of an entity that intends to creep you out, but not in a bad way. The entity is something that wants to have a good life, so it manifests in photos of a person having a good time, because it wants to have fun again. the anomaly itself isn't dangerous, but it's effects is the dangerous parts.

So, I guess I've changed it up from being a bit scary, to heartwarming. Is that a bad thing? I'm going to read those articles and wait for you to reply. Thanks for helping!

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Uncle Nicolini 22 Sep 2019 15:44

Good! Now how would you communicate this to the audience via the article? Obviously you can't have an interview log here, so I recommend really emphasizing on it appearing in the happy memories and obviously not intending harm.

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 22 Sep 2019 15:58

I'm not too sure, maybe the article would say "SCP-4XXX-1 seemingly only appears in media where a person or persons is having a good time, every test on this has come out true." Other than that, I'm not too sure. Maybe the foundation takes pictures of good and bad times, and they look at them over the course of a few weeks, and notice that the SCP only appears in good pictures, but not bad ones.

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Uncle Nicolini 22 Sep 2019 16:20

I like the Foundation trying to make it manifest.
Consider this greenlit. I hope you're able to pull this off well.
Good luck.

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 22 Sep 2019 16:28

Thank you so much! I'll type up a draft and link it to you!

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Uncle Nicolini 22 Sep 2019 16:33

Don't forget to get a second greenlight, as per the draft and crit forum's policy.
You can go on #thecritters in IRC or PM someone from the butterfly squad to get a second greenlight.

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 22 Sep 2019 16:40

Oh, I forgot. Thanks!

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Ayers 28 Sep 2019 14:21

I really like the revised idea here so I'll go ahead and give this my greenlight. I had a few issues with the original pitch, but the idea of a ghost that just wants a good time by visiting happy memories is a unique and interesting idea. I'm looking forward to seeing how you present that in a draft.

What story are you planning on telling, though? Does the Foundation figure out what the ghost wants and functionally contains it by giving it only happy photos? Does the ghost finally pass on? In stories like these it's important to humanize the SCP or else we'll likely not attach to it, making the final revelation less impactful.

Best of luck!

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• Let's Talk About Writing Characters For A Minute

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 30 Sep 2019 21:11

Thanks all! I'll be typing a draft and I'll leave a link in the drafts and critiques section. Hopefully my SCP will stick!

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 01 Oct 2019 19:10

I finished the draft! Here is the post. http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-12628229/a-draft-for-my-first-scp

Re: SCP Idea - I've Been There

Vecter Specter 16 Nov 2019 18:21

I really want this to be on the site, but I'm not to sure how to put it all in a draft. I may need some help if anyone doesn't mind.

Forum Criticism Team - Captain Post

Zyn 16 Nov 2019 18:43

Vecter Specter, per the Ideas Critique guidelines, please do not bump threads to attract attention; that generates spam and is unfair to other authors in the forums.

If you're having trouble getting further replies on a thread, you can go to the IRC chatroom and ask people there if they can reply to the forum thread, or message a staff member and ask them if they can direct chat attention to the thread. Alternatively, reach out directly to a Butterfly Squad Roster reviewer.

ETA: also, per your previous draft thread, for the level of personal assistance you seem to be asking for you may be better off seeking a co-author. If you want someone to give you in-depth writing help and basically walk you through the generation of the actual draft material, you might as well give them co-author credit for all that extra work, beyond the usual scope of a reviewer's duties. You can find information on co-authoring pages here: http://www.scp-wiki.net/zyns-co-authoring-tips

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