Murdel Self is a very dangerous scp that wears in different ways and its appearance constantly changes to different human traits with the exception of a mask, this scp has a very cloudy and censored oasado, as if that were not enough, this scp causes people to enter tranze uh intend to kill this scp. If they manage to do so, murder self acquires a skill from their murderer (general, chemical or physical property) after 5 hours he is resuscitated with the skill already applied.
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This honestly just feels like a S1-esque magic item/over-the-top super killer humanoid. Ideas like these get deleted nearly every day, and I can't say I see this turning into anything promising, unfortunately. Gonna be a hard no from me.
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But if you want the scp I'd like it be, couple be -4361
First: They didn't ask for the SCP draft so I would wait to link it till they do.
Note: So I won't be looking at the draft for this, just the concept.
The murder self is an humanoid with a mask, the rest of the body is always different and does not have distinctive features.
'Always different' is very discreet. List an example of what you mean by 'always different.' Also consider how this would play in with the anomaly and the story you're trying to tell.
The main scp anomaly is when he dies, it absorbs an important skill of his killer and respawn in his body after 5 hours fully healed.
Maybe it's just me, but I straight up don't understand what you're trying to say here. I would be more specific with details in a pitch.
Hope I could help! There wasn't a lot to work with, but I hope I did okay with what was there.
OK so the draft doesn't make any sense to me, In the future I would plug it into grammerly or get a friend to read over it. But from what I can gather from the summery Its some guy with a mask that when killed by someone absorbs there killers abilities? ( it that right)
Ok so here the problem I see with this!
The main scp anomaly is when he dies, it absorbs an important skill of his killer
Why do people or things want to kill this guy? You act like this happens very often so why do people kill him? Is there something about him that makes people want to kill him?
it absorbs an important skill of his killer and respawn in his body after 5 hours fully healed.
What do you mean by important Skills? Is it regale people that kill him or other anomalies?
What's the significance of the mask it's brought up several times and it doesn't seem to contribute to the story? I looked at the draft but I couldn't understand any part of it that was relevant to the mask.
If your going to write a humanoid you have to have a emotional hook to your SCP because right know I have not emotion connection to this SCP. I highly recommend reading this http://www.scp-wiki.net/how-to-write-an-scp.
Good luck!
Thank you for the feedback, I'll work on it
Murder Self
S.C.P-XXX is a humanoid with a white mask that is attached to your skin, the age, tear or clothing of the scp-XXX is variable according to her preference. The main skill of S.C.P-XXx is that when he dies violently, he absorbs the main ability (physical, chemical or general property) of what or who killed him, hours later the body of S.C.P-xxx is revived of its own accord.
Example: scp-xxx is terminated by a scp-xx with great speed, after 5 hours scp-xxx is resuscitated and its speed increases steadily
Tell me if i need fix something
Stop linking your sandbox in an ideas thread.
keep calm, i'm learning how to do this
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This idea seems a bit malformed to me. Are people compelled to murder this person? Is the SCP just a total a-hole? I think what might be more interesting is HOW it gets people to repeatedly murder it. It sounds like you are going for a serious angle but it could be pivoted into dark comedy.
If the SCP is just a person that gained these abilities they may never know they had them. If it is an anomalous creature of some sort than how did it come into being? The fact it gains new powers and abilities makes it feel like its going to act as a hero or villain which doesnt sit well with me.
Some random possible pivots if interested.
Why not make it an abuse magnet? A living invulnerable target dummy/punching bag. Ever heard the term "punchable face?" Well the SCP in question has the most punchable face ever. Whether it reminds you of someone specific or a group of people you hate you just cant help yourself. Blame it for all your problems! Not sure if this basic concept has been done before but I hope this helps in some way.
I will implement it, thanks for your feedback, by the way the origin of the scp is involved in something really dangerous in the foundation, that's why so much censorship, the origin of this scp and another scp class ##### I am saving them for a project in the future, since I need to complete some things
Murder self had been updated, thank you for your feedbacks. tell me if i should add something more